Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating your favourite (or lack of one), then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and repetitions and keep to at most 4–5 sentences. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “porridge,” “noodles,” “breakfast”).

例: I don't have a single favourite food, but when I lived with my parents we usually had noodles for breakfast. This was a daily habit and I enjoyed it because the noodles were fresh and comforting. Therefore, noodles are a food I associate with home and good memories.

提案: Open with a clear topic sentence and give specific supporting details with linking words. Reduce hesitations and small repetitions. Add a brief explanation of why the food was special (taste, family tradition) and keep responses within 3–4 sentences.

例: When I was young I loved to eat noodles. In particular, my family made handmade noodles every weekend, and we would eat them together. Because of this tradition, noodles remind me of family time and taste especially comforting.

提案: Be specific: start with a clear affirmative or negative sentence, then give one or two concrete seasonal examples. Use linking words (for example, in spring, during festivals) and try to find English names for traditional foods or briefly describe them. Avoid long pauses and fillers.

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in winter we eat hot soups and stews to stay warm, while in summer we prefer cold noodles and fruits. During Chinese New Year we eat a special dish called POMI, which is a sweet rice cake made from glutinous rice.

提案: Answer directly then explain briefly with one or two supporting reasons. Reduce hesitations and correct small mistakes (e.g., “not changed,” not “not change”). Use linking words like “because” or “so” and give a specific example of a memory or situation that keeps the preference unchanged.

例: My favourite food has not changed since childhood because I have always loved noodles. Even now I often choose noodles when I want something comforting, since they remind me of family meals from my childhood.

× That's a good question. Actually. I don't have some kinds of favorite food.

✓ That's a good question. Actually, I don't have a particular favorite food.

Original contains fragment 'Actually.' and 'some kinds of favorite food' is ungrammatical. Combine into one sentence and use 'a particular favorite food' or 'a specific favorite' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and use correct noun phrases (a particular favorite food).

× Uh, but when I was young or, or, or when I live with my parents, usually I have, uh, share noodles every morning because it, it lights, uh.

✓ But when I was young, or when I lived with my parents, usually we shared noodles every morning because it was light.

Multiple tense problems and subject mismatch: 'when I live' should be past 'when I lived'; 'usually I have, share noodles' should be past 'we shared noodles' with correct subject; 'it lights' unclear but likely 'it was light' referring to morning light. Ensure past tense consistency for habits in the past and correct subject-verb agreement. Use 'we' if family shared the action.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young?

✓ What kind of food did you like when you were young?

This sentence is already correct. No change needed. (Included for completeness.)

× When I was young, I, I always liked to eat noodles, Uh, still until now, uh, because noodles are quite special for us.

✓ When I was young, I always liked to eat noodles, and I still do now because noodles are quite special to us.

Mixes past and present awkwardly. Use simple past for past habit 'always liked' and present simple 'I still do now' for current preference. Also use 'special to us' instead of 'special for us'.

× Every, uh, weekend our family made together for noodles and ate together.

✓ Every weekend our family made noodles together and ate them together.

Word order and verb usage: 'made together for noodles' is incorrect. Use 'made noodles together' and include object 'them' for clarity. Keep past tense 'made' and 'ate' consistent.

× So they are quite special for me.

✓ So they are quite special to me.

Preposition choice: 'special to me' is the correct collocation in English, not 'special for me'.

× Yes, definitely. Because some kinds of food are, are, uh, some kinds of foods can come from, uh, vary from the, uh, uh, waiters and uh, seasons, for example, uh, we always had like how, how I don't know how to call it in English.

✓ Yes, definitely. Some foods vary by region and by season; for example, we always had a dish called POMI during Chinese New Year.

Original is disfluent and repeats 'some kinds of'. 'Vary from the waiters' is incorrect; probably meant 'vary by region' or 'vendors' but context suggests 'region' or 'season'. Use 'foods vary by region and season' and simplify. Also 'we always had a dish called...' clarifies 'how I don't know how to call it in English.'

× It's called POMI in our Chinese New Year's.

✓ It's called POMI at our Chinese New Year.

Incorrect article and possessive: 'Chinese New Year's' should be 'Chinese New Year' without possessive, and use preposition 'at' for an event. 'During Chinese New Year' is also acceptable.

× Uh, in my opinion, my favorite food, uh, Norton is not changed, uh, because since I was young, I love to eat, uh, noodles.

✓ In my opinion, my favorite food has not changed because since I was young I have loved eating noodles.

Tense and word order issues: 'Norton' seems incorrect and removed. Use present perfect 'has not changed' to link past to present, and present perfect 'have loved' to express continuous preference since childhood. Use 'eating noodles' (gerund) after 'love' in this continuous context.

× So cur currently I'll also like to eat noodles, so not change because it always remember my childhood memories.

✓ So currently I still like to eat noodles; it reminds me of my childhood memories, so my preference hasn't changed.

Multiple problems: 'cur currently I'll also like' is wrong; use 'currently I still like'. 'Not change' should be 'hasn't changed'. 'It always remember' requires subject-verb agreement and tense: 'it reminds me' and 'my childhood memories' is redundant; 'reminds me of my childhood' is clearer. Use consistent present tense for current state.