Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'and') and correct verb forms and count nouns (e.g. 'eat them' → 'eat it' or remove pronoun). Avoid repetition.

例: My favourite foods are dumplings and chocolate cake. I especially love dumplings because they remind me of family gatherings when we make them together, and we can fill them with different ingredients like pork or vegetables. Chocolate cake is my treat for special occasions.

提案: Use correct tense (past for childhood) and avoid repetition. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas, and replace vague phrases (e.g. 'internal stress relief') with clearer expressions like 'comforting'.

例: When I was young, I loved eating noodles. They were my comfort food because they were warm and simple, and they made me feel calm after school. I still enjoy them today, though not as often as before.

提案: Organize the answer: state yes/no, then explain with specific seasonal examples and use correct grammar. Use linking words ('for example', 'in summer', 'in winter') and correct plurals. Avoid unclear descriptions like 'watery'.

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in summer I eat cooling fruits like mangoes and lassi, while in winter I prefer warm foods and seasonal fruits such as strawberries and oranges.

提案: Make a clear comparison between past and present using correct tenses and concise sentences. State what you liked before, what you like now, and give a brief reason using linking words like 'because' or 'when'. Avoid unclear phrases and check word order.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I preferred sweet foods and cheese, but now I enjoy spicy dishes because I tried them with friends and developed a taste for stronger flavours.

× Ah, I really like chocolate cake eating them and also dumplings.

✓ Ah, I really like chocolate cake; I enjoy eating it and also dumplings.

The original mixes 'like' with the -ing form incorrectly and uses a plural pronoun that doesn't match 'chocolate cake'. Use 'enjoy eating it' to express preference for the action and ensure pronoun agreement (it for cake). Use a semicolon or conjunction for clarity.

× Especially dumplings. I like it when it always remind me of family gatherings and when we make it together it is so delicious and we can also fill it with different types of ingredients.

✓ Especially dumplings. I like them; they always remind me of family gatherings, and when we make them together they are so delicious and we can fill them with different ingredients.

Dumplings is plural so use 'them' and 'they' not 'it'. 'Remind' should be 'remind' with plural subject 'they'. Use consistent plural verbs and pronouns. Also 'different types of ingredients' is wordy; 'different ingredients' is clearer.

× So when I was young, I really like some noodles.

✓ So when I was young, I really liked noodles.

The sentence refers to a past time 'when I was young' so the verb should be past tense 'liked' not present 'like'.

× I love to eat them.

✓ I loved to eat them.

Since this refers to childhood (past context), change to past tense 'loved' to match time reference. Pronoun 'them' is fine referring to noodles.

× It is my favorite cozy food which remind me and give me some internal stress relief.

✓ It was my favorite cozy food, which reminded me and gave me some inner stress relief.

Use past tense 'was', and verbs 'reminded' and 'gave' to match. 'Inner' is more natural than 'internal' in this context. Use commas to set off the relative clause.

× And I really like them now also.

✓ And I really like them now as well.

The sentence is acceptable but wording 'now also' is non-native; 'now as well' or 'still' is clearer. Ensure present tense 'like' is used for current preference.

× But at when I'm young I like it too much.

✓ But when I was young I liked it very much.

Remove 'at' and use past tense 'was' and 'liked' to match past time reference. Use 'very much' instead of 'too much' for positive emphasis.

× Yes I do eat foods at different time of year as I'm live in India and India have most of the foods for summers which are like watery and in winters I like the others foods especially the foods like summers in mango and winters and strawberries and all.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year because I live in India. India has many seasonal foods: in summer fruits like mangoes, which are watery, and in winter fruits like strawberries.

Numerous preposition and noun errors: use 'at different times of the year' and 'I live in India'. Verb-subject agreement: 'India has' not 'India have'. 'Foods for summers' -> 'seasonal foods' or 'foods in summer'. Use commas and clearer structure. Pluralize 'mangoes' and simplify phrasing.

× Yes, my favorite food has cheese as I have liked sweet things more in my AS when I'm child and now I like spicy foods.

✓ Yes, my favorite foods included cheese because I liked sweet things more as a child, but now I like spicy foods.

Use past tense 'included' or 'used to include' and 'liked' for childhood. 'AS' unclear—interpret as 'as'. Use 'as a child' not 'when I'm child'. Ensure tense shift 'now I like' is present.

× As I have grown up I've seen people eating spicy and when I started eating I like it too.

✓ As I grew up, I saw people eating spicy food, and when I started trying it, I liked it too.

Use simple past 'grew up' or present perfect consistently; here 'grew up' and 'saw' fit. 'Eating spicy' should be 'eating spicy food'. 'When I started eating' is vague—'started trying it' is clearer. Use past 'liked' to match timeframe.