Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence (name the food), avoid hesitations and incorrect words (momo is a dumpling, not a fruit), and give 1–2 specific supporting details (flavour, ingredients, when you eat it). Use linking words to connect ideas and keep to 3–4 sentences total.

例: My favourite food is momo, a Tibetan-style dumpling popular in Nepal. I love them because they are juicy and well-seasoned, often filled with seasoned meat or vegetables. I usually eat momo as a snack or for dinner, especially when I want something warm and comforting.

提案: Answer directly about childhood preferences with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition ("uh", filler words) and grammatical errors. Give specific examples and explain briefly why you liked them. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' to make it coherent.

例: When I was young, I preferred mild foods because I couldn't tolerate spicy flavours. For example, I often ate plain chow mein and steamed rice with vegetables, because these dishes were gentle on my stomach and easy to eat.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, and give one or two specific seasonal examples with reasons. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'because' to make the answer logical and concise.

例: Yes, our diet changes with the seasons and festivals. For example, during Asar we typically eat curd and chura because they are traditional festival foods, and during some festive periods we avoid fish and meat for religious reasons.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then add one or two supporting details explaining why your preference stayed the same. Avoid repetition and tense errors; keep sentences concise and natural.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed. I loved momo as a child because of the taste and I still enjoy them now for the same reasons, especially when I want comfort food with familiar flavours.

× This cuisine is very delightful, yummy and I would like to have it anytime of the day.

✓ This dish is very delightful and yummy, and I would like to have it at any time of the day.

Use 'dish' rather than 'cuisine' when referring to a particular food item (word choice). Insert 'and' between adjectives for natural coordination. Use 'at any time' as the correct prepositional phrase instead of 'anytime of the day.' Also add a comma before the conjunction for clarity.

× I have very low spice tolerance, so anything that is uh, without the spice, I think I would like them you.

✓ I have a very low tolerance for spice, so I think I would like foods without spice.

Use the article 'a' with 'very low tolerance' and the preposition 'for' with 'tolerance for spice.' Replace 'anything... I think I would like them you' with a clear noun phrase 'I think I would like foods without spice.' Remove extraneous pronoun 'you.'

× Some examples of them are, uh, chow Mein, but only for the child that does not contain any type of spice on them.

✓ Some examples are chow mein, but only the version for children that does not contain any spices.

Use correct pluralization: 'spices' not 'spice' when speaking generally. 'Chow mein' is uncountable as a dish; specify 'the version for children.' Also 'contain any type of spice on them' is ungrammatical; use 'does not contain any spices.'

× Yes, there are different festivals in our country and uh, as an example, you can take Asar where we, uh, eat uh, curd and chura, uh, plus, uh, during the festive seasons, we usually avoid fish and meat.

✓ Yes, there are different festivals in our country. For example, during Asar we eat curd and chura, and during festive seasons we usually avoid fish and meat.

Split into two sentences for clarity. 'As an example, you can take Asar where we, uh, eat' is awkward — use 'For example, during Asar we eat.' Remove filler words. Keep consistent tense and clear conjunctions.

× I think no. When I was a child I used to enjoy Momo a lot and now I also enjoy more more so I don't think that my favorite food had changed since I was a child till now.

✓ I don't think so. When I was a child I used to enjoy momo a lot, and now I also enjoy it more, so I don't think my favorite food has changed since then.

Use 'I don't think so' rather than 'I think no.' Use 'used to' for past habitual actions and 'now I also enjoy it more' for present. Use present perfect 'has changed' to indicate change from past to present. Replace 'since I was a child till now' with 'since then.' Remove repeated word 'more' and add commas for readability.