Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words to add one specific detail. Also correct tense and article use (e.g., 'I like food that I make myself' and 'rice and curry').

例: My favourite food is homemade meals because I trust their quality and taste. For example, I often enjoy rice and curry that I prepare at home, since it is fresher and healthier than fast food.

提案: Use past tense consistently and avoid filler words. Give one concise reason and a short example. Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas.

例: When I was young, I preferred eating out foods such as pizza and burgers because they tasted exciting. For example, I often chose pizza with lots of cheese even though it was not very healthy.

提案: Be specific about which foods change and when. Use correct plural and tense forms, and avoid repeating the same point. Add one concrete example and a linking phrase such as 'for instance' or 'during'.

例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For instance, during the harvest festival I eat sweet rice and special curries that I only make at that time.

提案: Organize the answer with a clear contrast using linking words like 'whereas' or 'but'. Use past and present forms correctly and keep it to two or three sentences with a specific example of the change.

例: Yes, my preferences have changed: when I was a child I prioritised taste and often ate fast food, whereas now I choose homemade meals for health reasons. For example, I now cook vegetable curries and brown rice instead of eating burgers.

× Well, I have tried many outside foods, but I prefer homemade food over fast food.

✓ Well, I have tried many foods from outside, but I prefer homemade food to fast food.

The phrase 'outside foods' is unnatural; use 'foods from outside' or 'takeaway/restaurant food'. Also use 'prefer A to B' (not 'prefer A over B') for clearer comparative structure.

× Also I liked food which is definitely made by myself.

✓ Also, I like food that is definitely made by me.

The original mixes past tense 'liked' with general preference; present simple 'like' fits. 'Which' can be used but 'that' is more natural for defining clauses. 'Made by myself' is reflexive and awkward here; use 'made by me'.

× Especially I like eating rice and Curry.

✓ In particular, I like eating rice and curry.

Word order and register: 'Especially' should be followed by what is emphasized; 'In particular' is more natural. 'Curry' should be lowercase unless a proper noun. Remove unnecessary capitalization.

× When I was young, I prefer eating outside food uh such as pizza, burger due to its taste.

✓ When I was young, I preferred eating food from outside, such as pizza and burgers, because of their taste.

Time marker 'When I was young' requires past tense 'preferred', not present 'prefer'. Use plural 'burgers' and 'because' instead of 'due to' in this sentence. 'Food from outside' is clearer than 'outside food'.

× I do not prefer health over taste when I was young.

✓ I did not prefer health over taste when I was young.

Tense mismatch: use past 'did not prefer' with 'when I was young'. Also 'prefer health over taste' is acceptable but needs past tense.

× Certainly, I eat different foods at different times of years, especially during festival season.

✓ Certainly, I eat different foods at different times of the year, especially during festival seasons.

Use singular 'the year' in the expression 'times of the year'. 'Festival season' is better pluralized to 'festival seasons' or 'during festivals' depending on meaning.

× I tried different food of different festivals especially.

✓ I tried different foods for different festivals, especially.

Use plural 'foods' and preposition 'for different festivals'. Word order adjusted for natural English. Keep past tense 'tried' consistent.

× Yes, as I preferred Earlier I preferred taste over health but now I am preferring my health over taste.

✓ Yes, earlier I preferred taste over health, but now I prefer my health over taste.

Remove redundant 'as' and capitalize 'earlier' correctly. 'Earlier I preferred' is past; 'now I prefer' should use simple present, not progressive 'am preferring'.

× When I was young I more ate fast food but now I am considering taking homemade food.

✓ When I was young I ate more fast food, but now I consider eating homemade food.

Use natural word order 'ate more fast food'. 'Consider' and 'eat' in present simple fit current habits: 'I consider eating' or 'I now eat homemade food'. 'Taking homemade food' is unnatural; use 'eating homemade food'.