Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần nói rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'it is' thay vì 'it really'), tránh tiếng 'uh' lặp lại, và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn (thành phần salad, tần suất ăn). Giữ dưới 5 câu và dùng từ nối nếu cần mở rộng ý.

例: My favourite food is salad because it is fresh and healthy. I eat it several times a week, usually with lettuce, tomatoes, and grilled chicken. Because it is low in calories and high in vitamins, it helps me stay fit and energetic.

提案: Cần sử dụng thì quá khứ nhất quán và hoàn thành câu: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ở quá khứ ('I liked...'), tránh tiếng lắp, cung cấp một câu giải thích ngắn về lý do và kết luận so sánh với hiện tại. Sử dụng từ nối như 'because' hoặc 'but' để liên kết ý.

例: When I was young, I liked candy and chocolate because they tasted very sweet. My parents often gave me sweets as presents, but now I mostly avoid them to stay healthy.

提案: Ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng cần dùng cấu trúc hoàn chỉnh và từ nối: mở bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu ví dụ cụ thể với linking words như 'for example' hoặc 'in winter'. Tránh để lại câu rời rạc và loại bỏ tiếng lắp.

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in winter I often choose hot soups to stay warm, while in summer I prefer cold desserts like ice cream.

提案: Trả lời cần mạch lạc và tránh từ không phù hợp ('suddenly'). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu sự thay đổi, dùng thì phù hợp (past vs present), nêu lý do ngắn gọn (ví dụ: thay đổi khẩu vị, lối sống) và loại bỏ cụm từ không hoàn chỉnh. Giữ dưới 5 câu.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I liked candy and chocolate, but now I prefer fast foods such as fried chicken and fries because I enjoy the savory taste and often eat out with friends.

× I really like salad because it really fresh and healthy.

✓ I really like salad because it is really fresh and healthy.

Missing the verb to be (is) before adjectives describing salad. Add 'is' to form a complete predicate: 'it is fresh and healthy.' This fixes sentence structure and subject-predicate agreement.

× I usually it also helps me stay fit and energetic.

✓ Usually, it also helps me stay fit and energetic.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and an extra pronoun 'it'. Move the adverb 'usually' to the beginning or before the verb and remove the extra 'it' to create a correct sentence: 'Usually, it also helps me stay fit and energetic.'

× Uh, it has been uh, my more way to create.

✓ Uh, it has been a better way for me to do that.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace 'my more way to create' with a natural phrase: 'a better way for me to do that.' Use the article 'a' and the comparative 'better' to convey improvement.

× Uh, in the past, I really like uh, candy or chocolate because it really sweet.

✓ Uh, in the past, I really liked candy or chocolate because it was really sweet.

Talking about past habits requires past tense: change 'like' to 'liked' and 'is' to 'was' to match the past timeframe.

× My parents often gave me a candy as a present.

✓ My parents often gave me candy as a present.

'Candy' is uncountable in general use, so omit the indefinite article 'a'. Use 'a candy' only when referring to a single piece, otherwise 'candy' is correct.

× However, uh, now today I, uh.

✓ However, today I don't eat it as often.

Original is incomplete. Provide a full clause to convey contrast with past behavior: 'today I don't eat it as often.' This completes the sentence meaningfully.

× Actually yes, eating different food depending on uh seasons.

✓ Actually, yes, I eat different foods depending on the season.

Use a full clause with subject and verb: 'I eat'. Use plural 'foods' for variety and singular 'the season' or plural 'seasons' with 'depending on the season(s)'. Here 'the season' is more natural.

× Like a soup in winter and ice cream in the summer.

✓ Like soup in winter and ice cream in the summer.

Do not use the indefinite article 'a' before uncountable noun 'soup' in this general statement. Use 'soup' without article and keep 'the summer' with definite article.

× Suddenly when I was a child I really liked candy or chocolate, but today I like umm, fast food like fried chicken or fried potato.

✓ When I was a child I really liked candy or chocolate, but today I like fast food like fried chicken or fried potatoes.

Remove 'Suddenly' which is inappropriate. Maintain past tense 'liked' for childhood. Use plural 'potatoes' for fries and remove filler 'umm' for clarity.

× I also it's from the cuisine in.

✓ I also like food from that cuisine.

Original is ungrammatical. Use subject 'I' and verb 'like' and a clear object: 'food from that cuisine' to convey meaning. Place 'also' before the verb for natural word order.