Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb forms and clearer reasons. Make the response concise (1–3 sentences), start with a topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word.

例: My favourite food is mango. I especially enjoy ripe mangoes because they are sweet and refreshing, which makes me feel happier on a hot day.

提案: Fix tense and subject-verb agreement, avoid filler words (and, maybe). Begin with a clear topic sentence and give a specific example or reason using a linking word.

例: When I was young, I liked sweet foods. For example, I often ate cakes and candy because they were treats that made special occasions more enjoyable.

提案: Reduce hesitations and improve organization: answer directly, then list specific examples with linking words. Correct vocabulary and capitalize properly; avoid repeating filler words.

例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, I eat mooncakes during the Mid-Autumn Festival, dumplings during the Lunar New Year, and chocolates at Christmas.

提案: Clarify and correct grammar: use a clear topic sentence to state whether your preference changed, then give one specific reason. Remove unclear words (brew) and reduce redundancy.

例: My favourite food has changed only a little. I still enjoy sweet foods because I often eat dessert to lift my mood after a long day.

× My favorite food is mango because when I eating the mango I will feel more colder and more happy.

✓ My favorite food is mango because when I eat mango I feel colder and happier.

Errors: 'when I eating' uses incorrect verb form after 'when' (should be base form for present simple), 'I will feel' is inappropriate for habitual action (use present simple), 'more colder' is a double comparative (colder already comparative), and 'more happy' should be 'happier'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual facts ('when I eat'), use correct comparative forms ('colder', 'happier'), and omit unnecessary articles before uncountable/plural fruit names ('eat mango' or 'eat mangoes').

× And when I were young, I like maybe some sweet foods because lots of people will say that sweet food or the dessert will make you feeling more happier.

✓ When I was young, I liked sweet foods because many people said that sweet foods or desserts would make you feel happier.

Errors: 'were' should be 'was' for singular first person in past tense, 'I like' should be past 'I liked' to match time frame, 'maybe' is unnecessary, 'lots of people will say' wrong tense/modal (use past 'said' or present 'say' depending; here past), 'will make you feeling' incorrect verb construction (should be 'make you feel'), and 'more happier' is double comparative. Suggestions: Keep consistent past tense for past time frame, use correct verb forms ('feel' not 'feeling'), and use 'happier' not 'more happier'.

× Absolutely. I eat maybe. For example, I eat mooncake during the Mid Autumn festival and I eat dumplings, Big fried dumplings during the new happy New year. Umm, I also eat chocolate during the Christmas.

✓ Absolutely. For example, I eat mooncakes during the Mid-Autumn Festival and I eat dumplings, like big fried dumplings, during the New Year. I also eat chocolate at Christmas.

Errors: 'I eat maybe.' is incomplete sentence. 'mooncake' should be plural when speaking generally, and event names need consistent capitalization and articles ('the Mid-Autumn Festival'), 'Big fried dumplings' word order and capitalization incorrect (use 'big fried dumplings' and 'like' to introduce an example), 'during the New Year' is better than 'during the new happy New year', and 'during the Christmas' is incorrect preposition/article use (use 'at Christmas'). Suggestions: Use complete sentences, pluralize general food items, correct capitalization, and use proper prepositions for holidays ('at Christmas', 'during the Mid-Autumn Festival').

× Yes it may be have a little bit change but right now I also like the sweet foods because when whenever brew I will eat some sweet food or dessert to make myself more happier.

✓ Yes, it may have changed a little, but right now I still like sweet foods because whenever I feel down I eat some sweet food or dessert to make myself happier.

Errors: 'may be have a little bit change' incorrect modal and verb forms; better 'may have changed a little' or 'has changed a little'. 'when whenever brew' unclear phrase — likely intended 'whenever I'm stressed' or 'whenever I feel down'; 'I will eat' future/modal incorrect for habitual action (use present simple 'I eat'); 'more happier' double comparative. Suggestions: Use correct modal+perfect ('may have changed'), clarify the reason phrase ('whenever I feel down' or 'when I'm stressed'), use present simple for habitual actions, and use 'happier' rather than 'more happier'.