Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your favourite food, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers and repetition, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Mention why rice and chicken suit your lifestyle (e.g., nutrition for gym).

例: My favourite foods are rice and chicken. I prefer them because they are high in protein and provide steady energy for my gym workouts. For example, I usually eat grilled chicken with brown rice after training to help muscle recovery.

提案: Answer with a clear topic sentence about childhood favourites, then add a specific reason or memory with a linking word. Avoid hesitation and correct grammar (past tense). Provide one concrete detail about who you ate with or how it tasted.

例: When I was young, I often ate eggs and rice. I usually had these meals with my grandmother, and I remember the eggs were always soft and seasoned simply, which made them comforting and easy to eat.

提案: Respond directly to the seasonal question (yes/no) then explain briefly with a clear reason and example. Avoid vague language and emotional or unclear phrases. Use linking words (however, because, so) and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: No, I don't eat very different foods across the year. Because I prefer home-cooked meals, I generally cook the same dishes like rice and chicken regardless of the season, although I might add a fresh salad in summer.

提案: Give a direct answer, then explain why it has or hasn't changed with specific reasons. Use correct grammar and avoid unfinished sentences. One or two supporting details (taste, nutrition, memories) are enough.

例: No, my favourite foods have not changed; I still like rice and chicken. I prefer them because they taste good, are nutritious, and remind me of meals I had with my family when I was a child.

× I don't have a favorite food, but I have a a lot of favorite food like such as, uh, rice and chicken.

✓ I don't have a favorite food, but I have a lot of favorite foods, such as rice and chicken.

Repeated 'a' is accidental; 'a lot of' should modify a plural count noun 'foods' not singular 'food'. Remove redundant words and 'such as' already introduces examples so use it without 'like'. Improve by saying 'a lot of favorite foods' or 'many favorite foods'.

× I like it because it's healthy and have a mini routine because I'm an I go to the gym and I wanted to build.

✓ I like it because it's healthy, and I have a small routine: I go to the gym and I want to build muscle.

Sentence had missing subject for 'have' and mixed tenses. Add subject 'I' before 'have' (subject-verb agreement) and use present tense 'want' to match context. 'Mini routine' is informal; 'small routine' or 'short routine' is clearer. Clarify 'build' to 'build muscle'.

× Honestly, when I was young, I'm just eating uh, uh, eggs and rice.

✓ Honestly, when I was young, I just ate eggs and rice.

Mixes past time marker 'when I was young' with present continuous 'I'm eating'. Use past simple 'I just ate' to match 'when I was young'. Remove filler 'uh' and 'just' placement before verb for clarity.

× Yeah, because, uh, uh, I wanted to from, with my grandmother, he eats this food.

✓ Yeah, because I used to eat this food with my grandmother.

Original has wrong pronoun 'he' for grandmother and awkward phrasing 'I wanted to from'. Use 'used to eat' to indicate habitual past action and place 'with my grandmother' after the verb. Remove filler words.

× No, I don't know because I love to make my favorite food in the home because I don't care about restaurant, you know, it's not natural and is this is a stink.

✓ No, I don't. I like to make my favorite food at home because I don't like restaurants; food there doesn't taste natural and sometimes it smells bad.

Use 'at home' not 'in the home'. 'I don't know' doesn't answer question; 'No, I don't' fits. 'Don't care about restaurant' should be 'don't like restaurants' and 'is this is a stink' is ungrammatical—replace with 'sometimes it smells bad' or 'it can smell unpleasant'. Adjust pronouns and articles for natural English.

× No, you know, I'm still loved rice and chicken because he is.

✓ No, you know, I still love rice and chicken because they are delicious.

'I'm still loved' uses passive and wrong tense; use active present 'I still love'. 'He' is incorrect pronoun for food; use 'they' or 'it' (plural 'rice and chicken' -> 'they') and 'are delicious' matches plural. Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× It's delicious to eat this food and I like the.

✓ This food is delicious to eat, and I like it.

Original fragments and dangling 'the' create incomplete sentence. Reorder to subject-verb 'This food is delicious' and complete second clause with object 'it'.