Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and complete your sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons with linking words. Avoid absolute claims (e.g., "everyone") and fill pauses. Also correct small grammar: say "my favorite food is rice" and follow with a reason like "I eat it every day because...".

例: My favourite food is rice. I eat it almost every day because it is versatile and pairs well with many dishes, so it makes meal preparation easier.

提案: Use past tense when talking about childhood and avoid repetition. Give one clear reason and a short example. Structure: topic sentence in past tense, linking word, then specific detail. Reduce filler words and repetitions.

例: When I was young, I liked hamburgers. I loved them because they had a large beef patty and fresh vegetables, and I enjoyed eating them at family picnics.

提案: Answer directly, then expand with a clear reason and one example. Fix grammar: say "I don't eat different foods at different times of the year" and avoid repetitions. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to make it coherent.

例: No, I don't usually change my diet with the seasons because I try to maintain a balanced diet all year. For example, I include vegetables, protein and rice in most meals regardless of the season.

提案: Use clear tense contrast and avoid repetition. Start with a direct statement about change, then give reasons and specific examples. Use linking words like "when" and "now" or "however" to show contrast and be specific about what you prefer now.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. When I was a child I liked sweets such as ice cream and cake, but now I prefer vegetables and protein-rich foods because I want to stay healthy.

× My favorite food is rice because I think rice is always the top one choice for me for my daily life.

✓ My favorite food is rice because I think rice is always the top choice for me in my daily life.

Use 'the top choice' instead of 'the top one choice' for natural article and word order; use 'in my daily life' rather than 'for my daily life' for idiomatic preposition use. Also 'the' is required with 'top choice' as a specific noun phrase.

× I think everyone cannot live without rice because.

✓ I think many people cannot live without rice.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. Remove the trailing 'because' and replace 'everyone' with 'many people' for a less absolute statement; 'cannot live without rice' is correct. This fixes sentence completeness and appropriateness.

× When I was a child, my favorite food is hamburgers because I think hamburger is is really delicious and and it can it has a large piece of meat and sausage and the vegetables, I like them all and I think.

✓ When I was a child, my favorite food was hamburgers because I thought hamburgers were really delicious; they had a large piece of meat, sausage, and vegetables, and I liked them all.

When describing past preferences, use past tense ('was', 'thought', 'were', 'had', 'liked'). Remove repeated words ('is is', 'and and', 'it can it has') and fix plural agreement: 'hamburgers' plural form matches 'were' and 'they'. Use clear clause punctuation rather than run-on phrasing.

× Do you eat different foods at different times of the year? Student: No, I don't eat different food at different times of year because I my I think I need to keep keep a balanced diet for my daily life so I I will eat the same no matter what season is and I think it's good for my healthy.

✓ No, I don't eat different foods at different times of the year because I think I need to keep a balanced diet, so I eat the same foods regardless of the season, and I think it's good for my health.

Use plural 'foods' when speaking generally. Remove repeated words and correct articles: 'the year' and 'the season' or 'the year' consistently; 'regardless of the season' is idiomatic. Use 'health' instead of 'healthy' (adjective vs noun). Simplify redundant phrases.

× Has your favourite food changed since you were a child? Student: Yes, I think when I was young I like to eat some sweet food like ice cream or or some cake.

✓ Yes. When I was young, I liked to eat sweet foods like ice cream or cake.

Because the time frame is past ('when I was young'), use past tense 'liked'. Use plural 'sweet foods' for general items and remove repeated 'or'.

× But when I was when I grow grow up, I think the sweet food is bad for my health and I prefer to eat some vegetable or something, some food full of protein.

✓ But when I grew up, I thought sweet foods were bad for my health, and I now prefer to eat vegetables and foods high in protein.

Match past time 'when I grew up' with past tense 'thought'. Use plural 'sweet foods' and 'vegetables'. For current preference, 'now prefer' clarifies present state. Use 'foods high in protein' for natural expression. Remove repeated words 'grow grow'.