Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "sweet sweet") and fix verb forms and articles.

例: My favourite food is tashing. It is a saffron-flavoured rice dish with chicken and eggs, and has a crispy outer layer but a soft, moist interior. In addition, it tastes slightly sweet and is served like a hearty main course rather than a dessert.

提案: Organise the answer with a clear topic sentence and use correct phrases. Use linking words to connect reasons and avoid awkward phrases like "drunk foods". Be specific about frequency using consistent numbers and correct grammar.

例: When I was a teenager I preferred fast food. For instance, I ate pizza two to three times a week and often had burgers almost daily, because they were tasty and convenient. However, I later realised they were unhealthy and changed my habits.

提案: Give a direct answer first (yes/no) and then add specific examples. Fix grammar (e.g., "I usually prioritize"). Use linking words like "however" or "instead" to show contrast and be specific about meals or seasons.

例: Not really — I usually don't change my diet with the seasons because I'm busy. Instead, I prioritise nutritious meals year-round; for example, in winter I focus on warm stews for comfort, while in summer I choose salads and grilled fish to stay light.

提案: Answer directly and use clear past-to-present contrast with linking words. Correct number expressions and tense agreement. Be specific about what you changed and why to make it more convincing.

例: Yes, it has changed. As a child I often ate a lot of junk food — for example, I used to have ice cream two or three times a day, which caused health issues. Since then I adopted a healthier diet, eating more home-cooked meals and plenty of vegetables.

× It's like sweet sweet but and it's also look like a cake but it's a proper meal and it's like crispy outside but the texture is really soft inside.

✓ It's sweet and it also looks like a cake, but it's a proper meal: crispy on the outside and very soft on the inside.

Multiple issues: repetition 'sweet sweet' is redundant; 'it's also look like' uses incorrect verb form and structure (should be 'looks like'); sentence run-on and awkward conjunctions. Use adjectives/adverbs correctly and simplify structure. Suggest combining ideas with commas and using correct verb form 'looks' for third person singular and parallel adjective phrases 'crispy on the outside' and 'soft on the inside'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I was too much into fast food and drunk foods.

✓ I was really into fast food and junk food.

'Too much into' is informal and awkward; 'drunk foods' is incorrect word choice (likely 'junk foods'). Maintain past tense 'was' but correct vocabulary and adverb use. Use 'really into' or 'very into' and 'junk food' as uncountable noun. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I would at least eat 2, three times pizza per week and burgers were like a daily routine to me and the reason was they were tasty and convenient.

✓ I would eat pizza at least two or three times per week, and burgers were part of my daily routine because they were tasty and convenient.

Quantifier and number expression incorrect: '2, three times' mixes digits and words and wrong order. Use 'at least two or three times per week'. Also improve sentence flow: 'part of my daily routine' is natural. Keep past tense 'would' and 'were'. Grammar problem type ID:14

× I am usually too busy to care about the seasonal dish dishes.

✓ I am usually too busy to care about seasonal dishes.

Redundant plural 'dish dishes' is incorrect; remove article 'the' because speaking generally about seasonal dishes does not need 'the'. Keep present tense 'am' and correct plural 'dishes'. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I'm more prioritize the meals which are healthy and help me to maintain my diet and I also care about having all of the nutrients.

✓ I prioritize meals that are healthy and help me maintain my diet, and I also make sure I get all the necessary nutrients.

'I'm more prioritize' mixes present continuous with base verb incorrectly; use simple present 'I prioritize'. 'Which' can be 'that' for restrictive clause; 'help me to maintain' -> 'help me maintain' (omit 'to'). Replace 'care about having all of the nutrients' with more natural 'make sure I get all the necessary nutrients'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I would eat 2 three times ice cream per day and that leads me to like some major health problems.

✓ I would eat ice cream two or three times per day, and that led to some major health problems.

Number expression '2 three times' is incorrect; use words consistently 'two or three times per day'. Tense consistency: when referring to past consequence, use past tense 'led'. Also remove unnecessary 'me to like' and use 'led to' for result. Grammar problem type ID:14

× However, I changed my attitude towards food and I started to have more healthy lifestyle after.

✓ However, I changed my attitude towards food and started to lead a healthier lifestyle afterwards.

'Started to have more healthy lifestyle after' is ungrammatical: 'lifestyle' needs an article or adjective form 'a healthier lifestyle' and 'after' should be 'afterwards' or omitted. Use 'started to lead' or 'began living' for natural phrasing. Maintain past tense. Grammar problem type ID:26}]}romise.