Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: state your favourite food in one concise topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words (for example, because, also) to connect ideas, and correct basic grammar (e.g., "tasty", "on the other hand" should be used correctly). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: My favourite food is burgers. I like them because they are tasty and easy to make at home. Also, I enjoy adding spicy sauce for extra flavour, or a sweet chutney when I want something different.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence about childhood preferences, then give specific examples and a reason or memory. Use correct verb forms and simple linking words (for example, and, because, so). Avoid vague or confusing phrases like "want go with the seniors candy." Keep it to 2–3 well-formed sentences.

例: When I was young, I liked junk food, especially burgers and sweets. I often ate them with my friends because we enjoyed hanging out after school. Those times were fun and helped me bond with classmates.

提案: Start with a clear yes/no statement, then explain with specific details. Use linking words (because, when, so) and correct word order (e.g., "depend on my mood"). Keep sentences short and avoid repetition. Provide an example of seasonal variation if relevant.

例: No, I don't usually change my diet by season because my choices mostly depend on my mood. For example, when I go out with friends I often choose spicy or sweet snacks, regardless of the time of year.

提案: Give a clear answer (yes/no) and explain how tastes changed with specific contrasts (e.g., "I used to prefer homemade meals, but now I like spicier foods"), using correct tense and linking words (however, now, when I was a child). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. When I was a child I preferred homemade dishes, but as I grew older I started to enjoy spicier and sweeter foods, especially when eating out with friends.

× Generally, my favorite food is uh, young food because it's very tastious and I like spicy.

✓ Generally, my favorite foods when I was young were tasty snacks because they were spicy.

The original mixes ideas and misuses adjectives/adverbs: 'young food' is incorrect; 'tastious' is misspelled and should be 'tasty'; 'I like spicy' needs an object or adjective form ('spicy foods'). Also tense and plurality should match: refer to 'when I was young' and 'foods' plural. Suggestion: use clear noun phrases (spicy foods or tasty snacks) and correct adjectives.

× On another hand sweet.

✓ On the other hand, I also liked sweet foods.

The phrase 'On another hand' is wrong; the correct connective is 'On the other hand'. The fragment lacks a verb and object; it must be a full clause. Suggestion: use 'On the other hand, I also liked...' and include the noun 'foods'.

× But when I was specific thing that I would say that one of the my favorite food is the burgers, one of the easiest to make it at home and also very tasty.

✓ But if I had to be specific, I would say that one of my favorite foods is burgers because they are easy to make at home and very tasty.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and wordy: 'when I was specific thing' is incorrect; 'one of the my favorite food is the burgers' has article and number errors. Fix by rephrasing to conditional 'if I had to be specific' and correct articles/plural nouns. Suggestion: simplify clauses, ensure subject-verb agreement and correct pluralization.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young? When I was young I personally liked junk food to eat the spices.

✓ When I was young, I personally liked junk food and spicy snacks.

The phrase 'to eat the spices' is unidiomatic; use 'spicy snacks' or 'spicy food'. The past tense 'liked' is correct, but the object phrase should be idiomatic. Suggestion: combine related items with 'and' and use standard collocations like 'spicy food'.

× I only mentioned that I like burger.

✓ I only mentioned that I liked burgers.

Pronoun/tense consistency: since referring to the past ('when I was young'), use past tense 'liked' and plural 'burgers' or 'a burger' depending on meaning. Suggestion: match tense and pluralization.

× So at that time I want go with the seniors candy and eat with my friends to the junk food and spend a quality time.

✓ At that time I would go out with my older friends to buy candy and eat junk food while spending quality time together.

Original mixes tenses and uses incorrect verbs ('want go', 'seniors candy', 'to the junk food'). Use past habitual 'would go out', correct noun phrases 'older friends' or 'seniors', and proper prepositions: 'go out with', 'buy candy', 'eat junk food'. Suggestion: use clear verbs and prepositions and maintain past tense.

× Not yet the I don't like the different foods at different time of the year because I usually eat the foods at my depend on my mood and and when I was go outside with my friends at that time I eat the junk foods, spicy foods, sweet foods with friends.

✓ Not really. I don't eat different foods at different times of the year; I usually choose foods depending on my mood, and when I go out with my friends I eat junk food, spicy food, or sweets with them.

The original has many issues: incorrect adverb 'Not yet the', mixed tenses, wrong prepositions ('at my depend on my mood'), and repetition. Correct by using 'Not really', present simple for habits, 'depending on my mood', and proper parallel nouns. Suggestion: split into shorter sentences, use consistent tense and correct prepositions.

× Has your favourite food changed since you were a child? Yes, of course I I usually changed my food since I were a child because at at when I was a child I usually eat the homemade food.

✓ Yes, of course. My favorite food has changed since I was a child because when I was a child I usually ate homemade food.

Question uses present perfect 'Has... changed' so the answer should use present perfect: 'has changed'. The original incorrectly uses 'I usually changed' and 'since I were a child' (wrong tense and verb form). Also 'ate' is past. Suggestion: use present perfect for change since past to present and past simple for habitual past actions.

× But on the another hand, when I was young I changed my taste so I ate the spicy and sweet foods both.

✓ But on the other hand, when I was young my taste changed, so I ate both spicy and sweet foods.

Use 'on the other hand' and correct word order: 'my taste changed' is simpler than 'I changed my taste'. Use past tense 'ate' for past habits and structure 'both spicy and sweet foods'. Suggestion: prefer active, concise phrasing and correct conjunction placement.