Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然、结构更清晰并减少犹豫语（如"uh"）。先给出主题句，然后用一两句具体原因和例子支持，注意句子连贯与语法（如时态和代词）。可以避免重复表达“fat”。

例: My favourite food is steak with rice and cucumber because I prefer healthy meals. For example, eating lean steak helps me build muscle for my training, while rice and cucumber provide energy and keep me from feeling bloated.

提案: 注意时态一致（讲过去的经历要用过去式），语法和句子连接（如使用because, so, however）。可以给出更具体的例子或频率说明，避免语法错误如“let later learning”。

例: When I was young, I often ate instant noodles and barbeque because they tasted great and were easy to make. Later I learned that these foods are high in sodium and fat, so now I try to eat them only occasionally.

提案: 回答需更准确、发音地名与单词拼写要正确，句子要更简洁连贯。先给主题句，然后用具体季节和食物举例，使用连接词如“for example”或“in summer/winter”。注意避免重复与语法错误。

例: Yes. Because I live in Guizhou, which has four distinct seasons, we eat different foods throughout the year. For example, in winter people prefer hot pot to stay warm, while in summer we often have outdoor barbeques.

提案: 回答要去掉犹豫和重复，使用正确的时态和更清晰的原因表达。给出具体变化和例子（哪种食物变成了现在的最爱），并用连接词解释原因。避免模糊词（like 'maybe'）和不完整的片段。

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed a lot. As I grew older I became more open to different cuisines, so I now prefer grilled steak or Mexican dishes instead of the instant noodles and BBQ I liked as a child.

× I like healthy food, uh, like steak with rice and some cucumber for a meal because the healthy food can make my training, uh, more helpful And uh, I will feel not very fat. Don't have a lot of fat in this.

✓ I like healthy food, such as steak with rice and some cucumber for a meal, because healthy food can make my training more effective, and I won't feel very fat or have a lot of fat.

句子中用词不当与重复（'the healthy food'、'more helpful'）影响表达：1）'the healthy food' 在泛指时应去掉定冠词，改为 'healthy food' 或用 'such as' 举例；2）'more helpful' 用于训练时应改为 'more effective' 或 'helpful for my training'；3）'I will feel not very fat. Don't have a lot of fat in this.' 是断裂且非完整句，应合并并改为更自然的否定表达 'I won't feel very fat or have a lot of fat'。建议：注意冠词使用与形容词搭配，避免口语碎片，合并短句，保持时态和主语一致。

× What kind of food did you like when you were young? Student: I like instant noodles and BBQ when I was young because they tasted great and were easy to prepare.

✓ I liked instant noodles and BBQ when I was young because they tasted great and were easy to prepare.

问句使用过去时 'did you like'，回答也应使用过去时。原句 'I like ... when I was young' 时态不一致，应将 'like' 改为过去式 'liked'。建议：回答过去经历时将动词改为过去式。

× However, I let later learning this food are high in sodium and fat which can harm your health in the long term, so I try to eat them less often now.

✓ However, I later learned that these foods are high in sodium and fat, which can harm your health in the long term, so I try to eat them less often now.

句子结构和非谓语使用错误：1）'I let later learning' 非英语表达，应改为 'I later learned'（过去时）；2）'this food are' 主谓不一致且指代错误，应为复数 'these foods are'；3）缺少连词 'that' 连接宾语从句。建议：使用正确的动词短语 'learned that'，注意主谓一致和单复数形式。

× Yes of course, because for now I live in a Guizhou province, so Gujral province have Four Seasons.

✓ Yes, of course. I currently live in Guizhou Province, and Guizhou has four seasons.

介词与专有名词使用错误：1）不需要 'in a Guizhou province'，应为 'in Guizhou Province'（省名前通常直接用地名或 'the province of Guizhou'）；2）'for now' 更常用 'currently' 或 'right now'；3）'have Four Seasons' 主语与动词要一致且大小写规范，改为 'Guizhou has four seasons'。建议：专有名词前注意是否需要冠词或量词，并使用合适的时间副词。

× Normally in the winter time we like hot pot more and the summer time we like BBQ outside of the door. So in different year we always take different food.

✓ Normally in winter we prefer hot pot, and in summer we like to have BBQ outdoors. So in different seasons we always eat different foods.

单复数和用词问题：1）'in the winter time' 和 'the summer time' 可简化为 'in winter' 和 'in summer'；2）'BBQ outside of the door' 用法不自然，改为 'BBQ outdoors' 或 'have BBQ outside'；3）'in different year' 应为 'in different seasons'，因为讨论的是季节；4）'take different food' 不地道，改为 'eat different foods'（复数）。建议：注意季节性表达与可数名词单复数形式，使用自然搭配 'eat foods'。

× Has your favourite food changed since you were a child? Student: Yes, it, it change a lot because maybe it's, it's my age is getting older and we have more choices because we have variety of the cultural food like harpo barbecue and steak and a Max Mexican food and uh.

✓ Yes, it has changed a lot because as I get older I have more choices, and we have a variety of cultural foods like barbecue, steak, and Mexican food.

时态与主谓一致错误：1）问题用现在完成时 'Has ... changed since you were a child?' 回答应使用现在完成时 'it has changed'，原句 'it change' 需改为 'it has changed'；2）'my age is getting older' 表达冗长且不自然，改为 'as I get older'；3）'we have variety of the cultural food' 语序和冠词错误，应为 'we have a variety of cultural foods'；4）列举食物要用并列连接并修正拼写。建议：注意现在完成时的构成（has/have + 过去分词）、不使用多余的 'it' 和保持名词复数形式。