Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence saying what your favourite food is, then give one or two specific reasons and an example. Avoid redundant phrasing and minor grammar errors (e.g., say "I'm from India" not "as being a person from India"). Use a linking phrase to connect your reason and example.

例: My favourite food is pizza. I especially like spicy pizzas because I grew up loving strong flavours in Indian cuisine. For example, when I meet friends I usually order a spicy pepperoni or paneer pizza, which we share while chatting.

提案: Use past tense consistently and structure the reply: state what you liked as a child, then give specific examples or reasons. Avoid repeating phrases and keep it to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences. Add a linking word to show contrast or addition.

例: When I was young, I mainly liked homemade food cooked by my mother. In addition, I loved sweets like chocolate and ice cream; my favourite flavour was chocolate. Because my family often celebrated small occasions at home, desserts were a regular treat.

提案: Begin with a direct answer and then give a specific seasonal example. Correct small errors (say "Diwali" not "Diwali's"). Use a linking phrase like "however" to contrast routine and special occasions. Be slightly more specific about the foods you buy.

例: Generally, I eat the same foods throughout the year. However, during special occasions such as Diwali, we buy sweets from the bakery, like ladoos and barfi, and share them with family and guests.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first, then provide concise supporting details. Fix grammar and vocabulary mistakes (e.g., "favourite foods" not "favorite forwards", use past simple or present perfect appropriately). Avoid filler words like "uh". Mention one or two foods as examples and link them logically.

例: Not really — my tastes have been quite consistent. I still enjoy curries and okra, and I loved mango shakes as a child; I still drink them now because they remind me of summer and family meals.

× My favorite food is pizza as being a person from India and I love to have spicy things.

✓ My favorite food is pizza because I am from India and I love spicy food.

The phrase 'as being a person from India' is awkward; use 'because I am from India'. 'Love to have spicy things' is unnatural; use 'love spicy food'. Also maintain present simple for general truths.

× So it is my favorite food and whenever I meet up with my friends I will usually eat pizza because I love that.

✓ So it is my favorite food and whenever I meet up with my friends I usually eat pizza because I love it.

'Will usually eat' is incorrect for habitual actions; use present simple 'usually eat'. Also 'love that' should be 'love it' for pronoun reference.

× When I was young I love to have homemade food which my mom makes and also when I was a child I loved eating chocolates as well as ice creams and my favorite flavour is chocolate.

✓ When I was young I loved to have homemade food that my mom made, and I also loved eating chocolates and ice cream; my favorite flavor was chocolate.

Mixing past and present tenses: 'When I was young' requires past tense 'loved' and 'made' not 'love' and 'makes'. Use 'ice cream' (uncountable) not 'ice creams'. Match 'favorite flavor' to past: 'was'.

× Yeah, usually I have the same routine of what I eat, but on special occasions, for example, during Diwali's, we usually buy sweet dishes from the bakery and we eat them.

✓ Yeah, usually I have the same routine of what I eat, but on special occasions, for example during Diwali, we usually buy sweets from the bakery and eat them.

Do not use possessive apostrophe with festival name: use 'Diwali' not 'Diwali's'. 'Sweet dishes' is acceptable but 'sweets' is more natural. Omitting the second 'we' before 'eat them' avoids repetition.

× Not really. I have the same for uh, I have the same favorite forwards which I like when I was a child as if I talk about Curry, I love to eat okra and there is one more drink which I love, which is mango shake.

✓ Not really. My favorites are the same as when I was a child. For example, I like curry, I love to eat okra, and I also love mango shakes.

The original has unclear phrasing and tense mismatch. 'I have the same for' is incorrect; use 'My favorites are the same as when I was a child.' 'Favorite forwards' is likely 'favorites'. 'If I talk about Curry' is awkward; use 'For example, I like curry'. Use plural 'mango shakes' and present simple for current preferences.

× That's the best.

✓ That's the best one.

Sentence fragment 'That's the best' is acceptable informally but adding 'one' clarifies reference to the mango shake. If keeping informal, it's fine; better to specify the noun.