Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (chia động từ, dùng mạo từ), loại bỏ tiếng ồ ừ, trả lời trực tiếp hơn và cung cấp một chi tiết cụ thể. Nên dùng tối đa 3–4 câu, bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, rồi nêu lý do và một ví dụ ngắn.

例: My favourite food is beef because it gives me lots of protein and energy. For example, I often eat grilled beef before sports to feel more active. I also enjoy it in stews because it is flavorful and filling.

提案: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (thời quá khứ, danh-động từ số ít/ số nhiều, mạo từ), tránh từ lặp và nói rõ hoàn cảnh. Thêm liên từ để mạch lạc và một ví dụ cụ thể ngắn gọn.

例: When I was young, I liked noodles the most because they were cheap and filling. I used to eat a bowl of noodle every morning before going to school with my friends. The noodles kept me full and ready to learn.

提案: Tránh trả lời lan man và sử dụng từ không rõ nghĩa; dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: nói có/không, giải thích và cho ví dụ theo mùa. Loại bỏ tiếng cảm thán không cần thiết và kiểm tra từ vựng (ví dụ 'banjo' không phù hợp).

例: Yes, I do. In summer I prefer light meals like salads and cold noodles, while in winter I choose hot dishes such as soup or stews. For example, during winter I often make chicken soup to feel warm and comfortable.

提案: Hoàn thành câu ý nghĩa và dùng thì đúng (quá khứ vs hiện tại). Tránh câu bỏ lửng; cung cấp lý do cụ thể cho sự thay đổi và một ví dụ ngắn về món ăn hiện tại.

例: Yes, it has changed. As a child I enjoyed simple dishes like boiled rice with fish, but now I prefer spicy and international food. For example, I often eat Korean kimchi stew because I like its bold flavours.

× There are a variety of food I like, but my favorite food I like most is uh beef.

✓ There is a variety of food I like, but the food I like most is beef.

The expression 'a variety' is singular so use 'There is' (There be issue). Also 'a variety of food' refers to 'types of food' and sounds better as 'a variety of foods' or 'various foods'. 'My favorite food I like most' is redundant; simplify to 'the food I like most'. Use definite article 'the' before 'food I like most'. Suggestions: use 'There are various foods I like' or 'I like a variety of foods; the food I like most is beef.'

× So you know it is help me keep it and stay active.

✓ So you know it helps me stay active.

The verb should be in third person singular present form 'helps' (use present simple for habitual fact). 'Help me keep it' is unclear and ungrammatical; omit 'keep it'. Use 'stay active' rather than 'keep it and stay active'. Suggestions: say 'It helps me stay active and energetic.'

× Eating beef have me have more energy and stay motivated.

✓ Eating beef gives me more energy and helps me stay motivated.

Subject 'Eating beef' is singular gerund phrase, so verb must be singular ('gives', 'helps'). 'Have me have' is incorrect; use 'gives me' for 'provide me with'. Include 'helps me' for maintaining motivation. Suggestions: use 'Eating beef gives me more energy and helps me stay motivated.'

× There are many kinds of food I like, but uh, I like noodle most when I was young because it is a protein rich and I eat noodles everyday when I have to go to school or go outside with my close friend.

✓ There are many kinds of food I liked, but I liked noodles most when I was young because they are protein-rich and I ate noodles every day when I went to school or went out with my close friend.

Tense consistency: question asks about past ('when you were young'), so use past tense verbs ('liked', 'ate', 'went'). 'Noodle' should be plural 'noodles'. 'It is a protein rich' is incorrect: 'they are protein-rich' or 'they are rich in protein'. 'Everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverb). Suggestions: 'When I was young, I liked noodles most because they are rich in protein, and I ate them every day when I went to school or out with my close friend.'

× For example, at normal days I usually eat bread, noodles or spaghetti.

✓ For example, on normal days I usually eat bread, noodles, or spaghetti.

Use preposition 'on' with 'days' ('on normal days'). Word order: 'at normal days' is incorrect. Comma before 'or' is optional but acceptable. Maintain present habitual tense 'eat' is fine. Suggestions: 'On normal days, I usually eat bread, noodles, or spaghetti.'

× So I take I often eat banjo or waited.

✓ So I often eat banh mi or hotcakes.

Original is unclear and contains nonwords 'banjo' and 'waited'. Likely intended local foods; I replaced with plausible items but keep structure 'I often eat...'. Ensure noun names are correct. Use 'I often eat' not 'So I take I often eat'. Suggestions: replace with the actual food names you meant and say 'I often eat X or Y.'

× Oh, it is very fantastic and uh.

✓ Oh, it is fantastic.

Trailing 'and uh' is filler; keep complete sentence with verb 'is'. 'Very fantastic' is acceptable but 'fantastic' alone is concise. Ensure sentences are complete and avoid filler words. Suggestions: 'Oh, it's fantastic.'

× Yes, of course, my favorite food has changed a lot in recent years.

✓ Yes, of course, my favorite food has changed a lot in recent years.

This sentence is correct; no change needed. 'Has changed' correctly uses present perfect to describe changes up to now. Suggestions: none.

× When I was a child, I love simple or traditional dishes like boiled rice with fish.

✓ When I was a child, I loved simple traditional dishes like boiled rice with fish.

When referring to past time ('When I was a child'), use past tense 'loved' not present 'love'. 'Simple or traditional' is redundant; 'simple traditional dishes' or 'simple, traditional dishes' is better. Suggestions: 'When I was a child, I loved simple, traditional dishes such as boiled rice with fish.'

× Nowadays I prefer spicy and international food such as Korean food, Chinese food because I.

✓ Nowadays I prefer spicy and international food such as Korean and Chinese food because I enjoy different flavors.

Original sentence is incomplete ('because I.'). Add a clause to complete the reason. Use parallel listing 'Korean and Chinese food'. Provide a clear verb for the reason ('enjoy different flavors'). Suggestions: 'Nowadays I prefer spicy and international food such as Korean and Chinese food because I enjoy different flavors.'