Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence stating the food, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers and repetition. Also use correct name of the dish (e.g., bánh bột or bánh mì) and simple adjectives to describe taste and texture.

例: My favourite food is bánh mì from Vietnam. I like it because the bread is crispy, the fillings are fresh, and the flavours are a great mix of sweet and savoury.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence about the food you liked as a child, then give specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and avoid irrelevant phrases.

例: When I was young, I loved ice cream because it was sweet and refreshing. For example, I often ate vanilla or mango ice cream after school, which made me feel happy and cool.

提案: Make a clear yes/no response and explain briefly with a reason and a specific example. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' if contrasting. Remove hesitations and repetitive phrases.

例: No, I don't eat very different foods at different times of the year because I enjoy the same dishes all year. For example, I eat bánh mì and noodle soups throughout the seasons rather than switching for special meals.

提案: Give a clear short answer and then explain with one or two specific reasons why it hasn't changed (or how it has). Use correct vocabulary to describe qualities (e.g., 'fresh', 'flavourful', 'special') and avoid invented words.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed. I still love bánh mì because it tastes fresh and flavourful, and it reminds me of home and family meals.

× My favorite food is bun bar where in Vietnam, because I think this is is a 1 foot very, uh, very it uh, very wonderful and umm, uh.

✓ My favorite food in Vietnam is bun bo; I think it is very wonderful.

The original sentence has redundant words and incorrect articles/phrasing. Use 'My favorite food in Vietnam is bun bo' to place the article correctly and name the dish. 'This is is a 1 foot very...' is ungrammatical and redundant; replace with 'I think it is very wonderful.' Ensure single verb 'is' and correct noun order. Suggestion: keep sentences concise and use subject + verb + object structure. Grammar problem type ID:22

× A lot of smart people in the young I love ice cream because of ice cream dishes. Umm, ice cream. This is a very light and fresh. For instance, ice cream.

✓ When I was young, I loved ice cream because it tastes light and refreshing.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary phrases. 'In the young' should be 'when I was young' to indicate past time. Use past tense 'loved' to match the time frame. Replace 'because of ice cream dishes' with a clear reason: 'because it tastes light and refreshing.' Avoid repeating the noun unnecessarily. Suggestion: start with the time phrase, use past tense, and give a concise reason. Grammar problem type ID:26

× No, I do because I, I very like food and I, I feel happy, uh, when I uh, eating and drinking, umm uh umm, because I love it and I not different time of the year.

✓ No, I don't; I really like food and I feel happy when I eat and drink, so I do not eat different foods at different times of the year.

Multiple tense and auxiliary errors: 'I do because' seems intended as negative—use 'No, I don't.' 'I very like' is incorrect—use 'I really like.' 'When I uh, eating' needs base verb after 'when': 'when I eat and drink.' 'I not different time of the year' should be 'I do not eat different foods at different times of the year.' Suggestion: use correct negation with auxiliary verbs, appropriate adverb placement ('really like'), and correct verb form after time conjunctions. Grammar problem type ID:6

× No, I haven't. I I very like Bumba because Bumba is very especially and I find one one of fresh knotting. Fresh knotting is pumper and suffering that I love bumper.

✓ No, it hasn't. I still like bun bo because it is special and I find it very fresh and tasty.

The question asked 'Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?' so answer should refer to the food changing: use 'No, it hasn't.' The student's following sentence 'I I very like Bumba' should be 'I still like bun bo' or 'I really like bun bo.' 'Bumba is very especially' is ungrammatical; replace with 'it is special.' Phrases like 'fresh knotting' and 'pumper and suffering' are unclear; infer intended meaning 'fresh and tasty.' Suggestion: answer the yes/no question with correct subject for 'has', then give a clear simple present comment about current preference. Grammar problem type ID:26