Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答比較自然，但語法和表達有重複與小錯誤。建議：1) 開頭直接給主題句（簡潔），2) 用一兩句具體原因或例子支持，不要重複意思，3) 注意時態與連接詞，使表達更流暢。具體可練習把三句合併為兩句，並用連接詞如 because / so / for example。

例: My favourite food is ice cream because it tastes great and quickly lifts my mood. For example, I often have a scoop after a stressful day at work to cheer myself up.

提案: 回答存在時態錯誤、重複和語法不準確，內容也較模糊。建議：1) 使用過去時描述童年（I liked），2) 修正不正確的片語（e.g. pass the time, be bored），3) 提供更具體的例子與時間語標，並刪除重複詞。

例: When I was young, I liked snacks the most because they tasted yummy and helped me pass the time when I felt bored. For example, after finishing my final exams, I spent the whole afternoon snacking with my friends.

提案: 回答偏離問題核心（季節性飲食），並有語法及用詞錯誤（e.g. 'in this year','degrees, masters degree'）。建議：1) 直接回應是否隨季節改變飲食，2) 使用清晰的例子說明季節性差異（如夏天吃清爽食物，冬天吃熱湯），3) 簡潔避免與主題無關的資訊。

例: Yes. I tend to eat lighter, fresher foods like salads and cold noodles in summer, while in winter I prefer warm, hearty dishes such as soups and stews. For example, last winter I often had hot noodle soup to keep warm.

提案: 回答表達基本清楚但有語法問題和冗餘（'this sweet food such as'、重複情緒原因）。建議：1) 用更簡潔句子說明變化情況，2) 修正語法（現在完成或一般現在時），3) 給出一兩個具體例子或補充說明為什麼沒有改變。

例: Not really — I've always preferred sweet foods. Things like ice cream and cake still cheer me up, so I still choose them when I want a treat.

× My favorite food is ice cream because it tastes good and can improve my mood quickly.

✓ My favorite food is ice cream because it tastes good and can improve my mood quickly.

该句无明显冠词错误，保留原句。

× For example, I usually eat ice cream when I feel depressed.

✓ For example, I usually eat ice cream when I feel depressed.

该句代词和人称使用正确，无需更改。

× That is why I like ice cream most.

✓ That is why I like ice cream the most.

“most”在此作最高级副词时通常与定冠词“the”连用，表示“最喜欢”。建议加上“the”。

× When when I was young I like snacks most because it tastes yummy and can help me past the time when I get borrowed.

✓ When I was young I liked snacks the most because they tasted yummy and could help me pass the time when I felt bored.

句子描述过去的习惯和感觉，应使用过去时：'was'后面主句用过去时'liked'；'it tastes'改为'tasted'；'can help'改为'could help'；'past'为拼写错误，应为'pass'；'get borrowed'结构错误，应为'felt bored'（感到无聊）。同时'snacks'为复数，后续代词应为'they'。

× For example, once I finished my final exam that I ate the snacks all the afternoon.

✓ For example, once I finished my final exam, I ate snacks all afternoon.

描述过去事件应使用过去时：'finished'正确，去掉多余的'that'从句连接词，并将'the snacks'改为'snacks'更自然；'all the afternoon'改为'all afternoon'。

× Yes, in this year, I eat various foods at different times because I'm pursuing my degrees, masters degree at City University of Hong Kong.

✓ Yes, this year I eat various foods at different times because I'm pursuing my master's degree at the City University of Hong Kong.

表达当前正在进行的学习应使用现在进行时的完成结构（或保持现在进行时）描述学位：'master's degree'需要所有格和单数形式；'the City University of Hong Kong'前可加定冠词更正式；删除冗余逗号。若要更自然可说'I am pursuing a master's degree at City University of Hong Kong.'。

× For example, once, uh, I went to Changzhou Island to have seafood with my friends.

✓ For example, I went to Changzhou Island to have seafood with my friends.

句子时态正确为过去时，移除多余的填充词'uh'和不必要的逗号使句子更流畅。

× Umm, not much had changed.

✓ Umm, not much has changed.

问的是从儿童到现在的变化，常用现在完成时表示从过去延续到现在的状态，故'had changed'（过去完成时）改为'has changed'（现在完成时）。

× I always prefer sweet food because this sweet food such as sugar, ice cream and cake can make me feel better when I feel alone and depressed and I really love it.

✓ I have always preferred sweet foods because sweets such as sugar, ice cream, and cake can make me feel better when I feel lonely and depressed, and I really love them.

动词时态：表示长期偏好用现在完成时'have preferred'或一般现在时'prefer'均可；把'sweet food'改为复数'sweet foods'或'sweets'更自然；'alone'表达“孤独”应为'lonely'；'it'指代复数不正确，改为'them'。建议使用'I've always preferred sweet foods'或'I always prefer sweet foods'。

× This.

✓ (remove)

单独的'This.'不是完整句子且无意义，应删除或补全为完整句子，例如'That's why I like them.'。