Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise, correct minor grammar, and add one specific detail about why you like it. Use a clear topic sentence and one supporting reason with linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., 'really love' and 'specially if my mom cooks it' can be streamlined).

例: I like Adobo, a popular Filipino dish, because it has a rich savory flavor and my mother’s version uses garlic and soy that make it especially tasty. For example, she simmers it slowly so the meat becomes tender and soaks up the sauce.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and pronoun errors, and limit to two supporting details. Use linking words to show cause and result (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Avoid repetition.

例: When I was young I loved sweet foods. Because I ate so many sweets, my teeth developed cavities, so my mother scolded me and limited my sugary snacks.

提案: Organize the response with a clear topic sentence and one or two concise supporting details. Remove repetition and fix tense/word order. Use linking words like 'also' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

例: Yes. I often travel around the Philippines to try regional cuisines. For example, I taste coconut-based dishes in the south and rice-based specialties in the north, and I always try local street food when I visit a new province.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and smoother phrasing. Correct vocabulary (palate, not palette) and grammar. Use one linking word to compare past and present and give a brief reason for the change.

例: Yes, my favorite food has changed. As a child I preferred sweets, but now my palate favors savory dishes like adobo because I enjoy stronger, more complex flavors.

× My favorite food would be our local cuisine here in the Philippines which is called Adobo and I really love it specially if my mom cooks it.

✓ My favorite food is our local cuisine here in the Philippines called adobo, and I really love it, especially when my mom cooks it.

Problems: incorrect modal 'would' (sounds hypothetical) and punctuation; 'specially' is wrong form—should be 'especially'; article/capitalization: 'adobo' is a common noun and need not be capitalized; use 'when' rather than 'if' to indicate habitual situation. Suggestion: Use simple present 'is' for general preference, replace 'would be' with 'is', change 'specially' to 'especially', lowercase 'adobo', and use 'when' for habitual events.

× When I was in preschool I usually like sweet things that is why my teeth have gone rotten and my I end up being scolded with my by my mother about it and try to limit my my diet too sweet things.

✓ When I was in preschool, I usually liked sweet things; that is why my teeth became rotten, and I ended up being scolded by my mother about it, who tried to limit my diet of very sweet things.

Problems: tense shift—talking about past should use past tense verbs ('liked', 'became', 'ended up'); 'have gone rotten' is present perfect but past 'became rotten' fits; 'scolded with my by my mother' is ungrammatical—use 'scolded by my mother'; repetition and word order errors: 'my I' and repeated 'my'. Also 'too sweet things' is incorrect; use 'very sweet things' or 'foods that were too sweet' or 'a diet of very sweet things'. Suggestion: Keep verbs in past for childhood events, fix passive construction to 'scolded by my mother', remove duplicate words, and correct quantifier phrase.

× Yes, I usually travel a lot and my purpose sometimes in travel I by traveling is to taste different cuisine from different provinces here in the Philippines.

✓ Yes, I usually travel a lot, and my purpose in traveling is sometimes to taste different cuisines from the provinces here in the Philippines.

Problems: word order and redundancy ('my purpose sometimes in travel I by traveling' is ungrammatical); use of 'cuisine' countability—plural 'cuisines' fits; place adverb 'sometimes' correctly. Suggestion: Use 'my purpose in traveling' and place 'sometimes' before the infinitive phrase, and pluralize 'cuisines' when referring to several types.

× And also I'll try I'll always try the local foods in different regions.

✓ I always try the local foods in different regions.

Problems: repetition 'I'll try I'll always try' and tense mismatch—habitual action uses simple present 'I always try'. Suggestion: Remove duplicated fragments and use simple present for habitual behavior.

× Yes, my favorite, uh, my palette change since I was a child because when I was a child I really like sweet things. Now I'm more on safer things like adobo.

✓ Yes, my taste has changed since I was a child because when I was a child I really liked sweet things. Now I prefer safer choices like adobo.

Problems: 'palette' should be 'palate' or better 'taste'; subject-verb agreement and tense: 'my palate change since I was a child' should be 'has changed' (present perfect) because it began in the past and continues; 'I really like' should be past 'I really liked'; 'I'm more on safer things' is ungrammatical—use 'I prefer safer choices'. Suggestion: Use 'has changed' for change over time, use 'liked' for past preference, and replace awkward phrase with 'prefer safer choices'.