Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับให้เป็นประโยคที่ชัดเจน ตรงประเด็น และเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อ (topic sentence) แล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดสนับสนุนสั้น ๆ ไม่เกิน 3 ประโยค ให้คำศัพท์ถูกต้อง (เช่น "sticky rice" หรือ "fried rice" แทน "5 rice") และแก้ไวยากรณ์ เช่น การใช้เอกพจน์/พหูพจน์และคำกริยาให้ตรงกับประธาน รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น "because" หรือ "and" อย่างถูกต้อง

例: My favourite food is fried rice because it is quick to make and I can add many ingredients such as vegetables, chicken, or shrimp. I like it because each time I can change the flavour with different sauces, so it never gets boring.

提案: ประโยคไม่ชัดเจนและมีข้อผิดพลาดในการใช้สรรพนามและไวยากรณ์ ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคสั้น ๆ ตอบตรงคำถาม (topic sentence) แล้วอธิบายเหตุผลและตัวอย่าง ใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น "because" และแก้คำที่ไม่ถูกต้อง (เช่น "she" เป็น "street food" หรือชื่ออาหารที่ถูกต้อง) ระวังความยาวประโยคและความซ้ำซ้อน

例: When I was young, I liked grilled pork skewers because I often bought them for breakfast before going to school. They were cheap, tasty, and easy to find near my house, so many kids ate them.

提案: คำตอบควรชัดและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น แก้คำที่ใช้ผิด (เช่น "shake our food" ควรเป็น "change our food"), ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยตัวอย่างเฉพาะเจาะจง เรียงลำดับความคิดด้วยคำเชื่อม เช่น "However" หรือ "But" และระบุโอกาสพิเศษอย่างชัดเจน เช่น งานแต่งงาน วันปีใหม่ หรือวันเกิด

例: Not really. In Thailand we usually eat the same kinds of food throughout the year. However, for special occasions like birthdays or New Year, we prepare large traditional meals with many dishes to celebrate.

提案: ประโยคมีความไม่ชัดเจน ใช้คำไม่ถูกต้อง (เช่น "growing Chinese people" และ "horse food") ควรตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคหัวข้อแล้วอธิบายการเปลี่ยนแปลงและเหตุผล ใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น "because" หรือ "so" และเลือกคำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมเกี่ยวกับรสชาติ เช่น "spicy food"

例: Yes, it has changed. When I was a child I didn't like spicy food at all, but as I grew up I learned to enjoy spicy dishes because I ate them more often with my family. Now spicy food is one of my favourites.

× My favorite food would be 5 rice because it's not only easy to make but also have variety ingredients such as vegetable meat and you can't add everything like a seafood inside of them.

✓ My favorite food would be fried rice because it's not only easy to make but also has a variety of ingredients such as vegetables and meat, and you can add many things like seafood to it.

The sentence has plural and word choice issues: '5 rice' seems to be a mistaken transcription for 'fried rice' (word choice). 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject 'fried rice' (subject-verb agreement -> Singular and plural issue / also 27 could apply, but per list use ID 1). 'Variety ingredients' needs 'a variety of ingredients' and 'vegetable meat' should be separated into 'vegetables and meat'. 'You can't add everything like a seafood inside of them' is incorrect: use 'you can add many things like seafood to it' (singular reference to the dish). Suggestions: use correct dish name, ensure singular/plural agreement, use 'a variety of' + plural noun, and refer to the dish with 'it'.

× I would say she can BBQ.

✓ I would say she can barbecue.

Use of verb form: 'BBQ' as a verb is informal but acceptable; however the issue is capitalization and form. 'She can BBQ' is a modal + base verb which is okay, but likely intended meaning is 'My mom/mother can barbecue' or 'someone can barbecue'. Ensure the third person subject matches; if referring to a single person, 'she can barbecue' is fine. Suggestion: use 'barbecue' spelled out and provide clear subject if needed.

× I'll I often buy it for breakfast before I attend to the school and it's easy to buy it anywhere and the taste is delicious.

✓ I often buy it for breakfast before I go to school; it's easy to buy anywhere and tastes delicious.

Multiple sentence structure problems: 'I'll I often' is incorrect repetition; remove 'I'll'. 'Attend to the school' is unnatural in English — use 'go to school'. 'It's easy to buy it anywhere' is redundant; use 'it's easy to buy anywhere'. 'The taste is delicious' is better as 'tastes delicious' to describe the food. Suggestions: remove extra words, use natural collocations ('go to school') and concise phrasing.

× And it's not and is inexpensive for the kids.

✓ And it's inexpensive for kids.

Redundant words 'not and is' are incorrect. Use concise adjective phrase 'inexpensive for kids' or 'inexpensive for the children'. Suggestion: remove filler words and choose correct determiner ('kids' or 'children') and article as needed.

× Not really, we don't usually shake our food with the season in Thailand, but for the special occasion like a birthday or will come in a new people, we always prepare a large meal or traditional meal to celebrate.

✓ Not really; we don't usually change our food with the seasons in Thailand, but for special occasions like birthdays or when new people come, we always prepare a large or traditional meal to celebrate.

Multiple preposition and word choice errors: 'shake our food with the season' is incorrect — use 'change our food with the seasons' or 'vary our food by season'. 'For the special occasion' should be plural 'for special occasions'. 'Will come in a new people' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is 'when new people come' or 'when new guests arrive'. Suggestions: use correct verbs ('change','vary'), pluralize nouns for general statements ('seasons','occasions','birthdays'), and use 'when' for temporal clauses.

× Yes, growing Chinese people.

✓ Yes, as I grew up around Chinese people.

The fragment 'growing Chinese people' is ungrammatical and unclear. To express change over time, use a past reference 'as I grew up' or present perfect 'I have grown up' depending on context. Also specify 'around Chinese people' if meaning influenced by them. Suggestions: use complete clause with correct tense to show background ('As I grew up...').

× Like when I was young I didn't like spicy food at all.

✓ When I was young, I didn't like spicy food at all.

This sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma after the introductory clause. It correctly uses past tense 'was' and 'didn't like'. Suggestion: add comma for natural flow and pause.

× But when I grow up I practice to eat a lot of spicy and yeah, spice.

✓ But as I grew up, I practiced eating a lot of spicy food and, yes, spices.

Tense inconsistency: 'when I grow up' should be past 'when I grew up' or 'as I grew up' because speaker refers to past change. 'I practice to eat' is incorrect; use 'I practiced eating' or 'I learned to eat'. 'A lot of spicy' needs a noun: 'a lot of spicy food'. Suggestions: match past time frame with past tense verbs and use gerund after 'practice' ('practice eating' -> 'practiced eating').

× Spice. Spice food, horse food is my cup of tea.

✓ Spicy food is my cup of tea.

Redundant and confused phrasing: 'Spice. Spice food, horse food' is incorrect. Use 'spicy food' as the adjective+noun combination. 'Horse food' is irrelevant and likely a mistaken word; remove it. 'Is my cup of tea' is an idiom meaning 'is what I like'. Suggestion: use clear adjective 'spicy' and remove unrelated words.