Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details (why you like it and an example) using linking words. Correct pronoun/verb agreements and avoid repetition (don’t repeat “delicious” twice).

例: My favourite food is gyoza, Chinese-style dumplings. I like them because making the wrappers and filling is fun and social, so I often cook them with my family. Also, the combination of juicy filling and crispy bottoms tastes great, so sometimes I order gyoza at restaurants.

提案: Organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence, then specific examples and a concise consequence. Avoid unclear or ungrammatical phrases and correct tense and word choice errors. Use linking words (for example, however, so) to connect ideas. Keep it under five sentences.

例: When I was young I loved sweet foods, especially cakes such as shortcake and chocolate cake. For example, I ate cake often after school. As a result, my teeth suffered and I had to visit the dentist frequently, so now I brush my teeth more carefully.

提案: Make the response clearer and fix grammar and word order. Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific reason and a clear example. Use linking words like "because" and avoid sentence fragments. Replace vague phrases like "most of all food" with "most foods".

例: Not really. Because most foods are available year-round in my country, I usually eat the same dishes regardless of the season. For example, I often cook chicken with cabbage since I enjoy it and it is affordable.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence about change, then two concise reasons for the change using linking words. Correct tense and sentence structure; avoid repetition. Be specific about why you disliked it and what made you change your mind.

例: Yes. I used to dislike mentaiko because it was too spicy for me and its salty texture put me off. However, after trying it again recently and having it mixed with rice and butter, I found the flavour more balanced and now I enjoy it.

× My favorite food is gyoza, which is Chinese style dumplings.

✓ My favorite food is gyoza, which are Chinese-style dumplings.

'Gyoza' refers to plural dumplings here, so the relative clause requires plural verb 'are'. Also use hyphen in 'Chinese-style' as a compound adjective before a noun.

× I like them because it's fun to make.

✓ I like them because they're fun to make.

'Them' is plural, so the pronoun referring to 'gyoza' must be plural 'they're' rather than singular 'it's'. Use contracted form 'they're' or 'they are'.

× Not only it's fun to make them, but also it's delicious.

✓ Not only is it fun to make them, but they are also delicious.

The correlative structure 'Not only... but also...' requires correct clause order: 'Not only is it fun to make them' (inversion after 'not only'), and 'they are also delicious' uses plural subject 'they' for dumplings.

× I often make gyoza with my family.

✓ I often make gyoza with my family.

Sentence is grammatically correct. It uses simple present to describe habitual action, which fits the context.

× And I enjoy my time with my parents.

✓ And I enjoy spending time with my parents.

'Enjoy my time with' is a bit unnatural; 'enjoy spending time with' is the common collocation to express enjoying being with someone.

× Also sometimes I eat out gyoza, it is also delicious.

✓ Also sometimes I eat gyoza out; it is also delicious.

The verb phrase should be 'eat gyoza out' or 'eat gyoza at a restaurant'. The original word order 'eat out gyoza' is incorrect. Also this is a comma splice; two independent clauses should be separated properly with a semicolon or period.

× I used to like food that is sweet when I was was young.

✓ I used to like food that was sweet when I was young.

When referring to past habits, 'used to' is correct and the relative clause should use past tense 'was'. Also remove the duplicated 'was'.

× For example, I like shortcake or chocolate cake or something like that.

✓ For example, I liked shortcake or chocolate cake or something like that.

Because the question asks about childhood preferences (past), maintain past tense 'liked' to match 'when I was young'.

× So when I was a child I offered my my.

✓ So when I was a child I often had sweets.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and contains repetition 'my my'. Likely intended meaning is that the child was given sweets; 'I often had sweets' is a clear, grammatical phrasing.

× Teeth get bad and often got went to dentist.

✓ My teeth got bad and I often went to the dentist.

Use past tense for a past state: 'got' is fine for 'teeth got bad', but include possessive 'my' and add subject 'I' for 'went to the dentist'. Also 'went' is past tense; remove incorrect 'got went' sequence.

× Now I brush my teeth many times.

✓ Now I brush my teeth many times a day.

Add 'a day' to clarify frequency; present simple is correct for habitual action.

× Not really because in my country most of all food are available all year so I tend to eat the same dishes regardless of the season.

✓ Not really, because in my country most food is available all year, so I tend to eat the same dishes regardless of the season.

Use 'most food is' (uncountable 'food' takes singular verb). Remove 'of all'. Add commas for clarity and flow.

× For example, I ate chicken and cabbage every year because I like them and it's ex And it's not expensive.

✓ For example, I ate chicken and cabbage every year because I liked them and they were cheap and not expensive.

Match past tense 'ate' with 'liked'. 'It's ex' appears to be fragment; replace with 'they were cheap'. Use plural 'they' for 'chicken and cabbage' as items.

× Yes, for example, I used to hate mentaiko which is Japanese spicy food from Fukuoka, but now I like them very much.

✓ Yes. For example, I used to hate mentaiko, which is a Japanese spicy food from Fukuoka, but now I like it very much.

'Mentaiko' is an uncountable/food item treated as singular, so use 'it' not 'them'. Also add article 'a' before 'Japanese spicy food' and use commas to set off the nonrestrictive clause.

× I hate I hated mentaiko because it is spicy and.

✓ I hated mentaiko because it was spicy.

Use past tense 'hated' and 'was' to match past time frame. Remove redundant 'I hate' and trailing 'and'.

× And the shape was not the shape, the its shape, its shape didn't make me to eat.

✓ Also, its shape put me off eating it.

Original is repetitive and ungrammatical. 'Put me off' is a natural expression meaning 'discouraged me'. Use 'eating it' rather than 'to eat' after 'put me off'.

× But now I try them and I came to like.

✓ But now I tried it and I came to like it.

If referring to a past change up to now, use 'tried it' and 'came to like it'. Alternatively, present perfect 'have tried it and have come to like it' is possible: 'But now I have tried it and have come to like it.' Use 'it' for singular 'mentaiko'.