Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct verb forms. Add one specific detail (type of pasta or sauce) and a linking word to make it coherent. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

例: My favourite food is pasta. I especially enjoy spaghetti with tomato and basil sauce because its bright flavour makes special occasions feel more festive.

提案: Answer directly and use consistent vocabulary. Clarify whether you mean Italian food or ramen, and correct tense/grammar. Use linking words to connect reason (e.g., because) and give a specific memory or reason why you liked it.

例: When I was young I loved ramen, especially Shin Ramyeon, because I liked the spicy flavour and it made me feel energetic after school.

提案: Be concise and use correct tense. State clearly whether your diet changes by season or holidays, name specific foods and explain why briefly. Avoid hesitations and unclear words (e.g., 'samyata'—if unfamiliar, describe it). Use a linking word like 'for example' or 'during'.

例: Yes, my diet changes at holidays. For example, at Christmas I usually have a special cake, but this year I plan to eat a dish called samgyetang, which is a healthy chicken soup I find restorative.

提案: Provide a clear comparison using past and present tenses. Start with a topic sentence stating whether it changed, then give specific examples and a reason using linking words like 'but' or 'now'. Keep to 2–3 well-formed sentences.

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. I used to eat a lot of instant ramyeon and snacks, but now I prefer healthier options like salads and Korean dishes because they make me feel more energetic and healthier.

× Pasta is delivered very delicious.

✓ Pasta is very delicious when delivered.

The phrase 'delivered very delicious' uses an adjective incorrectly after a passive verb. 'Delicious' should describe the pasta and 'delivered' needs to be part of a clause. Rewriting as 'Pasta is very delicious when delivered' places the adjective correctly and clarifies meaning. Consider using adverbs only to modify verbs (e.g. 'is delivered quickly') and adjectives to describe nouns.

× I usually enjoy eat the pasta.

✓ I usually enjoy eating pasta.

The verb 'enjoy' must be followed by a gerund (-ing form), not the base form 'eat'. Also, omit the definite article before a general food when speaking generally. Use 'eating' to form the correct verb pattern: 'enjoy eating'.

× When I was young I enjoyed it Italian.

✓ When I was young I enjoyed Italian food.

The original sentence uses 'it' incorrectly and lacks the noun 'food'. Use 'enjoyed Italian food' to correctly combine the verb with the nationality adjective plus the noun. Avoid unnecessary pronouns.

× I really liked the ramen.

✓ I really liked ramen.

When referring to ramen in general, English often omits the definite article. 'The ramen' implies a specific bowl; 'ramen' as a general food is uncountable here.

× my favorite ramen was a Shin ramyeon.

✓ My favorite ramen was Shin Ramyeon.

Brand or dish names do not require an indefinite article. Capitalize proper name 'Shin Ramyeon.' Also 'ramen' can be used without 'a' when naming a type.

× It was very spicy but very delicious.

✓ It was very spicy but also very delicious.

Add a connector 'also' to show contrast and improve flow. Grammatically both adjectives are fine but 'also' makes the relationship clearer.

× I think I thought that it very improve my energy.

✓ I thought that it really improved my energy.

The original has tense confusion and missing auxiliary/inflection. Use past tense 'thought' and past simple 'improved' to match. Add adverb 'really' to modify 'improved.' Avoid repeating similar verbs ('I think I thought').

× Oh of course, uh, when the holiday when the Christmas I usually eat the cake, but I planning to eat the samyata.

✓ Oh, of course. During the Christmas holiday I usually eat cake, but I am planning to eat samyata.

Multiple issues: word order, articles, and verb form. Use 'During the Christmas holiday' or 'At Christmas.' 'Eat cake' (no article) is typical when speaking generally. 'I am planning' (present continuous) is required for future plans. Break into clearer clauses.

× Or is this this Christmas?

✓ Or is that this Christmas?

The repeated 'this' is incorrect; choose 'that' or a single 'this' depending on meaning. 'Is that this Christmas?' refers to the time in question. Avoid duplicate words.

× It is very I think it is very special and healthy food for me.

✓ I think it is a very special and healthy food for me.

Original repeats phrases and misorders words. Move 'I think' to the start and include the article 'a' before 'very special and healthy food.' This creates a grammatically complete sentence.

× When I was younger, I usually like the ramyeon and snack like, uh, unhealthy food, uh, when a current,

✓ When I was younger, I usually liked ramyeon and snacks like unhealthy food, but currently,

Past habitual actions require past tense 'liked' not 'like.' Use plural 'snacks' for multiple items. 'When a current' is incorrect; use 'but currently' to contrast past and present.

× but currently I usually enjoy the healthy food like, uh, salad, like uh, Korean food, uh,

✓ but currently I usually enjoy healthy food like salads and Korean dishes,

Use plural forms 'salads' and 'dishes' when speaking generally. Omit unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'healthy food.' This keeps present habitual tense consistent.

× I think that it, it made me very healthy and energy.

✓ I think that it has made me very healthy and energetic.

Use present perfect 'has made' to describe change from past to present. 'Energy' is a noun; the adjective 'energetic' should describe a person. Remove duplicated 'it'.