Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변을 더 명확하고 자연스럽게 만들기 위해 문법 오류와 반복을 줄이고, 주제를 밝힌 뒤 구체적인 이유나 예시를 하나 추가하세요. 연결어를 사용해 문장 흐름을 매끄럽게 하고, 불필요한 중복 표현(예: "when I go to the restaurant" 여러 번)을 피하세요.

例: I like eating meat, especially grilled beef and pork. For example, when I hang out with friends we often choose barbecue restaurants because everyone enjoys sharing different cuts of meat. Therefore, I usually prefer going to a restaurant to eat meat rather than cooking at home.

提案: 어린 시절 선호를 말할 때는 과거 시제와 이유나 빈도 표현을 정확히 사용하세요. 불필요한 반복을 줄이고, 건강에 나쁘다는 점을 말할 때는 이유를 간단히 덧붙이면 설득력이 높아집니다. 연결어(For example, However)를 사용해 문장 연결을 명확히 하세요.

例: When I was a child I loved sweet foods such as chocolate, candy and cake. For example, I often visited bakeries and ate ice cream and jelly after school. However, I realize now that eating so many sweets was bad for my health.

提案: 간단한 질문에는 직접적으로 답을 한 뒤 한두 문장으로 이유를 설명하세요. 문법(현재형·현재진행형), 복수형, 관사 사용을 수정하고 문장을 나눠 더 명확하게 표현하세요.

例: No, I usually eat the same kinds of food throughout the year because my family prefers meat dishes. When we meet for special occasions, we typically choose barbecue or roast meat, so our meals remain similar every year.

提案: 질문에 바로 답한 뒤 변화의 여부를 분명히 설명하세요. 과거와 현재를 비교할 때 시제 사용에 주의하고, 이유나 습관(예: 운동 후에 먹는다)을 구체적으로 설명해 자연스럽게 마무리하세요. 불필요한 반복을 제거하세요.

例: No, my preferences have not changed much; I still enjoy sweet foods like candy, jelly and chocolate ice cream. However, now I try to limit them because they are unhealthy, so I usually allow myself a treat after exercising.

× I like whole kind of meat.

✓ I like all kinds of meat.

This sentence uses 'whole kind' which is incorrect for expressing variety. Use 'all kinds of' to indicate multiple types. Use plural 'kinds' after 'all' and 'of' before the noun.

× So when I go to the restaurant or when I go to the when I hang out with my friends, I always talk to my peoples let's go to the restaurant for eat for meat or other things.

✓ So when I go to a restaurant or when I hang out with my friends, I always tell my friends 'let's go to a restaurant to eat meat or other things.'

Multiple pronoun and word-choice issues: 'the restaurant' should be 'a restaurant' for general situations (article error), 'when I go to the when I hang out' is redundant, 'peoples' is incorrect plural of 'people', and the verb phrase 'for eat' is wrong. Use 'tell my friends' and an infinitive 'to eat'. Also wrap the suggestion in reported speech correctly.

× So I prefer to go to the restaurant to eat some meat.

✓ So I prefer going to restaurants to eat meat.

'To the restaurant' and 'some meat' are grammatically acceptable but repetitive; more natural is 'going to restaurants' (plural for general habit) and 'eat meat' (no 'some' needed). Also use gerund 'prefer doing' or 'prefer to do' consistently.

× When I was young I liked sweet food like chocolate, candy or cake.

✓ When I was young, I liked sweet foods like chocolate, candy, or cake.

Add comma after introductory clause. 'Sweet food' is countable in examples so 'sweet foods' is more natural when listing items. Tense 'liked' is correct.

× I don't know why but whenever when I was young I always went to the restaurant or bakery to eat sweet things like ice cream, Jelly.

✓ I don't know why, but when I was young I often went to restaurants or bakeries to eat sweets like ice cream and jelly.

'Whenever when' is redundant; use 'when' or 'whenever'. 'Always' with past tense can be acceptable but 'often' is more natural. Use plural 'restaurants or bakeries' for generality, and 'sweets' for countable items. Capitalization: 'jelly' should be lowercase.

× So of course that is really bad for child age and child healthy but I prefer.

✓ So of course that was really bad for a child's health, but I still preferred it.

Original has word order and vocabulary problems: 'child age' and 'child healthy' are incorrect. Use 'a child's health' to express health during childhood. Maintain past tense 'was' and 'preferred' to match earlier context.

× No normally it's the same because my family likes meat and whenever we meeting again we always eat some meat we don't like another food so that is the reason we always eat the same food on every years.

✓ No, normally it's the same because my family likes meat, and whenever we meet we always eat meat; we don't like other foods, so that's why we eat the same food every year.

Errors: missing commas, 'whenever we meeting' should be 'whenever we meet' (verb form), 'some meat' unnecessary, 'another food' should be 'other foods' (plural), 'on every years' should be 'every year'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms.

× No, as I told you, I like when I was young.

✓ No, as I told you, when I was young I liked sweets.

Sentence is awkward and mixes tenses. To refer to past preference, use past tense 'I liked' and place time expression correctly: 'When I was young, I liked...'. Also 'I like when I was young' is incorrect.

× I like sweet things. So now of course I get older but I still like to sweet things like candy, Jelly, chocolate ice cream.

✓ I like sweet things. Now that I'm older, I still like sweets like candy, jelly, and chocolate ice cream.

'I get older' should be 'I'm older' or 'I have gotten older'. 'Like to sweet things' is ungrammatical; use 'like sweets'. Capitalization of 'jelly' corrected. Use commas in lists and 'and' before final item.

× But but I know that is really bad for my health. So whenever I go after exercise, I prefer to eat.

✓ But I know that it's really bad for my health, so after I exercise I prefer not to eat sweets.

Original 'So whenever I go after exercise, I prefer to eat.' is unclear. 'Prefer to eat' without object is incomplete. Likely intended meaning is to avoid sweets after exercise, so include 'not' and specify 'sweets'. Also use contraction 'it's' and proper phrasing 'after I exercise'.