Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap net bir ana fikre sahip değil, tekrarlar ve anlamsal hatalar içeriyor. Cümleleri sadeleştirip bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, ardından iki kısa destekleyici cümle kullanın. Bağlaçlar (for example, such as, and) ile tutarlılık sağlayın. Örneğin, favori yemek yoksa nedenini belirtin ve birkaç örnek verin. Ayrıca sayı/sözcük hatalarını düzeltin (ör. "the chicken 1" yerine "chicken").

例: I don't have a single favourite food because I enjoy many different cuisines. For example, I often eat chicken, pizza and burgers, and I like trying whole foods and healthy options too. Eating is a hobby for me, so I prefer variety rather than one favourite.

提案: Cümleler karışık ve genelleme ile kişisel deneyim karışmış; zaman uyumu hataları var. Doğrudan konu cümlesiyle başlayın (e.g. "As a child, I liked...") ve ardından spesifik örnekler verin. Basit geçmiş zaman formlarını doğru kullanın ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın.

例: As a child I preferred simple foods like bread and pasta. I didn't eat many vegetables back then, and sometimes I ate very little besides bread and water. Over time my tastes have expanded.

提案: Cevap melez; soru mevsimlere ilişkinken öğrenci daha çok seyahatlerden bahsetmiş. Soruya doğrudan yanıt verin (evet/ hayır + neden) ve mevsimlere göre örnekler verin. Gereksiz tekrarları azaltın ve bağlaçlarla akışı sağlayın. Son cümlede belirsiz ifadeler yerine net sonuç verin.

例: Yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, I prefer light salads and cold dishes in summer, while in winter I like hearty stews and roasted vegetables. Also when I travel I try local traditional dishes to experience new flavours.

提案: Cevap genel bir evrim anlatıyor ama zaman uyumu ve kelime seçimi zayıf; ayrıca tekrarlar var. Net bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın (Yes, it has / No, it hasn't), sonra kısa nedenler ve örnekler verin. "Pasta species" gibi hatalı ifadeler yerine uygun kelime (pasta dishes) kullanın.

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed since I was a child. As a child I mainly ate bread and simple pasta dishes, but now I enjoy exploring international cuisines such as Japanese and Mediterranean food because I like new flavours and ingredients.

× I haven't got any favorite food because food is a different thing for my life.

✓ I don't have a favorite food because food is an important part of my life.

'I haven't got any favorite food' is awkward in this context; use 'I don't have a favorite food'. 'a different thing for my life' is unidiomatic; use 'an important part of my life' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: use natural article usage and collocations ('a favorite', 'an important part').

× It has.

✓ It does.

'It has' is incomplete and incorrect here. The student likely meant to affirm the previous statement; in English we would use 'It does.' or restate the idea. Suggestion: use correct auxiliary verbs for short answers ('does' for 'have' in this context).

× Also I really like Whole Foods and I haven't got any special one.

✓ Also I really like many kinds of food and I don't have a particular favorite.

'Whole Foods' is a brand/store name and seems inappropriate; the sentence likely intends 'whole foods' (unprocessed foods) or 'many kinds of food'. 'I haven't got any special one' is unidiomatic; use 'I don't have a particular favorite.' Suggestion: choose correct noun form and article usage and natural phrasing.

× Also the chicken 1, the pizza, the burgers.

✓ For example, chicken, pizza, and burgers.

The use of 'the' before items is incorrect here and 'the chicken 1' appears as a typo. List items should be presented without definite articles. Suggestion: remove unnecessary 'the' and correct typos; use parallel structure in lists.

× I really like eating food.

✓ I really enjoy eating.

'Eating food' is redundant; 'enjoy eating' is more natural and concise. Suggestion: choose verbs that naturally collocate ('enjoy eating', 'like eating out').

× When I was young, of course the old children didn't like vegetables when they were young aged and also they don't like meat or chicken too.

✓ When I was young, many children didn't like vegetables and also didn't like meat or chicken.

Mixing past and present tenses ('didn't like' vs 'don't like') is incorrect. Also 'old children' and 'when they were young aged' are wrong. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. Suggestion: use 'many children' and keep past tense ('didn't like').

× I guess in my younger time I didn't eat anything.

✓ I guess when I was younger I didn't eat much.

'Younger time' is unidiomatic; use 'when I was younger'. 'Didn't eat anything' is probably exaggerated; 'didn't eat much' is more natural. Maintain past tense for past time. Suggestion: use natural time expressions and appropriate quantifiers.

× I only drink water and eat bread, so that's all.

✓ I only drank water and ate bread, so that's all.

Talking about past habits requires past tense verbs ('drank', 'ate'), not present simple. Suggestion: use past tense for past descriptions.

× Of course, when I go on a trip or another country, I also try the the traditional food in that country

✓ Of course, when I go on a trip or to another country, I also try the traditional food there

Use 'to another country' not 'or another country'. Also 'the the' is a typo. 'In that country' can be shortened to 'there'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions for movement ('to') and avoid redundant words.

× and also I eat every day a different food because I really like eating different kind of foods and trying them to make the no.

✓ and I also try a different dish every day because I really like trying different kinds of food and tasting them.

Word order 'eat every day a different food' is awkward; use 'try a different dish every day'. 'Different kind of foods' should be 'different kinds of food'. 'trying them to make the no' is meaningless; likely intended 'tasting them' or 'learning about them'. Suggestion: use correct pluralization and natural collocations ('different kinds of food', 'try/taste dishes').

× Of course, when I was a child I only drink water, eat bread and also some pasta species.

✓ Of course, when I was a child I only drank water, ate bread, and had some pasta dishes.

Mix of present and past tense 'drink'/'eat' with past context; use past tense ('drank', 'ate'). 'Pasta species' is incorrect; use 'pasta dishes'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and use correct noun collocations.

× All children like them.

✓ Most children like them.

'All children' may be an overgeneralization; 'most children' is more natural. Also ensure pronoun 'them' clearly refers to the food items. Suggestion: use quantifiers appropriately and ensure clear antecedents.

× But in my older age I also really interested in different kind of food and I really want to experience all countries at different foods.

✓ But as I grew older, I became really interested in different kinds of food and I want to experience the cuisines of many countries.

'In my older age' is awkward; use 'as I grew older' or 'as I got older'. 'I also really interested' misses the verb 'became' and mixes tense. 'Different kind of food' should be 'different kinds of food'. 'Experience all countries at different foods' is unidiomatic; use 'experience the cuisines of many countries'. Suggestion: use correct tense, include missing verbs, and select proper noun phrases for cultures and cuisines.