Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, use a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., "the easiest" not "the most easiest"), and give specific supporting details with linking words. Limit to about 2–4 sentences. Focus on reasons and examples: mention a favourite pasta dish and why you like it.

例: My favourite food is pasta because it is quick and versatile. For example, I often make spaghetti with tomato sauce and basil when I’m short on time, but I also enjoy creamy carbonara when I want something richer.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence stating what you liked, avoid unclear or irrelevant phrases, and give specific examples of dishes or flavours. Use linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'also') and correct vocabulary (avoid confusing phrases like 'sandy beaches'). Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

例: When I was young I loved simple home-cooked meals, especially grilled cheese sandwiches and tomato soup. For example, my mother often added slices of sausage to the sandwich, which made it more filling and tasty.

提案: Answer directly (Yes/No) and give a brief reason with specific seasonal examples if possible. Use correct tense and phrasing (e.g., 'I don't usually try new foods' not 'I'm not very open to the new taste'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'however'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: No, I don't usually eat different foods at different times of the year because I prefer familiar dishes. However, I sometimes eat lighter meals like salads and fruit in summer, and warmer soups or stews in winter.

提案: Give a clear direct answer (Yes/No) and a concise reason. Correct grammar (e.g., 'It hasn't changed' not 'it haven't changed') and avoid repetition. Provide a brief hypothetical if relevant, using clear conditional structure ('If I lived abroad, I might try...'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: No, my favourite food hasn't changed; I still prefer pasta. If I lived abroad, I might explore new cuisines and find other favourites, but so far I still enjoy the same dishes.

× Uh, it's just going to be simple, but I love pasta and it is the most easiest thing to do, umm, make ready and I think it just very tasteful and you can do whichever you want.

✓ Uh, it's just going to be simple, but I love pasta and it is the easiest thing to make, and I think it is very tasty and you can do it however you want.

Usage of 'most easiest' is redundant; use 'easiest' (superlative). 'Make ready' is unnatural in this context; use 'make'. 'Very tasteful' is incorrect: 'tasteful' means having good taste or style; use 'tasty' to describe flavor. Also add missing auxiliary 'is' before 'very tasty' and use 'however' instead of 'whichever' for manner. Suggestion: Use correct adjective forms and collocations: 'the easiest', 'tasty', 'do it however you want.'

× You can add sauce or you can do with a cheese or you can edit some into your salad.

✓ You can add sauce or you can use cheese, or you can add some to your salad.

'Do with a cheese' is incorrect verb+preposition collocation; use 'use cheese'. 'Edit some into your salad' misuses 'edit' which is for text/media; use 'add'. Prepositions: use 'to your salad' not 'into' in this context. Suggestion: pair common verbs with correct prepositions: 'add to', 'use'.

× And I cannot answer this question like 100% sure, but I can say that.

✓ I cannot answer this question 100% sure, but I can say this.

Unnecessary leading 'And' and awkward 'like 100% sure'; 'like' is filler and 'that' is vague—replace with 'this'. Pronoun 'that' could be acceptable but 'this' is clearer. Suggestion: remove filler words and choose precise pronouns: 'I cannot answer this question 100% sure, but I can say this.'

× And from that age too, I loved passing my childhood area too.

✓ Since that age, I loved spending my childhood there.

'Passing my childhood area' is incorrect phrase; likely intended 'spending my childhood there'. 'From that age' should be 'Since that age'. Remove extra 'too'. Suggestion: Use correct verbs for time spent (spend) and correct adverb/place terms ('there').

× I also love to eat sandy beaches with cheese, some tomato, and maybe you can edit like more meat kind of thing like sausage.

✓ I also love to eat sandwiches with cheese and some tomato, and maybe add more meat like sausage.

'Sandy beaches' is a mispronunciation/misspelling of 'sandwiches'. 'You can edit like' is wrong; use 'add' for food. 'Kind of thing like' is redundant. Suggestion: Use correct vocabulary 'sandwiches' and simple verbs 'add' and concise phrases 'like sausage.'

× But I love to eat and I think I'm going to love.

✓ I love to eat and I think I always will.

'I'm going to love' is incomplete and awkward; likely intended to express continuing love in the future—use 'I always will' or 'I will continue to.' Suggestion: Use complete future expression 'I will continue to love it' or 'I always will.'

× Oh no, I'm not very open to the new taste I think so I just eating same things for my childhood area and I just believe that it's just going like this in my future area.

✓ Oh no, I'm not very open to new tastes; I think I still eat the same things from my childhood and I believe it will stay like this in the future.

Problems: 'the new taste' should be 'new tastes' (plural) and 'open to' is okay. 'I just eating' lacks auxiliary 'am' and should be 'I still eat' or 'I just eat'. 'My childhood area' is wrong phrase; use 'childhood'. 'Going like this in my future area' is ungrammatical; use 'will stay like this in the future.' Suggestion: Fix verb forms and use plural nouns for countable general concepts: 'new tastes', include auxiliary verbs, and use natural time/place expressions ('in the future').

× But if I just go and move an abroad country, maybe I can try new taste for in my future area.

✓ But if I move to another country, maybe I can try new tastes in the future.

'Go and move an abroad country' is ungrammatical; correct is 'move to another country' or 'abroad'. 'Try new taste for in my future area' is awkward—use 'try new tastes in the future.' Suggestion: Use correct verb patterns for hypothetical future (if I move to...), proper preposition 'to' with 'move', and plural 'tastes.'

× Like we talked, it haven't changed yet, but also, like I'm said, if I just umm, go and live in a different country, maybe I can train if taste and maybe I just love more different kind of food rather than my familiar food.

✓ As we said, it hasn't changed yet, but also, as I said, if I go and live in a different country, maybe I can learn new tastes and perhaps I will like different kinds of food more than my familiar food.

'It haven't changed' uses incorrect auxiliary; use 'hasn't' for singular 'it'. 'Like we talked' -> 'As we said'. 'I'm said' incorrect; use 'as I said'. 'Train if taste' is wrong; use 'learn new tastes' or 'develop a taste for'. 'Love more different kind of food' should be 'like different kinds of food more'. Suggestion: Ensure correct subject-verb agreement with auxiliaries, use idiomatic expressions ('as I said'), and correct noun plurals and collocations ('different kinds of food').

× So I'm not sure this but from that age, it's just not changed.

✓ So I'm not sure about this, but it hasn't changed since that age.

'I'm not sure this' needs preposition 'about'. 'From that age, it's just not changed' is ungrammatical; use present perfect 'hasn't changed since that age' to indicate a state continuing to now. Suggestion: Use 'about' after 'sure' and present perfect with 'since' for durations.