Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence naming the favourite food, then give 2–3 specific reasons or an example, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid filler words (well, umm) and unclear phrases ("special OK"). Use precise vocabulary (aroma, spices, family gatherings) and keep to 3–4 sentences.

例: My favourite food is biryani. I particularly love its rich aroma and the blend of spices like cardamom and cloves. I usually enjoy biryani at family gatherings because it brings back warm memories and tastes best when shared. Because of these reasons, biryani is my top choice.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use linking words to show contrast between past and present (e.g., "however", "nowadays"). Provide specific examples and a brief reason for the change. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar ("as years passed", "healthy food").

例: When I was young, I liked fast food, especially burgers and French fries. However, as I grew older, I became more health-conscious and started choosing salads and grilled dishes instead. The change happened because I learned more about nutrition and wanted to feel healthier.

提案: Be specific and use correct vocabulary. Start with a direct sentence answering the question, then give 2–3 clear seasonal examples using linking words (e.g., "in winter", "in summer"). Avoid vague phrases and pronunciation errors ("soaps" → "soups").

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. In winter, for example in January and February, I prefer hot soups and stews to keep warm. In midsummer I often choose cold salads and chilled drinks to stay refreshed. Around December I also like having hearty soups during the holidays.

提案: Answer directly and add a concise reason for the change. Use linking words to show cause or time ("when I was younger", "nowadays") and correct grammar ("because they were easy", "the ketchup that came with them"). Limit to 2–3 sentences with specific examples.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood. When I was younger I liked hamburgers and French fries because they were convenient and tasty, but now I prefer healthier dishes like grilled chicken and vegetables because I want to stay fit.

× I eat lots of food but among them which I love the most and my favorite one is Biryani.

✓ I eat a lot of food, but among them my favorite is Biryani.

'Lots of food' is informal; 'a lot of food' is more natural here. The clause 'among them which I love the most and my favorite one is Biryani' is ungrammatical and redundant. Simplify to 'but among them my favorite is Biryani' to be clear and concise.

× I enjoy biryani with my family gathering.

✓ I enjoy biryani at family gatherings.

'My family gathering' incorrectly uses possessive and singular; 'family gatherings' (plural) or 'at family gatherings' is the natural collocation. Use the preposition 'at' for events.

× Well, the aroma also reminds me of special OK.

✓ Well, the aroma also reminds me of special occasions.

'special OK' is nonsensical; likely intended 'special occasions'. This corrects the sentence to a proper noun phrase and fixes sentence meaning and structure.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young? -> When I was young I used to love fast foods.

✓ When I was young, I used to love fast food.

'Fast foods' is plural but English normally treats 'fast food' as an uncountable noun. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habitual action. Add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity.

× I would say junk food.

✓ I would say junk food.

This sentence is acceptable; no change needed. It names the category 'junk food' which is uncountable.

× I used to prefer junk food over healthy one.

✓ I used to prefer junk food over healthy food.

'Healthy one' is incorrect because 'one' does not properly refer to the uncountable noun 'food' here. Use 'healthy food' to parallel 'junk food'.

× But umm as your passes by nowadays I prefer healthy food.

✓ But as years have passed, nowadays I prefer healthy food.

'as your passes by' is incorrect. Correct phrase is 'as years have passed' or 'as time has passed'. Also 'nowadays' already indicates the present, so 'as years have passed' + 'nowadays' works. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct nouns.

× But when I was young I used to go for burgers, umm, French fries.

✓ But when I was young I used to go for burgers and French fries.

Use 'and' to list items rather than a comma plus hesitation filler. No quantifier issue actually; primary fix is conjunction, but we list as quantifier to match allowed types? However 'and' correction is conjunction—should be type 16. Updating to correct type.

× But when I was young I used to go for burgers, umm, French fries.

✓ But when I was young I used to go for burgers and French fries.

When listing multiple items, connect them with a conjunction such as 'and' rather than just a comma with hesitation. This makes the sentence grammatically correct and natural.

× I used to prefer unhealthy food.

✓ I used to prefer unhealthy food.

This sentence is correct as written; 'unhealthy food' is the appropriate uncountable noun. No change needed.

× Well, yes, I do eat different food, uh, at different times of the year.

✓ Well, yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year.

When referring to multiple kinds or items, use the plural 'different foods'. Also remove hesitation fillers and unnecessary commas.

× From talking about the starting ones, January, February I prefer kind of hot soaps, whereas uh, at the Midsummer I prefer cold drink salads and in December I prefer soup.

✓ Starting with January and February, I prefer kinds of hot soups; in midsummer I prefer cold drinks and salads; in December I prefer soup.

Multiple errors: 'From talking about the starting ones' is awkward—use 'Starting with.' 'Hot soaps' is a spelling/word error; should be 'hot soups'. 'Kind of hot soups' -> 'kinds of hot soups' or 'hot soups'. 'At the Midsummer' -> 'in midsummer'. 'Cold drink salads' mixes nouns; separate into 'cold drinks and salads'. Use semicolons or separate clauses for clarity.

× Has your favourite food changed since you were a child? -> Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child.

This sentence is correct; the present perfect 'has changed' with 'since' is appropriate. No change needed.

× At first, uh, when I was younger, I used to prefer fast food over healthier one.

✓ At first, when I was younger, I used to prefer fast food over healthier food.

'Healthier one' is incorrect; use 'healthier food' to parallel 'fast food'. Keep commas around the introductory phrase.

× I used to love hamburgers 'cause it was easy to eat.

✓ I used to love hamburgers because they were easy to eat.

Hamburgers is plural, so pronoun and verb should be plural: 'they were' instead of 'it was'. Also use 'because' in formal correction instead of colloquial ''cause'.

× Even I loved this French fries and the ketchup that it comes.

✓ I even loved French fries and the ketchup that comes with them.

'French fries' is plural; do not use 'this' or singular pronoun 'it'. Use 'them' and phrasing 'ketchup that comes with them' or 'the ketchup that comes with them'. Also 'I even' is more natural than 'Even I' in this context.