Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons or details, and avoid unnecessary articles. Use a linking phrase if adding details.

例: I really like ramen. For example, I enjoy miso ramen because the broth is rich and the noodles are chewy, and I often eat it at a small local shop on weekends.

提案: Use past tense consistently, be more concise, and give one specific example with a reason. Limit to one or two sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: When I was young, I liked restaurant dishes such as sweet and sour pork, because the sweet sauce and crispy coating tasted delicious and felt special.

提案: Answer directly, correct repetition and grammar, and organise details logically. Use linking words (for example, in summer, in winter) and give one or two clear examples of seasonal foods.

例: Yes, I do. For example, in winter my family enjoys smoked and barbecued foods, while in May and June we eat more fresh vegetables and salads because they are in season.

提案: Use consistent tense and a clear contrast sentence. Keep it concise and avoid repetition. Use a linking word like 'but' to show change and give a brief reason.

例: Yes, it has changed. When I was young I ate a lot of sweets, but now, in my forties, I prefer healthier options like vegetables because I want to stay fit.

× My favorite food is the ramen.

✓ My favorite food is ramen.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before uncountable or general food names. Use 'ramen' without 'the' when speaking about the dish in general. Grammar problem type ID:22

× When I was young, I like the food that I always eat at the restaurant, such as sweet and sour pork because it is very sweet and very delicious.

✓ When I was young, I liked the food that I always ate at the restaurant, such as sweet and sour pork, because it was very sweet and delicious.

The sentence refers to past habits and descriptions, so past tense verbs should be used: 'liked' and 'ate' for habitual actions and 'was' for past description. Also remove redundant 'very' before 'delicious' for natural style. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Of course, because sometimes we we like seasonal foods such as dry foods, BBQ, smoked foods and by the month of May and on June we like vegetables.

✓ Of course. Sometimes we like seasonal foods such as dried foods, BBQ, smoked foods, and in May and June we like vegetables.

Use 'dried' instead of 'dry foods' as adjective form; remove duplicate 'we'. Use preposition 'in' for months ('in May and June'). Use commas to separate list items and 'and' before the last item. Also 'BBQ' and 'smoked foods' are fine but keep parallel structure. Grammar problem type ID:11

× When I was young, I usually eat a lot of tasty foods such as sweets, but now that I'm at the age of 40s, I eat healthy foods such as vegetables more and vegetables actually.

✓ When I was young, I usually ate a lot of tasty foods such as sweets, but now that I'm in my forties, I eat healthier foods such as vegetables more often.

The first clause refers to past habit, so use past tense 'ate'. 'I'm at the age of 40s' is incorrect; use 'I'm in my forties'. Use comparative adverb 'healthier' instead of adjective alone and 'more often' to indicate increased frequency. Remove redundant final 'and vegetables actually'. Grammar problem type ID:6