Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, theo sau là 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (lý do, hoàn cảnh) dùng liên từ để nối câu. Ngoài ra sửa lỗi từ vựng (“free” → “fried”, “celebrity party” có vẻ sai ngữ cảnh) và cấu trúc chủ ngữ-động từ (“my family and I”). Hãy giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu, tự nhiên và mạch lạc.

例: My favourite food is fried chicken because I love its crispy skin and juicy meat. I often eat it at weekends when my family and I go to KFC. Sometimes I also cook a milder homemade version for special occasions.

提案: Cần dùng thì quá khứ cho câu về quá khứ và cải thiện phát âm/flow. Tránh lặp từ 'umm' và sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'when I was young', 'I liked'). Nêu 1–2 ví dụ cụ thể (món ăn, lý do) và dùng liên từ để kết nối ý. Giữ câu ngắn, rõ ràng và tự nhiên.

例: When I was young, I liked fried foods such as french fries and fried chicken because they tasted crunchy and juicy. I especially enjoyed them at birthday parties.

提案: Cần dùng từ vựng chính xác và cấu trúc mạch lạc. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề tóm tắt thói quen theo mùa, sau đó đưa ví dụ cụ thể (lễ hội, món ăn) và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp ('most of the time', 'holidays') và tránh lặp từ. Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.</br>

例: Most of the time I eat simple meals with rice, meat and vegetables. However during holidays or family celebrations I prefer special dishes, such as fried chicken or festive sweets. These special foods make the events feel more enjoyable.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + lý do). Sửa lỗi thì và ngữ pháp ('hasn't changed', 'when I was a child' → present perfect contrast), tránh lặp từ, dùng 1–2 lý do cụ thể để hỗ trợ. Giữ câu ngắn, mạch lạc và tự nhiên.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed since childhood because I have always loved the taste of fried chicken. I still choose it for parties and family gatherings because it is flavorful and comforting.

× At a weekend I, my family and me, uh, and I go to the KFC to eat.

✓ At the weekend, my family and I go to KFC to eat.

The pronoun 'me' is incorrectly used as a subject. Use 'my family and I' for the subject of the sentence. Also use 'At the weekend' (or 'On weekends') and omit the article before KFC. Improve by placing the subject before the verb and using subject pronouns (I, he, she, we, they).

× Umm, the kind of food I like when I was were young is umm, the fried, uh, food I like umm to potato fried or chicken fried and is it so tasty and so juice and I really like to eat when I were a party.

✓ When I was young, I liked fried foods such as fried potatoes or fried chicken; they were very tasty and juicy, and I liked to eat them at parties.

The sentence mixes tenses and has incorrect verb forms ('was were', 'like' instead of 'liked', 'were a party'). Use past tense consistently for past habits: 'When I was young' and 'I liked'. Also use correct noun forms 'fried foods', and 'at parties'. To improve, decide the main tense (past) and apply correct past forms and pluralization. (Note: original sentence contained multiple errors including tense and plurality; corrected to coherent past-tense sentences.)

× and is it so tasty and so juice

✓ and they were so tasty and so juicy

'adjective/adverb forms are wrong: 'juice' is a noun; the correct adjective is 'juicy'. Also use 'they were' to match plural 'foods'. To improve, choose the correct adjective form and match number and verb: 'they were juicy'.

× Almost times of the year, I usually eat rice, meat and vegetable in every meal.

✓ Most of the time, I usually eat rice, meat, and vegetables at every meal.

Phrase 'Almost times of the year' is ungrammatical; use 'Most of the time' or 'Almost all year'. 'Vegetable' should be plural 'vegetables'. Preposition 'in every meal' should be 'at every meal'. To improve, use common time expressions and correct noun pluralization and prepositions. (Note: tense is present habitual; keep present simple.)

× But in the special times like Tate holiday or you know, some party, I usually prefer to umm, some special food like fried fried chicken, umm, some uh.

✓ But on special occasions like state holidays or parties, I usually prefer special foods like fried chicken.

Use 'on special occasions' instead of 'in the special times'. 'Tate holiday' seems to be 'state holiday' or 'a holiday' and needs correction. Use plural 'occasions/parties' and no article before 'fried chicken' when speaking generally. Remove duplicated 'fried'. To improve, use standard collocations: 'on special occasions', 'parties', and avoid repetition. (Note: multiple issues: article use and noun choice.)

× Absolutely not my favorite food didn't change when I work it or when when now umm.

✓ Absolutely not; my favorite food hasn't changed from when I was a child to now.

Sentence structure is broken and tenses are inconsistent. Use present perfect 'hasn't changed' to relate past to present. 'when I work it' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'when I was young' or 'when I was a child'. To improve, use clear time references and appropriate tense (present perfect) for changes over time. (Note: fixed meaning to match question about change since childhood.)

× I usually like to eat uh fried chicken because it is so tasty and mouth watering and I really like it when I would party when I go to.

✓ I usually like to eat fried chicken because it is so tasty and mouth-watering, and I really enjoy it when I go to parties.

'I really like it when I would party when I go to' mixes conditional/modal 'would' incorrectly and has awkward structure. Use 'I really enjoy it when I go to parties.' 'Mouth-watering' is a compound adjective. To improve, avoid unnecessary modals and use gerunds or simple present for habitual actions.