Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn nên sửa ngữ pháp và thứ tự từ, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi thêm chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn. Tránh lỗi như thiếu động từ, danh từ số nhiều/số ít sai, và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Ví dụ: nêu lý do chính (rẻ, tiện, ngon), mô tả một loại mì yêu thích và khi nào bạn ăn nó.

例: My favourite food is noodles because they are cheap, convenient and very tasty. I especially like beef pho, which has a rich, savoury broth and fresh herbs. I often eat it for lunch when I need something quick but filling.

提案: Cần nói rõ ràng về thời thơ ấu: dùng một câu chủ đề đơn giản, tránh từ không đúng nghĩa, và mô tả cụ thể về loại thức ăn, hương vị và lý do. Tránh từ lộn xộn hoặc không liên quan; giữ tối đa 3–4 câu ngắn.

例: When I was young, I liked eating cereals. They were colourful and crunchy, and my favourite was chocolate-flavoured cereal because it tasted sweet and fun to eat. I usually had it for breakfast before going to school.

提案: Câu trả lời mâu thuẫn và có lỗi về ý: bạn nói cả mùa hè và đông đều ăn đồ nóng. Hãy đưa câu chủ đề rõ ràng, so sánh mùa hè và mùa đông, nêu ví dụ cụ thể cho mỗi mùa và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year. In summer I prefer light and cold dishes, such as salads and cold noodles, to stay cool. In winter I like warm, hearty meals like soups and stews to keep warm.

提案: Cần chỉnh ngữ pháp và logic: tránh từ lạ như “lost grower” hoặc “thirsty”. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi giải thích tại sao vẫn thích (hương vị, kỷ niệm, tiện lợi). Giữ câu ngắn, cụ thể và mạch lạc.

例: No, it hasn't changed — I still like cereals. I often have chocolate-flavoured cereal for breakfast because it is colourful, tasty and quick to prepare. It also reminds me of happy childhood mornings.

× My favorite food is noodles because is cheap, convenience and very tasty.

✓ My favorite food is noodles because they are cheap, convenient, and very tasty.

The sentence uses incorrect adjectives/adverbs and omits the subject for the verb 'is'. 'Noodles' is plural so use 'they are'. Use adjectives 'convenient' not 'convenience'. Maintain parallel structure: 'cheap, convenient, and very tasty.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use adjectives (not nouns) to describe qualities.

× It has very kinds of noodles and I can enjoy my meal with noodles.

✓ There are many kinds of noodles and I can enjoy my meal with noodles.

Use 'There are' to indicate existence (article/be construction) and 'many' as the correct quantifier. 'Very kinds' is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'There are many kinds of...' or 'It has many varieties of...'.

× Whereas all the Chai I really like cereals because it's very colorful telescopes and scoops of fences.

✓ When I was young, I really liked cereals because they were very colorful and had interesting shapes.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains irrelevant words ('telescopes', 'scoops of fences'). 'When I was young' fits the past-tense time frame. Use past tense 'liked' and 'were' for plural 'cereals'. Suggestion: remove unrelated words and use clear descriptors.

× Uh, I like the best is chocolate taste of cereals because I can feel very.

✓ My favorite cereals had a chocolate taste because they made me feel happy.

The sentence mixes structures. Use a clear subject 'My favorite cereals' and past tense 'had'. The clause 'because I can feel very' is incomplete; specify the feeling. Suggestion: complete the thought and match tense.

× Yes I do. I eat different foods at different times of years.

✓ Yes, I do. I eat different foods at different times of the year.

Use the prepositional phrase 'at different times of the year' (singular 'year' is the conventional idiom). 'Times of years' is incorrect. Suggestion: use set expressions correctly.

× In the summer I usually eat hot food to freeze my temperature of the party and in the winter I always eat hot food too.

✓ In the summer I usually eat cold food to cool my body, and in the winter I always eat hot food.

The original contradicts typical meaning: 'eat hot food to freeze my temperature' is illogical. Use 'cold food to cool my body' if intended. Also 'temperature of the party' is incorrect. Suggestion: choose verbs and nouns that match meaning and use present simple for habitual actions.

× No it hasn't. My favorite food is still cereals now when I lost grower I still like cereals for breakfast because it's colorful, it has many chips, and thirsty, especially chocolate.

✓ No, it hasn't. My favorite food is still cereals. Even as I grew up, I still like cereals for breakfast because they're colorful, have many bits, and taste great, especially the chocolate ones.

Multiple issues: 'No it hasn't' refers to 'Has your favourite food changed?' is okay. 'Now when I lost grower' is incorrect; use 'as I grew up'. Use plural pronouns 'they're' for cereals. 'Has many chips' and 'thirsty' are wrong word choices; use 'have many bits' and 'taste great'. Suggestion: use correct verbs for growth, plural agreement, and appropriate adjectives.