Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct grammar (e.g., 'one of my favourite foods', 'not much oil or salt'), and add one specific detail or personal reason. Use one linking phrase if you add details.

例: My favourite food is sushi. It’s a classic Japanese dish, and I like it because it’s light and usually low in oil and salt. For example, I often choose salmon nigiri at restaurants because it tastes fresh and makes me feel healthy.

提案: Use correct tense and vocabulary, avoid repetition and fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense ('I liked...'), then give a specific reason and contrast with now using a linking word (e.g., 'but' or 'however'). Correct word choice (maize -> corn) and grammar ('there was' or 'it had').

例: When I was young, I liked to eat corn a lot because my parents often cooked it as a side dish. However, I don’t eat it as much now because the way it’s prepared at home is usually quite oily.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then expand with clear linking words. Avoid contradictory starts ('No, but...')—choose 'Yes' and explain. Improve vocabulary ('traditional festival foods', 'special dishes') and grammar ('during those festivals'). Be specific with one concrete example of a festival food.

例: Yes, I do. During Chinese New Year, for example, my family eats dumplings and sticky rice cakes, while at the Mid-Autumn Festival we eat mooncakes. These special dishes are only eaten at those times, so my diet changes with the festivals.

提案: Answer directly and use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary. Use past and present tenses properly ('I preferred... but now I prefer...'). Remove filler words and correct phrases ('dishes high in oil and salt' rather than 'some dishes like oil or salt'). Provide one specific example of a childhood favourite and a current favourite to illustrate the change.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I preferred meat dishes such as fried chicken, but now I prefer vegetable-based meals like stir-fried greens or steamed vegetables because I try to eat healthier and avoid oily, salty food.

× Well, I think one of my favorite food must be sushi.

✓ Well, I think one of my favorite foods must be sushi.

The phrase 'one of my favorite' requires a plural noun after it. Use 'foods' because you are selecting one item from a group of favorite foods. To improve, remember: 'one of my' + plural noun (e.g., 'one of my favorite books').

× I think there is, uh, no much oil or salt in this kind of dishes.

✓ I think there is not much oil or salt in these kinds of dishes.

'No much' is incorrect; use 'not much' for uncountable nouns. Also 'this kind of dishes' mixes singular 'this kind' with plural 'dishes'; use 'these kinds of dishes' or 'this kind of dish'. For clarity, say 'not much oil or salt in these kinds of dishes' or 'in this kind of dish, there is not much oil or salt.'

× So you can also think that, uh, I eat different foods at different times of the year.

✓ So you can also think that I eat different foods at different times of the year.

Sentence is close to correct but contains filler 'uh' which is unnecessary; grammar itself is fine. Keep present simple to express habitual actions: 'I eat different foods at different times of the year.' Remove fillers in formal responses for clarity.

× Well, when I was younger, like when I was still a primary school student, I think I prefer to eat maize when I have meals.

✓ Well, when I was younger, when I was in primary school, I preferred to eat maize at meals.

Talking about past habits requires past tense: use 'preferred' instead of 'prefer' and 'was in primary school' is more natural than 'was still a primary school student.' Also use 'at meals' or 'with meals' for frequency. To improve, match verb tense to the past time frame.

× But now I think there's too much oil in the maze, so it's not really healthy.

✓ But now I think there's too much oil in the maize, so it's not really healthy.

This appears to be a typo: 'maze' should be 'maize.' 'There's' is acceptable for 'there is' with uncountable noun 'maize.' To improve, check spelling and choose appropriate articles or determiners if needed.

× No, but actually in China we have many different kinds of festival and drawing those festivals, umm, we always need to make and taste some characteristics food.

✓ No, but actually in China we have many different kinds of festivals, and during those festivals we always make and taste some characteristic foods.

Multiple issues: 'kinds of festival' should be plural 'kinds of festivals.' 'Drawing' is wrong word; use 'during.' 'Characteristics food' should be 'characteristic foods' (adjective + plural noun). Use conjunction 'and' appropriately and pluralize where required. Improve by using correct preposition 'during' and matching adjective-noun agreement.

× So you can also think that, uh, I eat different foods at different times of the year.

✓ So you can also think that I eat different foods at different times of the year.

Original repeated; primary issue was filler. The sentence correctly uses plural 'foods' for different items. Maintain plural when referring to multiple types of food.

× Yeah, sure. I think might has has changed a lot.

✓ Yeah, sure. I think it might have changed a lot.

Incorrect word order and form: 'might has has' is wrong. Use the modal 'might' followed by the present perfect 'have changed' to indicate possible change since past. Use 'it' as subject if referring to 'my favourite food.' To improve, use 'might have' + past participle for speculation about past changes.

× Like when I was younger in primary school I prefer to eat dishes made of meat, but now I think it's not really healthy and now I prefer to is something made of vegetables or some dishes like oil or salt.

✓ When I was younger in primary school, I preferred to eat dishes made of meat, but now I think that's not really healthy, and now I prefer dishes made of vegetables or dishes with less oil or salt.

Mixes past and present incorrectly: use 'preferred' for past habit. 'Prefer to is something made of' is ungrammatical; use 'prefer dishes made of' or 'prefer something made from.' Also clarify 'dishes like oil or salt' which is wrong—use 'dishes with less oil or salt.' Improve by matching tenses and using correct noun phrases (e.g., 'dishes made of vegetables').