Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ประเด็นที่ควรปรับ: ใช้ไวยากรณ์ให้ถูกต้อง (tense, subject-verb agreement), ลดความซ้ำซ้อน และจัดประโยคให้กระชับเป็นธรรมชาติ ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรงๆ แล้วเสริมเหตุผลหรือรายละเอียดสั้นๆ โดยใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น "because" หรือ "when" เพื่อความลื่นไหล ตัวอย่างที่ควรแก้ไขคือการใช้คำว่า "when my mom take me" -> "when my mom took me" และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำเช่น "it tastes very good for me" กับ "I feel so so good"

例: My favourite food is ramen because I first tried it when I was seven, after my mother took me to a Japanese restaurant. I loved the rich broth and springy noodles, and the combination of texture and flavour felt perfect to me.

提案: ประเด็นที่ควรปรับ: แก้ไวยากรณ์พื้นฐาน (subject-verb agreement, verb forms), ใช้คำศัพท์ให้เหมาะสม (e.g. "sweets" ไม่ใช่ "sweet thing"; "children" หรือ "kids"), และจัดระเบียบความคิดให้ชัดเจน เริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรงๆ แล้วอธิบายเหตุผลสั้นๆ โดยใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น "because"

例: When I was young, I liked sweets such as candy and snacks like shatai. I enjoyed them because they tasted good and, as a child, I didn't think about the health drawbacks.

提案: ประเด็นที่ควรปรับ: ปรับไวยากรณ์และความสอดคล้องของคำ (singular/plural, tense), ใช้ linking words เพื่อทำให้ประโยคเชื่อมโยงกันอย่างเป็นธรรมชาติ เช่น "sometimes" และ "because" ควรย่อความยาวและหลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำ เช่น "it's up to the time where when I prefer" ให้เป็นประโยคที่ชัดเจนกว่า

例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in winter I often prefer ramen because it is warm, while in summer I might choose pizza or a steak. It depends on my mood and how bored I am with a certain dish.

提案: ประเด็นที่ควรปรับ: คำตอบคลุมเครือและมีข้อผิดพลาดเรื่อง tense/ความหมาย (เช่น "when I when I was 60 year older" ไม่มีความหมายชัดเจน) ควรตอบให้ชัดเจนว่ารสนิยมเปลี่ยนอย่างไร ตามด้วยตัวอย่างเรียงลำดับเวลา ใช้ linking words เช่น "when", "then", "now" และแก้ subject-verb agreement

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since I was a child. When I was small I liked pizza, as a teenager I preferred ramen, and now I usually enjoy an omelette for a simple meal.

× My favorite food is ramen. I first ate this food when I was 7 when my mom take me to the Japanese restaurants.

✓ My favorite food is ramen. I first ate it when I was seven when my mom took me to Japanese restaurants.

Use past tense for 'take' because the action happened in the past; third person singular past is 'took'. Also use 'ate it' instead of 'ate this food' for natural reference and 'Japanese restaurants' without 'the'. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed past events and use 'took' for third person singular past.

× When I first taste these foods I feel so so good and it tastes very good for me.

✓ When I first tasted these foods I felt so, so good and they tasted very good to me.

Events are in the past, so verbs should be in past tense: 'tasted' and 'felt'. Also 'these foods' likely refers to the ramen, so plural verb 'they tasted'; use 'to me' instead of 'for me' for personal impression. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time frame and ensure verb agreement with the noun.

× The texture, the taste, everything was perfect.

✓ The texture, the taste, everything was perfect.

This sentence is correct; articles 'the' are acceptable here because specific attributes of the ramen are being referred to. Suggestion: No change needed.

× When I were younger I usually live to eat sweet thing such as candy or shattai as a kid and I think every kids likes sweating because it's actually taste good and we don't actually think about the drawback when we got older so that's why I like.

✓ When I was younger I usually loved to eat sweet things such as candy or shattai as a kid and I think every kid likes sweets because they actually taste good and we don't think about the drawbacks when we get older, so that's why I liked them.

Use 'was' not 'were' for first person singular past. 'Usually loved' or 'used to love' fits habitual past. 'Sweet thing' should be plural 'sweet things'; 'every kids' should be 'every kid' or 'kids'; 'sweating' is wrong, likely 'sweets'; verb agreement 'they taste' uses plural. Maintain tense consistency: past for childhood experiences and present simple for general truths. Use 'drawbacks' plural and use 'get older' (present) or 'got older' (past) consistently; here mixing is fixed by shifting to general reflection. Suggestion: Keep consistent tense and correct singular/plural nouns and verb agreement.

× When I were younger I usually live to eat sweet thing such as candy or shattai as a kid

✓ When I was younger I usually loved to eat sweet things such as candy or shattai as a kid

Pluralize 'sweet thing' to 'sweet things' and change 'live' to 'loved/liked' for past. 'Was' for past singular subject. Suggestion: Ensure nouns match number and verbs match tense.

× and I think every kids likes sweating because it's actually taste good

✓ and I think every kid likes sweets because they actually taste good

Use 'every kid' (singular) with 'likes' (third person singular). 'Sweets' is the correct noun; 'taste' should be 'taste' with plural subject 'they'. Suggestion: Use 'every' with singular noun; ensure pronoun/verb agreement.

× Yes, I eat different food at the different time of the year.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year.

Use plural 'foods' and plural 'times'. Omit 'the' before 'different time of the year'. Use 'at different times of the year' as the idiomatic phrase. Suggestion: Use idiomatic time expressions and correct noun number.

× Sometimes I prefer pizza, sometime I'd like to eat ramen, and sometime I live to eat steak.

✓ Sometimes I prefer pizza, sometimes I'd like to eat ramen, and sometimes I love to eat steak.

Use 'sometimes' (plural adverb) consistently. 'Live' is wrong; should be 'love'. Suggestion: Check common adverbs and correct verbs.

× It's up to the time where when I prefer what I want to eat because I might get bored of what I've eat.

✓ It depends on the time and my preference because I might get bored of what I've eaten.

Original is awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'It depends on the time and my preference'. 'What I've eat' should be past participle 'eaten'. Suggestion: Use 'depends on' for dependence and use correct past participle after 'have'.

× It's up to the time where when I prefer what I want to eat because I might get bored of what I've eat.

✓ It depends on the time and my preference because I might get bored of what I've eaten.

'I've eat' is incorrect; after 'have' use past participle 'eaten'. Suggestion: Learn common irregular past participles like 'eat' -> 'eaten'.

× Yes, my favorite food have changed over the time when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a kid.

'Food' is singular, so use 'has changed'. Use 'since I was a kid' for starting point; 'over the time' is awkward. Suggestion: Match singular subjects with singular verbs and use idiomatic time expressions.

× I like pizza more when I when I was 60 year older I prefer ramen and now I'd like to eat just omelette.

✓ I liked pizza more when I was a child; when I was older I preferred ramen, and now I like to eat just omelette.

Original mixes timeframes and has errors: 'when I when I was 60 year older' is incorrect. Replace with clear sequence: liked pizza as a child, preferred ramen when older, now like omelette. Use past tense for past preferences and present for current. Suggestion: Organize chronological events clearly and use consistent tense for each time period.