Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be natural, accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the food, then give 1–2 specific, relevant details (ingredients, taste or where you eat it) using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect descriptions.

例: My favourite food is takoyaki. It’s a popular street snack from Osaka made of batter filled with diced octopus, green onion and pickled ginger. I love it because it’s crispy on the outside and soft inside, and I often eat it at festivals or food stalls.

提案: Use a clear past-tense topic sentence and give one or two specific examples. Keep sentences simple and grammatically correct. Use linking words (for example, because) to explain reasons. Avoid unclear words and wrong pronouns.

例: When I was a child, I liked simple home-cooked food, especially curry and rice. My mother made the best curry, which was mild and slightly sweet, so I always asked for seconds.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence then specific seasonal examples with brief explanations and linking words (for example, in summer/whereas in winter). Use correct vocabulary for dishes and correct verb forms.

例: Yes, I do. In summer I usually eat cold treats like kakigōri (shaved ice) and chilled noodles to stay cool, whereas in winter I prefer hot dishes such as nabeyaki udon or hot pot to warm up.

提案: Answer directly and expand briefly with a reason or example using correct tense and linking words (for example, because or so). Keep it concise and natural.

例: No, my favourite food hasn’t changed since childhood because I still enjoy takoyaki’s flavour and texture, and I often eat it when I visit festivals or Osaka.

× My favorite food is takoyaki. Takoyaki is a bowl of hot cake mix. Takoyaki is very famous at on Osaka.

✓ My favorite food is takoyaki. Takoyaki is a type of hot pancake ball. Takoyaki is very famous in Osaka.

Errors: 'a bowl of hot cake mix' is incorrect because takoyaki are battered balls, not a bowl of mix; this is vocabulary rather than grammar but also article use: 'a bowl of' is wrong for plural/ball form. 'at on Osaka' incorrectly uses two prepositions; correct preposition is 'in' for cities. Suggestion: use 'in' with city names and describe takoyaki as 'a type of hot pancake ball' or 'battered octopus balls'. Keep consistent singular/plural and articles.

× When I was your kid, I like curly and rice. Mother is curly on the lice is the best of the tasting good?

✓ When I was a child, I liked curry and rice. My mother's curry was the best and tasted very good.

Errors: 'your kid' incorrectly addresses the examiner; use the speaker's perspective 'a child'. Tense agreement: question asks past so use past tense 'liked' (Grammar Problem Type ID 5 applies but instruction restricts to listed types; here pronoun misuse fits ID 12). 'curly' is a misspelling of 'curry' and 'Mother is curly on the lice' is garbled; correct pronoun and possessive: 'My mother's curry'. Also word order and wording were incorrect; use clear comparative phrasing 'was the best and tasted very good'. Suggestion: use 'When I was a child' and past tense verbs for past habits, and use correct possessive 'my mother's'.

× When I was your kid, I like curly and rice.

✓ When I was a child, I liked curry and rice.

Errors: tense mismatch — the clause 'When I was a child' establishes past time, so the main verb should be past tense 'liked' rather than present 'like'. Also use correct nouns 'child' and 'curry'. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistency for past time clauses.

× In summer I often cold cold food like Kakigori ice crusher. And so on. But winter I want to eat Nabi.

✓ In summer I often eat cold foods like kakigori (shaved ice). In winter I want to eat nabe (hot pot).

Errors: missing verbs ('I often cold cold food' lacks 'eat'); plural noun agreement 'foods' for general items. 'Kakigori ice crusher' is incorrect word choice; use 'kakigori (shaved ice)'. Preposition and article issues: use simple seasonal phrases 'In summer' and 'In winter'. Suggestion: include appropriate verbs such as 'eat', use plural when speaking of general types, and use correct food names or brief explanations.

× No, I haven't changed my favorite food since when I was a child.

✓ No, my favorite food hasn't changed since I was a child.

Errors: unnecessary 'when' after 'since' — 'since' should be followed by a point in time ('I was a child'), not 'when I was'. Also word order and contraction placement: 'my favorite food hasn't changed' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'since' with a time point and place the negative properly: 'hasn't changed since I was a child'.