Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, start with a clear topic sentence then add one specific reason and an example. Avoid vague phrases like "just right and perfect." Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I love native fried chicken because it has a crispy skin and flavorful spices. For example, the marinade usually includes garlic and pepper, which gives it a rich aroma and makes it very satisfying to eat.

提案: Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood, and give a specific reason or memory. Keep it to two or three sentences and use a linking word to show continuity.

例: When I was young, I liked fried food because it tasted stronger than plain vegetables. For example, I used to love fried chicken nuggets at school, so even now I still prefer fried dishes to vegetables.

提案: Provide a clearer topic sentence, then give two specific seasonal examples connected with linking words. Avoid vague statements like "distinct taste in each weather."

例: Yes, I change what I eat with the seasons. For instance, I often eat light salads and grilled fish in summer, whereas in winter I prefer hot soups and stews to stay warm.

提案: Answer directly, then add one clear supporting detail with proper language. Avoid fillers like "uh" and casual phrases like "kinda tolerated." Use linking words to show contrast.

例: No, my favourite food is still native fried chicken. However, after trying many cuisines, I now appreciate other dishes such as grilled fish and spicy soups, even though fried chicken remains my top choice.

× My favorite food is native fried chicken.

✓ My favorite food is native fried chicken.

No grammatical correction needed. 'Native fried chicken' is acceptable as a noun phrase describing a local style of fried chicken. Keep phrasing as is.

× It is such a well seasoned food and it tastes just right and perfect.

✓ It is such well-seasoned food and it tastes just right.

Redundancy and adjective form: use the compound adjective 'well-seasoned' with a hyphen when placed before a noun. Saying 'just right and perfect' is repetitive; choose one. Suggestion: remove 'perfect' to avoid redundancy and keep concise wording.

× When I was young, I specifically like fried food because I'm not fond of eating vegetables.

✓ When I was young, I specifically liked fried food because I wasn't fond of eating vegetables.

Tense consistency: the clause begins with past time marker 'When I was young,' so the verb should be past tense ('liked') and the following state should also be past ('wasn't fond'). Change 'like' to 'liked' and 'I'm' to 'I wasn't' to match past timeframe.

× When I was younger and up until now, I still prefer fried food over vegetables.

✓ When I was younger and up until now, I have still preferred fried food over vegetables.

Tense mismatch: 'When I was younger' refers to the past, but 'up until now' connects past to present. Use present perfect ('have preferred') to express an action/state that began in the past and continues to now. 'Have still preferred' or 'have always preferred' are appropriate.

× Yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year because we have a variety of cuisines that we can choose from and we have a very distinct taste in each weather.

✓ Yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year because we have a variety of cuisines to choose from and distinct tastes in different kinds of weather.

Preposition and word choice: 'choose from' is fine but can be simplified to 'to choose from' -> 'to choose from' or 'to choose from' is redundant; use 'to choose from' or 'to choose'. Also 'a very distinct taste in each weather' is unnatural: use 'distinct tastes in different kinds of weather' or 'in each season' for clarity. Adjust noun plurality with 'tastes' to match 'different foods.'

× For example, we like to eat soup when it's raining.

✓ For example, we like to eat soup when it's raining.

No grammatical correction needed. Sentence is correct: 'when it's raining' appropriately describes the weather condition.

× Uh, no. My favorite food is still native fried chicken, but ultimately I have tasted a lot of food that developed my taste buds so I kinda tolerated a different kind of food.

✓ Uh, no. My favorite food is still native fried chicken, but I have tasted a lot of foods that have developed my taste buds, so I can tolerate different kinds of food.

Several issues corrected: use plural 'foods' when referring to many items; use present perfect 'have tasted' (kept) and 'have developed' to show past actions affecting the present; 'kinda' is informal—use 'can' or 'am able to' for clarity; 'tolerated' should be present ability 'tolerate' or 'can tolerate' because the meaning is ongoing. Also make 'different kinds of food' plural for correctness.