Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите чётко и избегайте повторов и шумных вставок (например, "uh", "I'd"). Начните с ясного тематического предложения, затем добавьте одно-два конкретных подробных предложения с логическими связками. Также дайте немного больше описания (вкус, способ приготовления или когда вы обычно едите это).

例: My favourite food is Monte dumplings. They are very tasty, with a savory meat filling and a slightly crispy outside. I enjoy them any time of day, although I usually have them as a main meal because they are quite filling.

提案: Избегайте общих фраз типа "I loved food" и уберите шумовые слова. Дайте структурированный ответ: тема + причина изменения (связка: "because", "but now"). Уточните, как именно ваше отношение изменилось и приведите пример альтернативы, которую вы предпочитаете сейчас.

例: When I was young, I liked junk food such as pizza, burgers and Coca‑Cola because it tasted good and was convenient. However, now I avoid these foods because they are unhealthy, and I prefer home‑cooked meals and more vegetables instead.

提案: Ответ хорош, но уберите междометия и уточните причины и детали с логическими связками (например, "because", "so"). Можно добавить хотя бы одно конкретное блюдо для сезона, чтобы ответ был более конкретным.

例: Yes, I do. In summer I eat a lot of fresh fruit like watermelon and salads because they are refreshing and hydrating. In winter we usually eat hot soups and meat stews to keep warm and get more nutrients.

提案: Сформулируйте мысль яснее и уберите сомнительные фразы (например, "your receptors"). Используйте связки для объяснения причины изменений (например, "because", "over time"). Приведите конкретные примеры того, что вы любили и что любите сейчас, и объясните почему.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed over time. When I was a child I disliked vegetables and mushrooms, but now I enjoy mushrooms and more varied flavours because my palate has become more adventurous and I try different dishes.

× So my favorite food is Monte that those are dumplings actually.

✓ So my favorite food is momos; those are dumplings, actually.

The student used 'Monte' and 'that those' incorrectly. Use the correct noun 'momos' (if intended) and replace redundant demonstratives: 'those' alone is sufficient. Also add a comma before 'actually' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: identify the correct food name and avoid repetitive demonstratives.

× And those are so tasty.

✓ They are very tasty.

Using 'so' is acceptable in speech but 'very' is more formal and avoids colloquial exaggeration. Also replace 'those' with 'they' to refer back to 'momos' smoothly. Suggestion: use pronouns correctly to refer to previously mentioned nouns and choose register-appropriate intensifiers.

× And I'll I'd like to eat them at any time, but they are so huge that it's not that.

✓ I'd like to eat them at any time, but they are so huge that I cannot.

The original has extraneous 'I'll' and an incomplete clause 'it's not that'. Remove 'I'll' and replace the vague clause with 'I cannot' to express inability. Suggestion: keep modal verbs clear ('I'd like', 'I can't/cannot') and finish comparative or concessive clauses logically.

× So when I was a when I was young I loved food.

✓ When I was young, I loved food.

The sentence contains a repetition 'a when I was' and unnecessary article. Clean the repetition and use past tense 'loved' which is correct. Suggestion: avoid stuttering repetitions and ensure single clear temporal phrase at sentence start.

× I loved junk food like pizza, umm Coca-Cola or some burgers.

✓ I loved junk food like pizza, Coca-Cola, and burgers.

Use commas and 'and' for list clarity; remove 'some' before 'burgers' which is informal and unnecessary. Also capitalize brand properly and remove filler 'umm'. Suggestion: list items cleanly and avoid fillers in responses.

× But now I think that they are really not good for my health.

✓ But now I think that they are really not good for my health.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense and requires no change. It appropriately contrasts past liking with current opinion. Suggestion: maintain simple present for general opinions.

× Sometimes, yes, like uh, when it's summer I love to eat some watermelons, lots of fruit, vegetables, and when it's winter we eat lots of soups and meat to have our vitamins in our body.

✓ Sometimes, yes. In summer I love to eat watermelon, lots of fruit and vegetables; in winter we eat a lot of soups and meat to get vitamins into our bodies.

Use 'watermelon' as an uncountable noun for general preference, remove filler 'uh', and use parallel structure for seasons. 'Lots of soups' is odd; use 'a lot of soup' or 'soups' depending on meaning. 'Have our vitamins in our body' is awkward; use 'get vitamins into our bodies'. Suggestion: keep parallel structure, prefer uncountable forms for general foods, and use clear phrasing for purpose.

× Yes, it did change since I was a child because you're I think that my receptors changed a lot and I might not like some foods that I like before and some foods that I disliked are my favorite ones now, like mushrooms.

✓ Yes, it changed since I was a child because, I think, my taste buds changed a lot and I might no longer like some foods I liked before, while some foods I disliked are my favorites now, like mushrooms.

Remove incorrect 'did' with 'since' (simple past 'changed' is sufficient), remove 'you're', and replace 'receptors' with 'taste buds' which is the correct term. Use 'no longer' for cessation and match past/future references: 'foods I liked before'. Use plural 'favorites' and improve clause linking with 'while'. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary for body sensations, correct tense choice with 'since', and clearer clause connections.