Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答自然但重复、犹豫较多，句子冗长且含填充词。建议：1) 开门见山给出主题句（1句）；2) 用一到两句具体原因或例子支持，避免重复描写；3) 删除多余填充词（umm, uh等）；4) 使用连词连接观点（because, so, which）。

例: My favourite food is chocolate cake because it always lifts my mood. For example, after a stressful day at work, a slice of rich chocolate cake makes me feel comforted and happy.

提案: 答案不够直接且自相矛盾，表达混乱并重复。建议：1) 先直接回答儿童时期喜欢的食物；2) 用1句说明原因或对比现在的喜好；3) 保持逻辑一致，避免自我纠正；4) 控制句子长度和填充词。

例: When I was young, I loved candy because I enjoyed their bright colours and sweet taste. However, as I grew older I developed a stronger preference for chocolate cake because it feels more indulgent.

提案: 回答有方向但不完整且结尾突然中断，信息不足。建议：1) 给出明确的肯定或否定；2) 列举一至两个具体节日和对应食物；3) 使用连词（for example, during）使句子完整；4) 避免重复和停顿。

例: Yes, we do. For example, during the Spring Festival we always eat dumplings because they symbolise wealth, and at the Mid-Autumn Festival we eat mooncakes to celebrate family reunion.

提案: 回答含语法错误和指称不明（'he'误用），表达重复且词汇贫乏。建议：1) 使用正确的人称和句型（It hasn't changed）；2) 用一两句说明原因并举例；3) 避免反复列举相似词；4) 用更准确词汇（sweets, chocolate products）。

例: No, it hasn't changed. I have always preferred sweet foods, especially chocolate products such as cakes and bars, because I enjoy their rich flavour and comforting texture.

× Well, when I was young, I really like eat candy, but I don't talk about food.

✓ Well, when I was young, I really liked eating candy, but I won't talk about food.

问题类型：现在时/过去时混用。句中描述过去的喜好，主句应使用过去时（liked），动词短语“like eat”不正确，应使用动名词或不定式，这里用“liked eating”。另外“but I don't talk about food”在表意上想说“我现在不想谈论这个”，更自然用将来或现在进行，此处改为“I won't talk about food”。建议：叙述过去的习惯使用过去时，喜欢某动作常用“like + -ing”。

× I think uh, it's always chocolate cake yes umm, it is.

✓ I think it's always chocolate cake, yes it is.

问题类型：单复数与标点停顿问题。原句重复“it's always chocolate cake yes umm, it is”有多余停顿和重复，需合并为连贯一句。建议：去除多余词和语气填充词，使句子简洁。

× It's really my favorite, favorite food uh, up to up to now and 'cause I think it's really.

✓ It's really my favorite food up to now, because I think so.

问题类型：时态与句子结构不完整。原句“up to up to now”重复，结尾“'cause I think it's really”不完整，需改为“because I think so”。建议：避免重复词，确保因果句完整表达。

× Of course, my family is very is a traditional Chinese family, so umm, we, we usually celebrate every festival in our, uh, country, such as we need to eat dumpling in.

✓ Of course, my family is a traditional Chinese family, so we usually celebrate every festival in our country; for example, we need to eat dumplings at (or during) certain festivals.

问题类型：介词使用和名词单复数错误。原句“eat dumpling in”中“dumpling”应为复数“dumplings”，并且介词“in”位置不对，应使用“at”或“during”表示在节日期间。建议：节日时吃某物用“eat + plural”，地点或时间用正确介词（at/during）。

× I think he's not. I always love sweet things, especially chocolate and, uh, every products, you know, every chocolate products, uh, like chocolate cake, chocolate bar and so many things.

✓ I don't think it has changed. I have always loved sweet things, especially chocolate and all chocolate products, like chocolate cake, chocolate bars, and many other things.

问题类型：代词使用与主谓一致、时态和名词复数错误。原句“I think he's not”代词不明确且语法错误，应为“I don't think it has changed”以回应“Has your favourite food changed?”. “I always love”应与过去到现在的持续性用现在完成时“have always loved”。“every products/every chocolate products”中“every”不能与复数名词连用，且“chocolate bar”需复数。建议：回答是否改变用否定句结构“I don't think it has changed”；表示长期喜好用现在完成时；使用“all”或省略“every”搭配复数名词。