Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition and tighten the answer. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (flavour, texture, when you eat it) using linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea twice.

例: I love Basque cheesecake because of its creamy texture and balanced sweetness. For example, the slightly caramelised top adds a pleasant bitterness that complements the smooth, rich filling, so I usually enjoy it after dinner as a special treat.

提案: Provide a concise direct statement, avoid fillers and incomplete sentences, and add a specific example or reason. Use a linking word to connect the main idea and the explanation.

例: As a child I loved sweets and candies because I had a sweet tooth. For instance, I frequently ate fruit-flavoured hard candies and chocolate bars after school, which made them my go-to snacks.

提案: Make a clear topic sentence and finish your thought. Give a brief specific explanation and an example of what you change seasonally, if anything. Use linking words to make it coherent.

例: Not really; I stick to a similar healthy diet year-round because I focus on nutrition. However, in summer I eat more salads and fresh fruit, while in winter I prefer warm soups and root vegetables to stay warm.

提案: Start with a clear comparison between past and present, then give a specific reason and an example of current preferences. Keep it concise and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: Yes, it has changed. As a child I loved candies, but now I prefer savory snacks because I find them more satisfying; for example, I enjoy roasted nuts and cheese crackers as everyday treats.

× I appreciate the texture and the the sweetness of the cake.

✓ I appreciate the texture and the sweetness of the cake.

The definite article 'the' is repeated twice ('the the'), which is a duplication error. Remove the extra 'the' so the phrase reads naturally. Suggestion: read aloud to catch repeated words.

× I used to like, uh, those foods with heavy sweetness and I had a sweet tooth and.

✓ I used to like, uh, foods that were very sweet, and I had a sweet tooth.

The phrase 'heavy sweetness' is unnatural; use 'very sweet' or 'strong sweetness'. The final 'and' leaves the sentence incomplete. Also remove 'those' which is unnecessary. Suggestion: complete clauses and choose natural adjective phrases (e.g., 'very sweet').

× Not really, I eat mostly the same foods according to their nutrition and the macro nutrients throughout the year.

✓ Not really. I mostly eat the same foods based on their nutritional content and macronutrients throughout the year.

The preposition 'according to' is not used correctly here; 'based on' or 'depending on' fits better. 'Their nutrition' is awkward; use 'nutritional content' and 'macronutrients' as one word. Also punctuation: split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use 'based on' when indicating a criterion.

× I stress the quality and nutrition of.

✓ I stress the quality and nutritional value of my food.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'of'. Also 'nutrition' works better as 'nutritional value' here. Suggestion: always include the object of 'of' and use clear noun phrases (e.g., 'nutritional value of my food').

× Yes, my favorite foods when I was a child was candies.

✓ Yes, my favorite foods when I was a child were candies.

Subject-verb agreement with plural subject 'favorite foods' requires the plural verb 'were' rather than 'was'. Alternatively, use singular form: 'My favorite food when I was a child was candy.' Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs.

× However, I do prefer savory snacks rather than the overly sweet candies.

✓ However, I prefer savory snacks to overly sweet candies.

Use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A rather than B'. Also 'the' before 'overly sweet candies' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use the standard comparative structure 'prefer X to Y' and omit articles when speaking generally.