Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ неструктурирован и запутан: много повторов, грамматические ошибки и неясные слова (например, "pillow" вероятно неверно). Нужно дать прямой первый ответ (topic sentence), затем 1–2 уточняющие детали с логическими связками. Тренируйтесь выбирать точные слова, избегать лишних повторов и соблюдать простые времена. Практическое задание: подумайте о любимом блюде, запишите 2–3 коротких предложений: что это за блюдо, почему любите, когда впервые попробовали.

例: My favourite food is [dish name]. I love it because it has rich flavours and reminds me of family gatherings. For example, I used to eat it every weekend with my parents when I was a child, so it feels comforting and familiar.

提案: Ответ частично понятен, но логика нарушена: сначала даётся пример, затем непонятное замечание про родителей, и нет связок. Нужно ответить прямо, затем объяснить причину или привести пример, используя связки (because, so, when). Исправьте неверные времена и формулировки и говорите конкретнее о блюдах или привычках.

例: When I was young I mainly ate traditional dishes from my country, such as palomar. Because my parents decided what we ate, I often tried a variety of homemade meals, and I still enjoy many of them today.

提案: Ответ неясный и полон заполнителей (uh), отсутствуют конкретные примеры сезонов или праздников. Следует прямо ответить "yes" или "no", затем привести 1–2 конкретных примера (сезонные продукты или блюда) и связки (for example, in winter, during festivals). Убирайте слова-паразиты и говорите связно и кратко.

例: Yes, I do. In summer I eat more fresh fruits and salads because they are in season, while in winter my family prepares hearty stews and roasted dishes to keep warm.

提案: Ответ противоречив и грамматически неправильный: сначала "No", затем говорите о смене вкусов. Нужно дать чёткий ответ (Yes/No), затем объяснить с примерами и связками. Используйте простые предложения: "No, it hasn't changed because..." или "Yes, it has changed because...". Избегайте обрывистых фраз и повторов.

例: No, my favourite food hasn't really changed. I still love the dishes my mother used to make because they remind me of home, although I now try new flavours occasionally.

× Well, my favorite food is maybe pillow because in my country it's a famous food in the national food, my country, I like it because when I was a child in my first life, it was the food. This pillow, there are so many, the type of the thing.

✓ Well, my favorite food is probably pilau because in my country it is a nationally famous dish. I like it because when I was a child it was commonly eaten. There are many different varieties of pilau.

The student used informal and incorrect words (maybe pillow, national food, in my first life) and awkward structures. Use of adverbs/adjectives was incorrect (maybe -> probably; national food -> nationally famous dish). Also word choice and noun phrases were unclear. Suggestion: learn common collocations (favorite food, nationally famous, different varieties) and avoid literal translations. Practice replacing vague adverbs (maybe) with appropriate ones (probably) and use correct food name and countable noun phrases.

× When I was young, I liked to eat my national food, for example Palomar. But actually I don't choose food because my parents educated me. Don't choose food yourself. It's not changed.

✓ When I was young, I liked to eat my national food, for example palomar. But actually I did not choose my food because my parents raised me to not choose food for myself. It hasn't changed.

Tense inconsistency and incorrect verb forms: 'don't choose' should be past 'did not choose' to match 'when I was young'. 'Educated me' is wrong collocation for upbringing; use 'raised me' or 'taught me'. 'It's not changed' should be present perfect negative 'It hasn't changed' to indicate a past state continuing to present. Suggestion: keep past tense when narrating childhood and use present perfect for changes that continue to now.

× You know, it depends what you have in your fridge. For example, products, uh, in my country, uh, it's, it's popular, uh, because, uh, the people didn't know, uh, how to make food, uh, but other times, uh, they needed to send.

✓ You know, it depends on what you have in your fridge. For example, some products are popular in my country because people did not know how to make food at home, so at other times they had to send for it.

Missing preposition 'on' after 'depends' is a common error. Also awkward phrasing 'needed to send' likely means 'had to send for it' or 'order it'. Suggestion: learn verb-preposition collocations (depend on, send for/order) and simplify sentences to clarify meaning.

× No, actually in my tasty, it's very amazing because my taste on the changes every time when I was a child, I have so many kind of the food in my kitchen because my mother is to make a food very well. But now, now.

✓ No, actually my taste is the same; it is very stable. When I was a child, there were many kinds of food in my kitchen because my mother cooked very well, and that influenced my preferences.

Multiple tense and vocabulary errors: 'in my tasty' is incorrect; use 'my taste'. 'My taste on the changes every time when I was a child' mixes tenses and prepositions — use past 'when I was a child there were many kinds of food'. 'I have so many kind of the food' should be 'there were many kinds of food'. 'My mother is to make a food very well' should be 'my mother cooked very well'. Suggestion: use consistent tense (past for childhood), correct collocations (kinds of food, cook well), and simpler sentences.