Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and word choice, shorten redundancy, use clear linking words and specific sensory details. Correct verbs (make, not mate), avoid repeating the same idea, and use precise adjectives (savory, filling). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

例: My favourite food is dumplings because they are easy to make and remind me of family gatherings. Also, they are versatile: you can fill them with pork, cabbage or mushrooms, and serve them steamed or pan-fried. The warm, savory filling and soft wrapper always make them comforting.

提案: Fix grammar (restaurants, served, especially), be specific about the foods and add a brief reason. Use linking words (because, so) and limit to 2–3 sentences to avoid repetition.

例: When I was young I loved junk food, especially burgers and fries from a local place called Fuchsia, because they were cheap and tasty. I would save my pocket money to buy them as a treat.

提案: Make sentences concise, correct grammar (seasons, gives, refreshing), avoid contradictions (warm gives refreshment), and use specific examples of seasonal foods. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'because'.

例: Yes. In winter I prefer hearty soups like lentil or chicken soup because they are warming, while in summer I enjoy fresh seasonal fruits such as mangoes and lychees because they are refreshing.

提案: Improve grammar and cohesion, avoid repeating 'try', and be specific about changes (what you eat now instead). Use linking words (because, therefore) and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, it has. Because I now focus on health and exercise, I avoid high-calorie junk food and prefer balanced meals like grilled fish, steamed vegetables and brown rice. Therefore my childhood favourites have mostly been replaced by healthier options.

× My favorite food is dumplings because they are easy to mate and also it reminds me about my family gathering.

✓ My favorite food is dumplings because they are easy to make and they also remind me of my family gatherings.

Errors: 'mate' is a misspelling/word-choice error; correct verb is 'make' (verb form). 'it reminds' uses singular subject but refers to 'dumplings' (plural), so subject-verb agreement error; change to 'they remind'. 'about' with 'remind' is incorrect preposition; use 'remind me of'. 'family gathering' should be plural to match general experiences: 'family gatherings'. Suggest practicing subject identification (singular vs plural) and common verb collocations like 'easy to make' and 'remind someone of something'.

× It is easy to make and you can add different flavors they need.

✓ It is easy to make, and you can add different flavors as you need.

Errors: sentence is unclear and missing conjunction structure. 'they need' incorrectly refers to 'flavors' with wrong pronoun and verb; instead use 'as you need' or 'as needed'. Also add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. Suggest using clear connectors like 'as', 'if', or 'to suit your taste' and ensure pronouns match their antecedents.

× For example, you can fill the toppings with meat, cabbage and other vegetables to create a more lucrative dish.

✓ For example, you can fill the dumplings with meat, cabbage, and other vegetables to create a more flavorful dish.

Errors: 'fill the toppings' is incorrect collocation; you fill the dumplings or use toppings on dumplings. 'lucrative' is incorrect adjective meaning profitable; intended word is 'flavorful' or 'delicious'. Suggest checking collocations (fill the dumplings, add toppings) and choosing adjectives that fit the context.

× When I was young, I used to be fond of junk food as there were several restaurant in our locality which serve different kind of junk food.

✓ When I was young, I used to be fond of junk food as there were several restaurants in our locality which served different kinds of junk food.

Errors: 'restaurant' should be plural 'restaurants' to match 'several' (plural quantifier). 'serve' should be past tense 'served' to match past context ('when I was young' and 'there were'). 'different kind' should be plural form 'different kinds' or 'different types'. Suggest matching number and tense: plural nouns with plural quantifiers and verbs in past tense for past-time contexts.

× Specially Fuchsia was one of my favorite at that time.

✓ Especially, Fuchsia was one of my favorites at that time.

Errors: 'Specially' is wrong adverb; correct form is 'especially'. 'favorite' should be plural 'favorites' because 'one of' selects from plural items. Add a comma after 'especially' for clarity. Suggest reviewing common adverbs ('especially' vs 'specially') and agreement when using 'one of'.

× So I used to save my pocket money to purchase those food.

✓ So I used to save my pocket money to purchase that food or those foods.

Errors: 'those food' mixes demonstrative plural 'those' with uncountable singular 'food'. Use 'that food' (if referring to junk food in general) or 'those foods' (if referring to specific items). Suggest checking countability of nouns and matching demonstratives accordingly.

× Yes, definitely. I eat different kinds of food at different time of the year.

✓ Yes, definitely. I eat different kinds of food at different times of the year.

Errors: 'time' should be plural 'times' because 'different times' indicates multiple occasions. Keep present simple 'I eat' which is correct. Suggest checking singular/plural after quantifiers like 'different'.

× Especially in winter season I prefer different kinds of soup as it is warm and give a refreshment in warm season and also in various kind of season.

✓ Especially in winter I prefer different kinds of soup because they are warm and refreshing, and I also enjoy different soups in other seasons.

Errors: 'winter season' is redundant; use 'in winter'. 'it is warm' refers to 'soup' (plural), so use 'they are warm' and 'give a refreshment' is unnatural; use 'refreshing'. 'in warm season' redundant and wrong; clarify 'other seasons'. 'various kind of season' incorrect number and structure; use 'other seasons'. Suggest simplifying seasonal phrases and ensuring subject-verb agreement and adjective/adverb choices (refreshing is adjective describing soup).

× In Bangladesh for example, a lots of fruits are available which you can enjoy at various types of season.

✓ In Bangladesh, for example, a lot of fruits are available which you can enjoy in different seasons.

Errors: 'a lots of' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'a lot of' or 'lots of'. 'various types of season' is awkward; use 'different seasons' or 'various seasons'. Also prefer 'in different seasons' rather than 'at'. Suggest studying common quantifier phrases and prepositions for seasons ('in summer', 'in winter', 'in different seasons').

× As an adult now, I give great importance to my health condition, physical exercise.

✓ As an adult now, I give great importance to my health and physical exercise.

Errors: 'health condition' is awkward; 'health' is sufficient. The comma separates related nouns incorrectly; combine with 'and'. Tense 'give' present simple is fine. Suggest using concise noun phrases and correct coordination with 'and'.

× So I try to avoid junk food and high calorie food and try to keep a balanced diet food.

✓ So I try to avoid junk food and high-calorie foods and try to keep a balanced diet.

Errors: 'high calorie food' should be hyphenated as 'high-calorie' and plural 'foods' fits general reference. 'balanced diet food' is incorrect phrase; say 'keep a balanced diet'. Suggest learning adjective-noun combinations and fixed expressions like 'keep a balanced diet'.

× So various types of food that I used to like in childhood has changed.

✓ So the various types of food that I used to like in childhood have changed.

Errors: subject 'various types of food' is plural, so verb should be 'have' not 'has'. Add 'the' for clarity: 'the various types of food'. Past tense 'used to like' is correct. Suggest checking subject-verb agreement, especially when subjects contain quantifiers like 'various types'.