Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation (uh/umm), correct small grammar and avoid irrelevant phrase (“The test really good”). Add one specific detail about taste or preparation and use a linking word for clarity.

例: My favourite food is dolma because it reminds me of family gatherings during holidays. Moreover, dolma is versatile — we often fill it with spiced meat or rice and herbs, giving it a savory and aromatic flavour.

提案: Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition and hesitations. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give a brief reason and a specific example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'also'.

例: When I was a child, I loved sweets such as chocolate and candy because they made me happy. Also, my parents often gave me chocolates as rewards when I did well at school.

提案: Be specific and grammatically correct: use consistent tense, avoid trailing off, and add a linking word to compare seasons. Give one clear example of a winter and a summer dish and explain briefly why.

例: Yes. In winter I prefer warm dishes like chicken soup because they are comforting, while in summer I eat more salads and grilled vegetables because they are refreshing, especially when I'm at the beach or at outdoor festivals.

提案: Answer clearly and avoid filler words. Start with a direct statement about change, then give specific examples of what you eat now and why. Correct grammar (e.g. 'I check the ingredients' and 'I prefer low-carb foods'). Limit to two to three sentences.

例: Yes, my preferences have changed. Now I choose healthier options — for example, I check ingredients and prefer low‑carb meals like grilled fish with vegetables because they help me feel more energetic and fit.

× My favorite food is Dolma uh, I like them because they remind me of umm, family gathering during holiday.

✓ My favorite food is dolma; I like it because it reminds me of family gatherings during the holidays.

Use singular pronoun 'it' for singular noun 'dolma' instead of 'them'. Use 'reminds' to agree with singular subject. Use plural 'gatherings' for repeated events and add 'the' with 'holidays'. Suggestion: refer to a singular food with 'it' and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct articles.

× The test really good and uh, you can put different uh, things inside like meat or vegetable.

✓ They are really good, and you can put different things inside, such as meat or vegetables.

Sentence lacks a verb for the subject; 'The test' is incorrect reference—should be 'they' if referring to dolma. Add verb 'are' and pluralize 'vegetables'. Use 'such as' for examples. Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a clear subject and verb and maintain number agreement.

× I like to eat sweets like chocolate and candy when I was young as a kid, uh, that's, uh, make me happy.

✓ I liked to eat sweets like chocolate and candy when I was young; that made me happy.

Shift to past tense for actions in childhood: 'like' -> 'liked', 'make' -> 'made'. Also use 'that' as subject with past verb. Suggestion: match verb tenses to the time frame described.

× And also my family when I, they buy for me chocolate or candy when I did the good in school, they give me as a gift that's.

✓ Also, when I did well in school, my family bought me chocolate or candy as a gift.

Use past tense 'bought' and 'did well' for past events. Remove unnecessary pronoun repetition ('they') and reorganize clause order. 'Did the good' is incorrect collocation; use 'did well'. Suggestion: use correct past tense verbs and standard collocations.

× Yes, I prefer to eat something warm like soup umm, in winter and I like to eat uh, vegetables or salads in summer, especially when I went to beach or festival in summer, I prefer to eat something make me.

✓ Yes, I prefer to eat something warm like soup in winter, and I like to eat vegetables or salads in summer, especially when I go to the beach or to festivals; I prefer foods that make me feel good.

Use present tense 'go' to describe habitual actions. Add articles 'the beach' and plural 'festivals'. 'Something make me' is ungrammatical; use 'foods that make me feel good' or 'something that makes me feel good' with correct relative clause and verb agreement. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and include appropriate articles and relative pronouns.

× Yes, uh, now I prefer to eat something healthy, something make me, uh, active, uh, good for my body.

✓ Yes, now I prefer to eat healthier foods that make me feel more active and are good for my body.

Use comparative/adjective form 'healthier' or 'healthy foods'. 'Something make me' lacks 'that' and correct verb agreement; use 'that make me'. Ensure parallel structure and include 'are' for 'good for my body'. Suggestion: use relative clauses with 'that' and parallel adjective forms.

× I'm just check the ingredients. I'll, I'm just like to eat low carb. I prefer to eat too much.

✓ I just check the ingredients. I like to eat low-carb foods. I try not to eat too much.

Fix verb form 'I'm just check' -> 'I just check'. Use hyphenated adjective 'low-carb' and plural 'foods' after it. 'I prefer to eat too much' is incorrect meaning; likely intended 'I try not to eat too much' or 'I prefer not to eat too much'. Suggestion: use correct auxiliary verbs and clear expressions for preferences and habits.