Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce fillers (uh, uh) and speak more fluently. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain why you like those foods (taste, health, cultural reasons). Keep answer to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like because or because of to add clarity.

例: My favourite foods are South Indian dishes such as dosa and idli because they are light and easy to digest. I also enjoy them for their variety of chutneys and sambar, which add a lot of flavour.

提案: Provide a short topic sentence and add one supporting detail explaining why you liked those foods or how often you ate them. Use a linking word like because or often to make it coherent. Avoid overly short answers when possible.

例: When I was younger, I mainly liked pizza and burgers because they were tasty and convenient. I often ate them at parties or on weekends with my family.

提案: Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and remove hesitations. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a linked detail about seasonal changes using linking words like however or for example. Be specific about seasonal vegetables and why you choose them (taste, availability, nutrition).

例: My diet is fairly consistent throughout the year, as I usually eat roti with lettuce and seasonal vegetables. However, the specific vegetables change with the seasons; for example, in winter I eat more spinach and carrots because they are fresh and nutritious then.

提案: Avoid repetition and correct vocabulary errors ("South Indian disease" should be "South Indian dishes"). Give a concise topic sentence stating the change, then briefly explain the reason for the change using because or as; add one specific example to support your point. Reduce hesitations and repetition.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. When I was a child I liked pizza and burgers, but now I prefer South Indian dishes such as dosa and idli because I appreciate their flavours and they are healthier for me.

× My favorite food is the South Indian, uh uh, like dosa and idli.

✓ My favorite food is South Indian cuisine, like dosa and idli.

The speaker used an unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'South Indian' and an incorrect noun 'the South Indian'. Use 'South Indian cuisine' to name the food type. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: say 'My favorite food is South Indian cuisine, like dosa and idli.'

× When I was younger I mainly liked pizza and burger.

✓ When I was younger, I mainly liked pizza and burgers.

Plural form 'burgers' is required when speaking generally about a food type; this is both an article/quantifier and plural issue. Also add a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: use plural for countable food items when referring to them in general.

× Now, my staple diet almost the same.

✓ Now, my staple diet is almost the same.

The sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'is' for the subject 'my staple diet'. This is a subject-verb agreement/omission error. Suggestion: include the correct form of 'to be' for present description.

× I usually include uh, includes lettuce and vegetables with roti.

✓ I usually include lettuce and vegetables with roti.

The speaker incorrectly repeated verbs with different forms ('include' and 'includes'). For the subject 'I' use the base form 'include'. Remove the redundant 'includes'. Suggestion: say 'I usually include...'.

× However, the uh type of vegetable changes according to the season.

✓ However, the type of vegetables changes according to the season.

'Type of vegetable' is awkward when referring to multiple kinds across seasons; use plural 'type of vegetables' or 'types of vegetables'. Also remove filler 'uh'. Verb 'changes' is fine. Suggestion: 'the type of vegetables changes' or 'the kinds of vegetables change'.

× For example, in the winter I eat a lot of spinach and carrot.

✓ For example, in winter I eat a lot of spinach and carrots.

Use 'in winter' (no article) or 'in the winter'; both acceptable but keep consistent. 'Carrot' should be plural 'carrots' when speaking generally. Suggestion: 'in winter I eat a lot of spinach and carrots.'

× Yes, it has. Uh, as I mentioned earlier, I enjoyed pizza and burger when I was young.

✓ Yes, it has. As I mentioned earlier, I enjoyed pizza and burgers when I was young.

Again, use plural 'burgers' for general reference. Remove filler 'uh'. Tense 'enjoyed' is past and matches 'when I was young'. Suggestion: 'I enjoyed pizza and burgers when I was young.'

× I was younger, uh, now I prefer uh, now I prefer uh, South Indian disease.

✓ I was younger. Now I prefer South Indian dishes.

Sentence had repetition, filler words and a wrong word 'disease' instead of 'dishes'. Split into two sentences for clarity: past reference and present preference. Use 'dishes' (plural) and remove fillers. Suggestion: 'I was younger. Now I prefer South Indian dishes.'