Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), and explain briefly why you like it with a specific reason. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas. Keep it under five sentences.

例: My favourite food is spicy tteokbokki. I especially enjoy it because the spicy flavor is comforting and helps me relax after a stressful day. For example, when I finish exams I often eat tteokbokki with friends to feel better.

提案: Answer directly and fix unclear phrases (e.g., "when I was a child" instead of "when I was a leader"). Remove fillers and be specific about what you liked. Use a linking word to add one detail about taste or healthiness.

例: When I was young I liked kimbap. I enjoyed it because it had many vegetables and was easy to eat as a snack. Also, it tasted fresh and healthy, so my parents often packed it for school.

提案: Be concise and correct tense and word choice. Avoid repeating phrases and fillers. Give one clear example for summer and one for winter, with a brief reason using a linking word (e.g., "because").

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in summer I eat a lot of fresh fruits because they are refreshing, while in winter I prefer hot soups because they keep me warm.

提案: Make the response more natural and confident. Remove contradictory phrases like "I think I don't think so." State directly whether it has changed and add a reason or brief example. Keep it short and coherent.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed since I was a child. I have always liked kimbap because it is tasty and convenient, and I still enjoy it today.

× My favorite food is tteokbokki, especially, uh, spicy Tteokbokki have uh, reducing stress for me.

✓ My favorite food is tteokbokki, especially spicy tteokbokki, which reduces stress for me.

The student used 'have reducing' incorrectly. This is an incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and verb forms (ID 13). The clause should use a relative pronoun and a present tense verb 'reduces' to describe a general truth. Suggestion: use 'which reduces stress for me' or 'because it reduces stress for me.'

× Umm, As far as I remember when I was a leader, uh, I liked umm, kimbap because there is a lot of, a lot of vegetables in there.

✓ Umm, as far as I remember, when I was young, I liked kimbap because there were a lot of vegetables in it.

The original has multiple issues: 'when I was a leader' is likely wrong word choice; 'there is a lot of, a lot of vegetables in there' has preposition and number problems (ID 11 and 1). Use past tense 'were' to match timeframe and 'a lot of vegetables' (plural). Use 'in it' rather than 'in there.' Suggestion: replace 'leader' with 'young' if referring to childhood; ensure verb tense matches time reference.

× Yeah, it it depends on the season.

✓ Yeah, it depends on the season.

This sentence has a repeated word 'it it' and uses present simple correctly otherwise (ID 6). Remove the duplicate. Suggestion: proofread to avoid repetition.

× Umm, I usually eat different food at different times of years.

✓ Umm, I usually eat different foods at different times of the year.

The phrase 'different food' should be plural 'different foods' when referring to various kinds (ID 1). Also 'times of years' is ungrammatical; use 'times of the year.' Suggestion: use 'foods' for countable items and the idiom 'times of the year.'

× In summer I ate a lot of fruits and umm, in winter I prefer soups and soups because.

✓ In summer I eat a lot of fruit, and in winter I prefer soups.

Mixed tenses and redundancy: 'ate' (past) conflicts with habitual context—should be present simple 'eat' for habitual actions (ID 5 and 6). 'Fruits' can be uncountable 'fruit' when speaking generally. 'Soups and soups because' is redundant and incomplete; remove repetition and unnecessary 'because.' Suggestion: use present simple for habitual seasonal habits and avoid repetition.

× To be honest, umm, I think I don't think so. Umm, because I liked uh, kimbap since I was little. I've never changed it.

✓ To be honest, I don't think so, because I have liked kimbap since I was little and it has never changed.

Several tense and structure issues: 'I think I don't think so' is redundant; choose one form. When expressing a preference continuing from childhood to present, use present perfect 'have liked' (ID 6) rather than simple past 'liked.' 'I've never changed it' is awkward; better to say 'it has never changed' or 'my favorite hasn't changed.' Suggestion: use present perfect for ongoing states and combine sentences for clarity.