Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сфокусируйтесь на ясной структуре ответа: начните с прямого утверждения (тема), затем дайте 1–2 конкретные причины или примера. Избегайте долгих пауз и слов-паразитов (uh, um). Используйте связки (for example, when, because) для логичности. Также названия блюд произносите чётко и кратко, и уточните контекст (почему вы выбираете это блюдо в холод/жару).

例: My favourite food depends on the season. In cold weather I like a hearty dish called Sherpa (a type of dumpling) because it is warming and filling. In hot weather I prefer light soups since they are refreshing and easy to digest.

提案: Начинайте с простого предложения о прошлом (topic sentence), затем приведите конкретные примеры и причины. Устраните повторения и логически свяжите предложения словами (when, because, so). Говорите в нужном времени (past tense) и избегайте смешения времён. Старайтесь использовать точные слова (e.g. "when I was young", "I liked", "because").

例: When I was young, I liked hearty foods in winter because they kept me warm. In summer I preferred light soups that were easy to digest after playing sports. My favourite childhood dish was called Pillow, which my family cooked often.

提案: Давайте прямой ответ (yes/no) и объясняйте конкретно с 1–2 примерами. Избегайте общих или бессвязных фраз. Используйте связки (for example, in winter, in summer) и говорите ясно о причинах (to stay warm, to stay hydrated). Сосредоточьтесь на логике и краткости (не более 4-5 предложений).

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in winter I eat more filling meals like stews to stay warm, while in summer I choose salads and soups to stay cool and hydrated.

提案: Отвечайте прямо и используйте сравнение past vs present. Начните с "Yes, it has" или "No, it hasn't", затем объясните почему и приведите конкретные изменения. Избегайте лишних фраз и говорите в подходящих временах. Чётко назовите блюда и причины изменения вкуса.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood. I used to prefer soups all year because they felt comforting, but now I eat more Pillow, a popular local dish, because I enjoy its flavours and variety.

× Well, I would like to say my favorite food is, uh, is that it's independent as their season.

✓ Well, I would like to say my favorite food depends on the season.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and wrong vocabulary ('independent as their season') causing unclear meaning. Use 'depends on the season' to express that preference changes with seasons. Improve by using subject-verb-object order and a clear verb ('depend on').

× If the season is a very, uh, cold, I would like to eat some, uh, parties food, which is the name is Sherpa or, uh, uh, pillow.

✓ If the season is very cold, I would like to eat some party food called Sherpa or pillow.

'A very cold' incorrectly uses an article; 'cold' should be used without 'a'. 'Parties food' is wrong pluralization and word choice; use 'party food'. 'Which is the name is' is redundant—use 'called'. Ensure adjective placement before nouns and correct noun forms.

× That is it very hard for me, Nicole, when the weather is hot, I prefer to eat the soup, which is it very easy.

✓ It is very hard for me when the weather is hot; I prefer to eat soup because it is very light.

The sentence uses redundant pronouns ('that is it', 'which is it') and a likely incorrect adjective ('easy' for food). Replace with clear pronouns ('it') and appropriate adjectives ('light', 'easy to eat'). Separate ideas with a semicolon or period to fix run-on structure.

× Well, when I was a young I always I would like to eat the summer in a winter summer, very hot scenes which is it make me in a snow days very quiet and I'm very healthy.

✓ When I was young, I always liked to eat in summer and winter; in very hot weather I enjoyed cold foods that kept me comfortable and healthy on snowy days.

'A young' incorrectly uses the indefinite article; correct phrase is 'when I was young'. Tense inconsistency: 'would like' with past time should be 'liked'. The original has mixed seasons and unclear clauses; restructure into coherent clauses and use appropriate past tense verbs.

× In the summer I would like to eat some extra soup which is very easy to running at something as much as I have been sportsman for that.

✓ In the summer I liked to eat light soups because they are easy to digest and suitable when I do sports.

'Easy to running' is incorrect; use 'easy to digest' or 'easy to prepare'. 'I have been sportsman' is ungrammatical—use 'I am a sportsman' or 'when I play sports'. Match tense and use correct verb + noun forms.

× My favorite was pillow.

✓ My favorite was pillow (a local dish called pillow).

The sentence lacks context; 'pillow' as a dish name is fine but add clarification. Ensure noun is capitalized if proper name and optionally include explanation.

× Well, definitely I would like to do it also every time I do it in a different season, in a different times, I eat another food for for my human bodies also for my hands and somewhere another in a snow day, another that that is make me very magnificent guy for in this season and very well.

✓ Definitely, I eat different foods in different seasons and at different times; I choose foods for my body according to the weather.

Excessive and incorrect pronouns ('do it', 'for my hands') and repetition make the sentence unclear. Simplify with clear subject and verbs and remove irrelevant pronouns. Use plural 'times' without 'a' and correct prepositions ('in different seasons').

× Well, when I was child, always I would like to eat a soup in a hot taste or, uh, an all on, uh, seasons.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I always liked to eat hot soup in all seasons.

Missing article in 'was child' — should be 'a child'. 'Would like' is awkward for past habitual action; use 'liked'. 'A hot taste' should be 'hot soup' or 'spicy soup'. Clean up word order for natural English.

× Right now I change it already.

✓ Right now I have already changed my preference.

'Change it already' uses simple present incorrectly for a completed action; use present perfect 'have changed' to indicate a recent change. Also specify 'preference' for clarity.

× I didn't eat the soup in a hot day.

✓ I don't eat soup on hot days.

Tense and article errors: if describing current habit use present simple 'don't eat'. Use 'on hot days' for correct preposition and plural to indicate general habit.

× Also on the other high on the other season.

✓ Also in other seasons.

Phrase is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'in other seasons' as a concise, correct expression with proper preposition.

× And I would like to eat more peel off more designed pillow, which is popular in my country right now.

✓ I now prefer to eat a dish called 'pillow', which is more popular in my country right now.

'Peel off more designed pillow' is nonsensical. Restructure to express preference and name the dish clearly. Use 'prefer' for current preference and remove repeated words.

× And I would like to eat more than what I want.

✓ And I tend to eat more than I need or want.

Original phrase 'more than what I want' is awkward; use 'more than I need' or 'more than I want' without 'what'. Clarify meaning with 'tend to' if describing habit.