Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition, use a clear topic sentence and concise supporting detail, and choose more natural phrasing. Combine similar ideas into one or two sentences and avoid filler words. Add a brief reason or feeling to enrich the answer.

例: My favourite food is the typical Nepali dish dal bhat — lentil soup with rice. I also enjoy eating flatbread with spiced vegetables sometimes because the spices are comforting and the meal is very satisfying.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, correct simple grammar (past tense, subject-verb agreement), and avoid repetition. Give a specific reason with linking words (because/so) and one brief detail about taste or memory.

例: When I was young, I usually ate dal bhat (lentils and rice) because my parents believed it was nutritious. As a child, I also liked it because it was warm and filling after a long day of play.

提案: Answer directly and coherently: say yes or no, then give concrete seasonal examples with linking words. Fix unclear phrases and be specific about which foods change and why (weather, festivals, availability). Limit to two to three sentences.

例: Yes, I eat different foods at certain times of the year. For example, in summer we eat more seasonal fruits like mangoes, while in winter we have hot dishes such as spiced lentil soup and steamed vegetables to stay warm.

提案: Give a clear direct answer (Yes/No) then support it with concise reasons using correct grammar. Avoid repetition and use linking words like because and therefore. Add one brief personal detail (memory or result) to enrich the response.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed since childhood because I still prefer dal bhat for its nutrition and energy. It also reminds me of family meals, so eating it feels comforting.

× My my favorite food is typical Nepali food of lentil soup and rice.

✓ My favorite food is the typical Nepali dish lentil soup and rice.

Repetition 'My my' is an error (typo) and 'typical Nepali food of' is unidiomatic. Use the definite article 'the' before 'typical Nepali dish' and 'dish' fits better than 'food of'. This yields a natural noun phrase. Suggestion: remove duplicate word and use 'the typical Nepali dish' or 'typical Nepali dish' depending on context.

× However, I also like to eat flat bread with spiced vegetables.

✓ However, I also like to eat flatbread with spiced vegetables.

'Flat bread' is commonly written as one word 'flatbread' or as 'flat bread' but 'flatbread' is more natural. No article is needed here. Suggestion: use the compound noun 'flatbread' and keep 'spiced vegetables'.

× When I was young I took typical Nepali food of dalbat and rice because my parents always re recommended to take that because it have good nutrition.

✓ When I was young I ate the typical Nepali dish dalbhat and rice because my parents always recommended that I eat it since it has good nutritional value.

Multiple issues: 'took' is incorrect verb choice for eating — use 'ate' (past tense). 're recommended' is a duplication/typo; use 'recommended' (past). 'to take that' is unnatural; use 'that I eat it'. 'it have' is subject-verb agreement error; 'it has' is correct. 'good nutrition' is better as 'good nutritional value' or 'good nutrition'. Suggestions: use 'ate', correct typos, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use natural collocations like 'recommended that I eat it' and 'nutritional value'.

× Power my lunch and dinner. I usually take typical Nepali food of lentil soup and rice and some on the weekends.

✓ I eat those for lunch and dinner. I usually eat the typical Nepali dish lentil soup and rice, and sometimes different foods on the weekends.

'Power my lunch and dinner' is meaningless — likely a wrong word; replace with 'I eat those for lunch and dinner'. 'I usually take' is unnatural for eating; use 'I usually eat'. 'and some on the weekends' is incomplete; make explicit: 'and sometimes different foods on the weekends.' Suggestion: use 'eat' instead of 'take' and write complete phrases.

× We also try to take pain bread and spice vegetables.

✓ We also try to eat plain bread and spiced vegetables.

'take' is incorrect verb for eating; use 'eat'. 'pain bread' is a typo for 'plain bread'. 'spice vegetables' should be 'spiced vegetables' (adjective form). Suggestion: correct typos and use 'eat plain bread and spiced vegetables.'

× Similarly, we also take seasonal fruits like fruit.

✓ Similarly, we also eat seasonal fruits such as mangoes and bananas (or other seasonal fruits).

'take seasonal fruits like fruit' is vague and repetitive. Use 'eat seasonal fruits' and give examples or say 'such as seasonal fruits.' Suggestion: avoid repetition and provide clear examples or keep it general: 'eat seasonal fruits.'

× No, I haven't seen my favorite food since I was I was a child.

✓ No, my favourite food hasn't changed since I was a child.

The original mixes meanings: 'haven't seen my favorite food' is incorrect for asking if favourite food changed. The correct response is present perfect 'hasn't changed' with 'since I was a child.' Remove duplicate 'I was'. Suggestion: use 'hasn't changed' to indicate continuity and remove duplicated words.

× I've I take same food patterns since my childhood because they have a good nutritious value and they give more energy for me and I also feel comfort to eat.

✓ I've followed the same eating patterns since my childhood because they have good nutritional value, give me more energy, and are comforting to eat.

Multiple issues: 'I've I take' is garbled; use 'I've followed' or 'I have eaten'. Use present perfect 'have followed' for an action continuing from past to present. 'same food patterns' -> 'same eating patterns'. 'good nutritious value' -> 'good nutritional value'. 'they give more energy for me' should be 'give me more energy'. 'I also feel comfort to eat' -> 'are comforting to eat' or 'they make me feel comfortable when eating.' Suggestion: use present perfect for ongoing habits, correct collocations, and proper pronoun placement ('give me').