Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural: give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and add one specific detail about a dish and why you like it. Use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid irrelevant or unclear words (e.g., “potty”).

例: I love traditional Indian food. For example, I often eat dal and chapati twice a week because it is nutritious and comforting. Also, I enjoy the variety of spices which make the food flavorful and satisfying.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and explain with specific examples. Use linking words (e.g., “also,” “for example”) and correct vocabulary (distinguish sweets vs salty). Reduce filler words like “umm.”

例: When I was young, I preferred sweet treats and crunchy snacks. For example, I often ate candy and crispy samosas, and I also enjoyed mildly spicy foods which my family prepared.

提案: Good idea organization — keep the topic sentence and add concrete examples and a linking word to contrast seasons. Improve phrasing (e.g., “lighter meals” and “protein-rich foods”).

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For instance, in summer I prefer lighter meals such as salads and fruit, whereas in winter I eat protein-rich dishes like stews and lentils to keep warm.

提案: Answer directly and concisely: state that your tastes changed and give specific reasons and examples. Improve grammar and phrasing (e.g., “as I grew older” and “I now prefer protein-rich foods”).

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed as I grew older. Now I prefer protein-rich meals like grilled chicken and dal because I focus more on health and balanced nutrition than on sweets.

× My favorite food is traditional Indian food which I like to eat twice in a week and it is healthy food which is in proper requirement of potty everydays consume.

✓ My favorite food is traditional Indian food, which I like to eat twice a week, and it is healthy and meets my daily nutritional needs.

Preposition errors and general word choice: 'in a week' should be 'a week' or 'per week'; 'twice in a week' -> 'twice a week'. 'which is in proper requirement of potty everydays consume' is ungrammatical and wrong word choice; replace with 'meets my daily nutritional needs'. Also add commas for clarity and use 'daily' not 'everydays'. Improve word order and choice to convey intended meaning.

× When I was young I liked food with more sweets in them like salty foods and as well some umm crispy and spicy food.

✓ When I was young, I liked foods with more sweets, as well as salty, crispy, and spicy foods.

Sentence structure and pluralization: 'food with more sweets in them' is awkward; use 'foods with more sweets' or 'sweeter foods'. 'like salty foods and as well some umm crispy and spicy food' should be parallel and plural: 'salty, crispy, and spicy foods'. Also add a comma after the introductory clause.

× Yes I do eat different foods at different times of the year like in summers I take much lighter meal and in winters I take healthier side like rich protein and nutrient rich food.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. In summer I have much lighter meals, and in winter I eat healthier foods that are rich in protein and nutrients.

Article and number agreement: 'in summers' -> 'in summer' (or 'in the summers'); 'a much lighter meal' -> 'much lighter meals' to match habitual action. 'in winters I take healthier side' is ungrammatical; use 'in winter I eat healthier foods'. 'nutrient rich food' -> 'foods that are rich in protein and nutrients'. Also split into two sentences for clarity and add commas.

× Yes, my favorite food changed since I was a child because due to requirement of my body as I'm growing old so I need the proportionate food which is rich in protein and required nutrient.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child because, as I have grown older, my body requires more proportionate foods that are rich in protein and nutrients.

Tense and phrasing: Use present perfect 'has changed' with 'since I was a child' to show change from past to present. 'as I'm growing old' should be 'as I have grown older' or 'as I have gotten older'. 'requirement of my body' -> 'my body requires'; 'proportionate food' -> 'more balanced/proportionate foods'. 'required nutrient' -> 'nutrients'. Also adjust word order and add commas for clarity.

× So yes I have changed my food.

✓ So yes, I have changed what I eat.

Verb usage and natural phrasing: 'changed my food' is unnatural; better to say 'changed what I eat' or 'changed my diet'. Keep present perfect 'have changed' to indicate change up to now. Add comma after 'So yes'.