Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid repeating obvious facts (e.g. origin) unless relevant. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g. ‘rich flavours’, ‘versatile’).

例: I love pasta because it’s versatile and full of rich flavours. For example, I enjoy tomato-based sauces for their tanginess and creamy sauces when I want something comforting, so I often choose different pastas depending on my mood.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and streamline the explanation. Replace filler words and repetitions, use correct word choice (e.g. ‘tolerance for spicy food’, ‘easy to chew’), and give one concrete detail (e.g. how it was served or a memory) to make it specific.

例: As a child I loved idli, a soft steamed cake from South India, because I couldn’t tolerate spicy food. For example, my grandmother served idli with mild coconut chutney, which made it easy to eat and very comforting.

提案: Make the answer more specific and concise. Start with a direct statement, then use linking words (e.g. ‘for example’) to give one or two concrete examples of seasonal or festival foods. Avoid repetition and filler words.

例: Yes. For example, during Diwali we usually eat sweets like ladoos, while in the harvest festival Pongal we prepare a special rice dish called pongal. These seasonal dishes help mark each festival.

提案: Give a clear, concise response and add a specific reason or brief example to support it. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g. ‘to this day’). Use one linking phrase (e.g. ‘because’ or ‘so’) to make it coherent.

例: No, my favourite food hasn’t changed to this day because pasta is quick to cook and I enjoy experimenting with different sauces. For instance, I often make spaghetti with a spicy arrabbiata sauce when I want stronger flavours.

× I could chew it more properly and betterly.

✓ I could chew it more easily and better.

'Betterly' is not a valid English adverb. Use 'better' as the comparative adverb. Also 'properly' is acceptable but 'more easily' is a clearer collocation when describing how easy it is to chew. Improve by using standard adverbs: 'more easily' and 'better'.

× Pasta is from Italy and I love that food because it's so delicious.

✓ Pasta comes from Italy, and I love it because it's so delicious.

The original 'is from' is grammatically acceptable but 'comes from' is a more natural present-tense verb collocation for origin. Also replace the clumsy 'that food' with the pronoun 'it' to sound natural. Keep present tense consistency.

× Every festival has their own own dish, so we eat that different dish all the time.

✓ Every festival has its own dish, so we eat that different dish all the time.

Use the singular possessive pronoun 'its' to match 'every festival' (singular). Also remove the duplicated 'own'. This fixes agreement between the singular noun and its possessive.

× I always used to love pasta until date.

✓ I have always loved pasta to this day.

'Used to' refers to a past habit and conflicts with 'until date'. To express a past habit that continues to the present, use the present perfect 'have always loved' and the idiom 'to this day'. This matches tense and meaning.

× When I was young, I liked to eat idli, which is from South India.

✓ When I was young, I liked to eat idli, which is from South India.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but note that 'from South India' is a correct prepositional phrase. No change needed; included here as confirmation that preposition use is correct.

× It has all the flavors in it, which I love the most.

✓ It has many flavors, which I love the most.

'All the flavors in it' is wordy and slightly awkward. Replacing with 'many flavors' keeps meaning and is more natural. Pronoun 'which' correctly refers to the preceding clause, so no pronoun error—this suggestion focuses on clarity.