Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the food, then give 1–2 specific details (ingredients, how it is served, or why you like it) using linking words. Avoid unnecessary phrases like “thank you for the question” and correct grammar (articles, verb forms, plurals).

例: My favourite food is momo, a type of dumpling. I like the steamed chicken momo because the filling is juicy and well-seasoned, and it is usually served with a spicy tomato chutney. Because it is portable and satisfying, I often choose momo when I want a quick, flavorful meal.

提案: Lead with a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons using linking words. Correct vocabulary and pronunciation errors (e.g., “flat bread” not “flat red”) and avoid repetition. Keep responses to no more than 5 sentences.

例: When I was young, I liked flatbread because it was healthy and inexpensive. In addition, it was easy to find at home and matched well with vegetables and lentils, so my family often served it for dinner. I still enjoy it because it’s simple and comforting.

提案: Answer directly and provide one or two concrete examples of seasonal foods, using linking words (for example, "in summer" or "during winter") to show contrast. Be specific about how the foods differ and why you choose them.

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in summer I eat more fresh fruits and salads to stay cool, whereas in winter I prefer soups and stews because they are warming and comforting.

提案: Be specific about what changed and why. Use clear linking words (for example, "because" and "so") and correct grammar and vocabulary (“instant noodles”, “disadvantages”). Give one clear reason and a brief result.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. When I was a child I liked instant noodles, but now I avoid them because they contain a lot of preservatives and salt, so I prefer fresh vegetables and fruits for health reasons.

× The my favorite food is the momo which is like a dumpling.

✓ My favorite food is the momo, which is like a dumpling.

The definite article 'the' before 'my' is unnecessary and incorrect. Use 'My favorite food' without 'the'. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which is like a dumpling'.

× So they talking about the momo it is maker special vegetables.

✓ So when people talk about the momo, it is usually made with special vegetables.

The original has subject-verb agreement and word order issues: 'they talking' should be 'people talk' or 'when people talk' and 'it is maker' should be 'it is made'. Rephrase for clarity and correct verb form 'made'.

× I also make the only the non vegetarian Mama but we can make the vegetarian also.

✓ I also make the non-vegetarian momo, but we can make vegetarian ones too.

Wrong words and order: 'make the only the non vegetarian Mama' is ungrammatical. Use 'non-vegetarian' as a compound adjective and pluralize 'ones' when referring to types. Also correct 'Mama' to 'momo' and add contrast 'but'.

× So the momo ingredient we mix up the chicken means different very.

✓ For momo ingredients, we often mix in chicken and other different fillings.

The sentence is ungrammatical and word order is wrong. 'So the momo ingredient we mix up the chicken means different very' should be reorganized: state the topic ('For momo ingredients'), use correct verb 'mix in', and clarify 'other different fillings'.

× When I was very young, I used to like the flat bread because it is very healthy to eat and it is available easily, so it was not even the very costly.

✓ When I was very young, I used to like flatbread because it was healthy to eat and was easily available, so it was not very costly.

Mixing past and present tenses: 'used to like' sets past context so following descriptions should be past ('was healthy', 'was easily available'). Also correct 'the flat bread' to 'flatbread' and remove redundant words.

× That's why I always like the AT flat red when I was so young.

✓ That's why I always liked flatbread when I was young.

Tense consistency: 'always like' conflicts with past time reference 'when I was young'; use past 'always liked'. Also 'AT flat red' appears to be typos; corrected to 'flatbread'.

× But I still like this food.

✓ But I still like this food.

This sentence is correct. It appropriately uses present tense to express a current preference, so no change is necessary.

× Yes, I eat the different foods at the different times of the year because I like to explore and they taste the different varieties of the food.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year because I like to explore and try different varieties of food.

Unnecessary definite articles 'the different' should be omitted. Also 'they taste the different varieties' is incorrect—use 'try different varieties of food'. Preposition 'at the different times' should be 'at different times' or simply 'at different times of the year'.

× So which is going to make me the very enjoyable and I can feel very good.

✓ This makes eating enjoyable and makes me feel good.

Fragment and awkward phrasing: 'So which is going to make me the very enjoyable' is a fragment. Combine into a clear main clause that matches subject 'this' (trying different foods) and use correct adjectives: 'enjoyable' and 'feel good'.

× Yes, my dish has been changed.

✓ Yes, my favorite dish has changed.

Passive 'has been changed' implies someone changed it; use active 'has changed' to indicate it changed over time. Also 'my dish' is vague—use 'my favorite dish'.

× When I was a child I used to like the mochi noodles, but nowadays I dononet like to eat the noodles and because now I know about the small it has more disadvantages which is bought by the instant noodles.

✓ When I was a child I used to like mochi noodles, but nowadays I don't like to eat instant noodles because I know they have many disadvantages.

Multiple problems: 'dononet' is a typo for 'don't'. Maintain contrast between past 'used to like' and present 'don't like'. 'The small it has more disadvantages which is bought by the instant noodles' is ungrammatical—clarify to 'they have many disadvantages' referring to instant noodles. Use plural 'they' for noodles.

× So now I prefer to eat the more vegetables and the green fruits and the yellow vegetables.

✓ Now I prefer to eat more vegetables and fruits like green and yellow vegetables.

Redundant and incorrect articles: remove 'the' before noncount/plural nouns. 'Green fruits and yellow vegetables' is unclear—rephrase to 'fruits and vegetables, especially green and yellow vegetables' or simply 'more vegetables and fruits'. Here corrected to a concise form.