Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more specific and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, briefly explain why you like it, and add a concrete example or preference. Keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences) and avoid broad phrases like “Japanese food” without detail.

例: My favourite food is Japanese cuisine, especially sushi and ramen. I enjoy sushi because it’s light and fresh, and ramen when I want something comforting and warm. For example, I often order salmon nigiri or a miso ramen with extra vegetables.

提案: Correct tense and word choice, and tighten structure. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, give a reason or habit, and use linking words like “however” to contrast. Avoid unnecessary words like “actually”.

例: When I was young, I preferred sweet foods such as chocolate and ice cream. However, my mother only allowed me to eat them after lunch or dinner as a treat. As a result, I always looked forward to dessert time.

提案: Be direct and avoid fillers. Answer the question clearly (yes/no) then expand with a specific seasonal example and explain briefly how it differs. Use linking words like “for example” or “however.”

例: Not really — I usually eat similar foods throughout the year. For example, at New Year’s Eve my mother prepares a variety of traditional dishes, such as fish and rice cakes, which we only have on that occasion. This makes the holiday meal feel special.

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), give concise reasons using past and present tenses correctly, and avoid repetition. Mention specific foods or allergies briefly to support your statement.

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed since childhood. As a child I enjoyed trying many different foods and sweets, but as I grew older I discovered I have several food allergies, so I now avoid certain items and prefer safer, simpler dishes like grilled chicken and steamed vegetables.

× Actually, when I was young, I like the food that tastes more sweet, such as chocolate or ice cream, but my mom only permits me to eat them after the dinner or the lunch.

✓ Actually, when I was young, I liked foods that tasted sweeter, such as chocolate or ice cream, but my mom only permitted me to eat them after dinner or lunch.

Tense consistency: the sentence refers to the past ('when I was young'), so verbs should be in the past tense ('liked', 'tasted', 'permitted'). Singular/plural and word choice: use 'foods' or 'foods that tasted sweeter' and comparative 'sweeter' rather than 'more sweet'. Articles with meals: 'after dinner or lunch' does not need 'the'. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense and use 'sweeter' and omit 'the' before meals.

× Umm, actually, I usually eat the same food at different times of the year.

✓ Umm, actually, I usually eat the same foods at different times of the year.

Singular vs plural: 'the same food' suggests one dish; if you mean dishes generally, use plural 'foods'. This is an article/number choice issue. Suggestion: use 'the same foods' or 'the same kind of food' depending on intended meaning.

× For example, in New Year's Eve, my mom would cook a a fair variety of dishes, but it's actually the same thing every year.

✓ For example, on New Year's Eve, my mom would cook a fair variety of dishes, but it's actually the same every year.

Preposition with holidays: use 'on New Year's Eve' not 'in'. Duplicate word: remove extra 'a'. Word choice: 'the same thing every year' is acceptable but 'the same every year' is more natural. This correction addresses preposition and redundancy errors.

× My answer is yes because when I was a child I like to eat and I like to taste a variety of food.

✓ My answer is yes because when I was a child I liked to eat and I liked to try a variety of foods.

Tense consistency: refering to childhood requires past tense 'liked'. Word choice: 'try a variety of foods' is more natural than 'taste a variety of food'. Use plural 'foods' when referring to multiple items.

× But when I was older and I found there are plenty I I'm really allergic for many food.

✓ But when I got older, I found that I am really allergic to many foods.

Multiple issues: tense and sequence ('when I was older' -> 'when I got older'), unnecessary words ('there are plenty I'), incorrect verb and preposition use ('allergic to' not 'allergic for'), and number ('foods' plural). Also fix double 'I' and fragmented structure. Suggestion: simplify to 'when I got older, I found that I am really allergic to many foods.'