Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer conveys enthusiasm and a clear choice, but it has grammatical errors, awkward phrasing, redundancy and an unclear metaphor (“oh mommy feelings”). Keep responses natural, use a topic sentence, support with specific reasons, and use linking words. Limit to under five sentences. For example, say the dish name, give two clear reasons (flavour and ingredients), and avoid vague expressions.

例: My favourite food is Nasi Goreng Jawa, a traditional fried rice from Java. I like it because it has a rich, balanced flavour—savory with a hint of sweetness—and it often includes fresh vegetables and spices. In addition, the smoky aroma from the wok makes it especially appetising. Overall, it feels comforting and satisfying.

提案: Good structure: direct topic sentence and comparison. Improve grammar (tense consistency, subject-verb agreement), remove repetition, and use linking words for coherence. Be specific about what you liked about carbonara (creamy texture, mild flavours) and contrast clearly with Indonesian food.

例: When I was younger I preferred lighter dishes like spaghetti carbonara. I enjoyed its creamy texture and mild, cheesy flavour, which contrasted with Indonesian food that is usually spicier. However, I still appreciate both cuisines for different reasons.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is unclear and contains grammar mistakes and hedging (“I think”). Organise with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples of seasonal changes (e.g., particular fish species available in certain months). Use linking words such as ‘however’ and ‘for example’ correctly and avoid uncertainty unless necessary.

例: Generally my main diet does not change much throughout the year because vegetables are available year-round in Indonesia. However, seafood does vary by season; for example, tuna is more abundant and cheaper during the summer months, while certain reef fish are common in the rainy season.

提案: Your answer is honest and relevant but has frequent grammatical errors, awkward phrasing and informal language (“anime influenced”). Make a clear topic sentence, then give concise reasons and an example of an influence. Use correct tense and smoother linking words such as ‘depending on’, ‘for example’, and ‘recently’.

例: My favourite food has changed over time depending on my mood and influences. Recently I prefer Indonesian dishes because of their bold flavours, but when I watched Japanese TV shows I developed a taste for sushi and ramen, for example.

× Recently I've been interested in Indonesia traditional dish for example like nasi goreng jawa or translated as fried rice originated from Java because it has a rich flavor and it helps you to understand what happened in your mouth when you have savory, sweet and oh mommy feelings from the vegetables it.

✓ Recently I've been interested in Indonesian traditional dishes, for example nasi goreng Jawa, which is translated as fried rice originating from Java, because it has a rich flavor and it lets you taste savory, sweet, and pleasant vegetable flavors.

Errors: 'Indonesia traditional dish' uses incorrect adjective form and singular/plural; 'for example like' is redundant; 'nasi goreng jawa' needs proper capitalization and article use; 'translated as fried rice originated from Java' uses wrong verb forms and prepositions; 'helps you to understand what happened in your mouth when you have savory, sweet and oh mommy feelings from the vegetables it' is unidiomatic and has word order issues. Suggestions: Use correct adjective forms (Indonesian), plural when speaking generally (dishes), remove redundant words, use 'which' to add nonrestrictive clause, use 'originating from' for correct participle, and replace informal/unclear phrases with clear sensory descriptions like 'lets you taste savory, sweet, and pleasant vegetable flavors.'

× When I was younger, I prefer something light such as spaghetti carbonara.

✓ When I was younger, I preferred something light such as spaghetti carbonara.

Error: tense mismatch. The time expression 'When I was younger' requires past tense. Use 'preferred' not 'prefer.' Suggestion: Match main verb tense to time reference; use past tense for past time frames.

× The taste is very distinct with our Indonesian dish that usually have strong spices.

✓ The taste is very distinct from our Indonesian dishes, which usually have strong spices.

Errors: 'distinct with' is incorrect preposition; 'our Indonesian dish' should be plural if speaking generally and needs 'which' to introduce the clause; subject-verb agreement 'have' must match plural 'dishes.' Suggestions: Use 'distinct from', pluralize 'dishes' for general statements, and use a relative clause 'which usually have'.

× Meanwhile the the spaghetti usually have lighter flavor.

✓ Meanwhile, spaghetti usually has a lighter flavor.

Errors: duplicate 'the', incorrect verb agreement 'have' with singular mass noun 'spaghetti', and missing article before 'lighter flavor' optional. Suggestion: Remove extra 'the', use 'spaghetti' without 'the' for general statements, and use singular verb 'has'.

× However, I acknowledge both are delicious.

✓ However, I acknowledge that both are delicious.

Error: missing conjunction 'that' after 'acknowledge' for clarity and formal correctness. Suggestion: Add 'that' to introduce the clause.

× For the main food is not because here in Indonesia you can find any vegetables at any time.

✓ The main dishes do not change much because here in Indonesia you can find vegetables at any time of year.

Errors: sentence lacks clear subject-verb structure 'For the main food is not' is ungrammatical; 'any vegetables at any time' needs clearer expression. Suggestions: Rephrase to a clear subject and verb, 'The main dishes do not change much' and clarify time 'any time of year.'

× However, for fish products for example, usually there are season where several type of fish is being farmed due to the migration of this fish I think.

✓ However, for fish products, for example, there are usually seasons when several types of fish are caught or farmed due to migration.

Errors: 'there are season' should be plural 'seasons'; 'several type' should be 'several types'; subject-verb agreement 'is being farmed' should match plural; awkward insertion 'I think' uncertain and placed poorly. Suggestions: Use plural forms for countable nouns, correct verb agreement, and place qualifiers like 'I think' separately if needed.

× It change regularly depends on the mood and what kind of influences I got at the time.

✓ It changes regularly, depending on my mood and the kinds of influences I got at the time.

Errors: 'change' lacks third-person singular 'changes'; 'depends on' needs gerund form 'depending' to link clauses smoothly; 'what kind of influences I got' is awkward—use 'the kinds of influences I got.' Suggestions: Use correct verb agreement, use gerund for participial phrase, and pluralize 'kinds' for variety.

× Recently I enjoyed Indonesian food better due to its flavor.

✓ Recently I have enjoyed Indonesian food more because of its flavor.

Errors: 'Recently' with ongoing preference fits present perfect 'have enjoyed' rather than simple past 'enjoyed'; 'better' should be 'more' when modifying 'enjoy' and 'due to' is less natural than 'because of' in this context. Suggestions: Use present perfect for recent changes that continue, and use 'more' to modify verbs.

× However there was some time I also keen to Japanese due to anime influenced.

✓ However, there were times when I was also keen on Japanese food because I was influenced by anime.

Errors: 'there was some time' should be 'there were times'; 'keen to' is incorrect preposition — use 'keen on'; 'keen to Japanese' missing noun 'food'; 'anime influenced' needs passive or 'influenced by anime.' Suggestions: Use plural 'times', correct prepositions ('keen on'), include the noun 'food', and use 'influenced by' for clarity.