Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response clearer and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the food, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Keep it under five sentences and avoid repetition and wrong verb forms.

例: My favourite food is pizza. I enjoy it because of the variety of toppings and the combination of crispy crust and melted cheese. For example, I often choose a vegetable and chicken pizza when I want something filling but not too heavy.

提案: Organise the answer into a clear topic sentence and specific supporting details. Correct vocabulary and articles (e.g., ‘the’), avoid repetition, and use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘for example’ once correctly. Provide a concise personal anecdote to enrich the answer.

例: When I was young, I loved homemade noodle soup. It was warm and comforting because my mother made it after school, which made me feel cared for. For example, I often finished the whole bowl every day because the broth was fresh and flavoured with herbs.

提案: Use consistent tense and clearer linking. Start with a direct topic sentence, then contrast summer and winter habits with specific food examples and concise reasons. Avoid awkward phrasing like ‘I do not want myself to in the heat.’

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. In summer I prefer light salads and chilled fruit because the weather is very hot and I want something refreshing. In winter I choose hot soups and stews, as they help me stay warm and comfortable.

提案: Make the timeline and contrast clearer with correct grammar and fewer filler words. Begin with a clear statement that your preferences have changed, then give specific examples of past and current foods and reasons for the change. Keep sentences concise and use linking words like ‘however’ and ‘now’.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood. As a child I enjoyed sweet snacks and fried foods, but now I prefer healthier options like grilled chicken and roasted vegetables because they give me more energy and help me stay healthy.

× While pizza is absolutely in my top tier, I like it because it's really tasty and feeling I and I often craving for it whenever I really hungry.

✓ While pizza is absolutely in my top tier, I like it because it's really tasty and I often crave it whenever I'm really hungry.

Original contains incorrect pronoun order and extra 'feeling I' plus wrong verb form 'craving' and missing auxiliary 'am' for 'hungry'. Use subject 'I' before verb, simple present 'crave' for habitual action, and contraction 'I'm' or 'I am' before adjective 'hungry'.

× As fast as I can remember homemade noodle soup.

✓ As far as I can remember, homemade noodle soup was my favorite.

Sentence fragment and tense mismatch. Use 'As far as I can remember' for memory and past tense 'was' to match 'when you were young'. Also add comma and complete clause including subject and verb.

× It was the my favorite food.

✓ It was my favorite food.

Contains both definite article 'the' and possessive 'my'; only one is needed. Remove 'the' so phrase becomes 'my favorite'.

× It was really warm and comforting and my mom made it for me after school so it felt like a treat.

✓ It was really warm and comforting, and my mom made it for me after school, so it felt like a treat.

Run-on ideas need commas to separate clauses. Add commas before conjunctions to improve readability and mark clause boundaries.

× For example, I used to finish the hobo almost everyday because because it tastes fresh.

✓ For example, I used to finish the bowl almost every day because it tasted fresh.

'Hobo' is likely a typo for 'bowl'. 'Everyday' (adjective) vs 'every day' (adverb); here use 'every day'. Past habitual action uses 'used to ...' and past tense 'tasted' to match. Removed duplicated 'because'.

× While I do, for example, in summer I often preferred lighter and cooler foods because the summer is really boiling and I do not want myself to in the heat.

✓ While I do, for example, in summer I often prefer lighter and cooler foods because the summer is really hot and I do not want to be in the heat.

Mix of present and past tenses: use present 'prefer' for habitual action. 'Boiling' as adjective can be used but 'hot' is more natural; 'do not want myself to in the heat' is ungrammatical—use 'do not want to be in the heat'.

× But in contrast, in the winter I prefer hot soups and stews because they keep me warm.

✓ But in contrast, in winter I prefer hot soups and stews because they keep me warm.

Minor article/spacing: 'in the winter' is acceptable but 'in winter' is more natural for habitual seasonal statements. No tense change needed; correction simplifies phrasing.

× Well yes, my favorite food has changed since I was little When I was a Jo.

✓ Well, yes, my favorite food has changed since I was little.

Original includes garbled fragment 'When I was a Jo.' Remove the fragment and add comma after 'Well' for clarity. Present perfect 'has changed since I was little' correctly links past and present.

× When I was younger, I love sweet snacks and fried foods.

✓ When I was younger, I loved sweet snacks and fried foods.

Mismatch between past time marker 'when I was younger' and present tense 'love'. Use past tense 'loved' to describe past preferences.

× However, now I much prefer healthier dishes like grilled chicken or vegetables because they really recharge my energy and keep my well-being balanced.

✓ However, now I much prefer healthier dishes like grilled chicken or vegetables because they really recharge my energy and keep my well-being balanced.

Sentence is grammatical overall. Keep present tense 'prefer' for current habit. 'Recharge my energy' is acceptable though 'replenish my energy' could be more natural; no required change per list.