Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence naming the food, then give specific reasons and avoid filler phrases. Use correct tense and simple grammar (e.g., singular/plural, articles). Link ideas with a short connector and limit to 2–3 supporting sentences.

例: My favourite food is kebab. I enjoy it because it’s mainly grilled meat seasoned simply with salt and spices, which gives it a rich, smoky flavour. Also, it’s easy to eat on the go, so I often choose it when I’m busy.

提案: Use correct past tense and a clear topic sentence: say what you liked as a child, then give specific examples and reasons. Combine short fragments into full sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid single-word fragments.

例: When I was young, I preferred foods high in carbohydrates. For example, I often ate pasta and pizza because they gave me energy for playing and were easy to prepare.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear statement whether you change your diet seasonally, then give a specific reason and an example. Reduce hesitations and filler words, and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

例: Yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, I avoid seafood in summer because it can spoil more easily in the heat, so I choose grilled meats and salads instead.

提案: Give a clear yes/no topic sentence, then explain with a specific, simple reason. Avoid vague phrases like 'receptors' unless you explain them. Keep sentences concise and connect ideas with 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed several times since I was a child. This is because my tastes developed as I tried new dishes, so each year I liked different flavours and textures more than before.

× My favorite food is kebab because it doesn't have any other products.

✓ My favorite food is kebab because it doesn't have any other ingredients.

The phrase 'other products' is incorrect in this context; 'ingredients' is the correct noun for components of a dish. This is an article/word choice issue categorized under article errors (22). Use specific culinary vocabulary: 'ingredients' rather than 'products'.

× They had meat and some salt or other.

✓ It has meat and some salt, or other seasonings.

'Kebab' is singular, so the verb should agree: 'it has' rather than 'they had'. Also 'or other' is incomplete; specify 'other seasonings' to be clear. This is a subject-verb agreement error (27) and also clarifies noun choice.

× Uh, when I was a young, I prefer to eat.

✓ Uh, when I was young, I preferred to eat...

Use 'when I was young' without the article 'a'. Also the time reference is past, so use past tense 'preferred' rather than present 'prefer'. This is an article error (22) and tense correction (5).

× More carbohydrate.

✓ more carbohydrates.

'Carbohydrate' as a countable/general food category should be plural or expressed as 'more carbohydrate foods'. Use 'carbohydrates' to match 'more'. This is a quantifier/number usage issue (14).

× I love to eat pasta or pizza because they have more carbohydrate.

✓ I loved to eat pasta or pizza because they had more carbohydrates.

Referring to childhood requires past tense 'loved' and 'had'. Also 'carbohydrates' should be plural. This addresses present tense misuse (6) and plural form (1).

× Actually, I, I do this because I, I don't prefer to eat or fish or other, uh, seafood in summer.

✓ Actually, I do this because I don't prefer to eat fish or other seafood in summer.

Remove the extra 'or' before 'fish' and redundant pauses. 'Don't prefer to eat fish' is correct; no modal needed. This is mainly a modality/word order and redundancy issue (4).

× I don't like, I don't like it.

✓ I don't like it.

The repetition is unnecessary. Keep a single clause: 'I don't like it.' This corrects redundancy and keeps subject-verb agreement (27).

× Actually, this change almost every year because I think it's, uh, it's the reason of the change in our, uh, receptors, in our tongue.

✓ Actually, this changes almost every year because I think it's due to changes in the receptors on our tongue.

Use present simple 'changes' to agree with 'almost every year'. 'Reason of the change' is unnatural; use 'due to changes'. 'Receptors on our tongue' is clearer. This fixes tense (6) and preposition/phrase usage (11).