Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence naming one favourite dish, then give 1–2 specific details (why you like it, ingredients or when you eat it). Avoid listing many items and repeating words. Use linking words like because or especially to connect ideas.

例: My favourite food is traditional Nepali dal bhat (rice and lentil soup). I especially enjoy it because the dal is flavorful and the seasonal vegetables and pickles add a nice contrast. I usually eat it at home with my family on weekends.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and one specific reason with clearer grammar. Reduce fillers (uh) and avoid vague phrases like 'old food chips.' Use past tense consistently and a linking word such as because or so.

例: When I was young, I liked to eat potato chips and other snack foods. I ate them because my friends were eating them at school, and I wanted to join in.

提案: Answer directly and give one or two specific examples of seasonal foods. Use present simple for habits and include linking words like for example or in winter to make it coherent. Avoid repetition of words like 'regular, regular'.

例: Yes, we eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in winter we cook more warm soups and root vegetables, while in summer we prefer light salads and seasonal greens with dal and rice.

提案: Start with a clear contrast using a linking phrase such as 'Yes, it has changed.' Give one specific childhood favourite and one current favourite and explain why the change happened (taste, health, influence). Keep sentences short and correct tense usage.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I loved sweet dishes like rice pudding, but now I prefer spicier snacks such as spicy potato chips because I enjoy stronger flavours and eat out more often.

× My favorite food name is Nepali traditional food like a potato, Cisco, rice, Dal and some vegetables, Curry and Pickles. I really like to enjoy that first.

✓ My favorite foods are Nepali traditional foods like potatoes, rice, dal, vegetables, curry, and pickles. I especially enjoy those dishes.

Errors: article and countability choices ('food name' incorrect; 'a potato' should be plural when listing foods; 'Cisco' unclear likely 'potato chips' so corrected to relevant items). Use of singular/plural and articles was incorrect. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when listing multiple items and omit unnecessary 'name'. Use commas and 'and' before last item; use specific food names consistently. Grammar problem type ID:22

× When I was young, I really like to eat, uh, some junk food like old food chips, because in a small age, uh, I saw the, my friends are eating chips and I really like to eat that kind of chips.

✓ When I was young, I really liked to eat junk food like chips because, at a young age, I saw my friends eating chips and I wanted to eat them too.

Errors: tense inconsistency (mixing past 'was' with present 'like/are eating'), awkward phrasing ('old food chips', 'in a small age'). Correct to past simple 'liked' and 'saw' to match time frame. Suggestion: Keep past tense for habits in the past and use natural phrases like 'at a young age' and 'wanted to eat them too.' Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yeah, We'll do different foods at different times of the years. Uh, we eat normally our regular, regular food is our Dal, rice and vegetable, seasonable vegetables and in the different times we eat.

✓ Yes, we eat different foods at different times of the year. Normally our regular food is dal, rice, and seasonal vegetables, and we eat other dishes at different times.

Errors: incorrect contraction/capitalization ('We'll' wrong meaning), pluralization ('years' should be 'year' in this expression), word order and redundancy ('eat normally our regular, regular food is'). Suggestion: Use 'we eat different foods at different times of the year.' Place adjectives before nouns and remove repetition; use 'seasonal vegetables' for correct adjective form. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yeah, when I was a child, I really like to eat some sweetest foods like uh, rice pudding or rice and milk. And I, I, and nowadays I really like to spicy food like, uh, potato chips and extra chips.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I really liked to eat sweet foods like rice pudding. Nowadays I like spicy foods, such as potato chips.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('was' with 'like' should be past 'liked'), adjective form ('sweetest' inappropriate for general preference), awkward repetition and phrasing ('I, I, and nowadays', 'really like to spicy food', 'extra chips'). Suggestion: Use past tense for childhood preferences and present tense for current preferences; use 'sweet' or 'sweet foods' and 'spicy foods' with correct word order. Grammar problem type ID:6