Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần rút ngắn và sắp xếp câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và tiếng ườn (uh). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp và thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại rau hoặc cách chế biến yêu thích). Sử dụng từ nối nếu cần giải thích lý do.

例: My favourite food is salad. I follow a vegetarian diet, so I often choose salads made with mixed greens, cherry tomatoes and avocado. I prefer them because they are fresh and help me stay healthy.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và dùng thì quá khứ phù hợp, tránh lặp từ và cụm từ không rõ nghĩa ("my pet"). Thêm một lý do ngắn gọn hoặc kỷ niệm cụ thể để làm câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

例: When I was young, I loved fried chicken. My parents often took me to restaurants and I always chose fried chicken because it tasted crispy and comforting to me.

提案: Câu trả lời hiện tại lủng củng và khó hiểu. Nên dùng cấu trúc mạch lạc: nêu rõ sự thay đổi theo mùa, đưa ví dụ cụ thể về loại trái cây theo mùa và lý do (hương vị, tươi mới). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ thừa.

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in summer I eat more mangoes and watermelon because they are refreshing, while in winter I prefer oranges and hot soups to stay warm.

提案: Cần diễn đạt rõ ràng sự thay đổi: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề cho biết thay đổi, sau đó nêu cụ thể món ăn từng thích và hiện tại thích gì, cùng lý do. Tránh lặp và sửa lỗi từ vựng ("leashed").

例: Yes, it has changed. As a child I preferred fast food such as spaghetti and fried chicken, but now I prefer fruits and vegetables because I want to maintain a healthier lifestyle, especially salads.

× Well, my favorite food is salad. Uh, uh, to be honest, I am a vegetarian and, and I really love to, uh, stay healthy, uh, without eating fast food, but I'm not trying to say that I, I don't eat fast food anything else, just I like vegetable and fruit more.

✓ Well, my favorite food is salad. To be honest, I am a vegetarian and I really try to stay healthy by not eating fast food, but I'm not saying I never eat fast food; I just prefer vegetables and fruit.

The student used inconsistent and redundant pronouns and informal fillers (uh, and, I, I). 'I don't eat fast food anything else' is incorrect pronoun and phrase usage. Use clear subject pronouns once and restructure the sentence for clarity. Suggest removing fillers and using 'I prefer vegetables and fruit' to express preference clearly.

× Well, when I was a young child, I like to I like to eat fried chicken, my pet.

✓ Well, when I was a young child, I liked to eat fried chicken; it was my favorite.

The sentence mixes past context ('when I was a young child') with present tense 'like'. Use past tense 'liked' to match the time frame. Also 'my pet' is incorrect here; likely intended 'my favorite'. Replace with 'it was my favorite'.

× To be honest, my parents often pick me up to the restaurant and I I merely eat fried chicken because I think that it is the most delicious food for me.

✓ To be honest, my parents often took me to restaurants and I usually ate fried chicken because I thought it was the most delicious food for me.

Use 'took me to restaurants' rather than 'pick me up to the restaurant'—incorrect preposition and verb tense. Also change present simple to past simple ('often took', 'usually ate', 'thought') to match past time frame. Remove duplicate 'I' and use 'usually' instead of 'merely' if meaning 'mostly'.

× Oh yes, definitely in different sections. I I can eat a variety of fruit.

✓ Oh yes, definitely in different seasons. I can eat a variety of fruit.

'Sections' is the wrong word; the correct preposition is 'seasons'. Remove duplicate 'I' and ensure 'a variety of fruit' is used (or 'fruits') depending on preference.

× For example, in summer we can eat with which is without another season and have a tasty smell.

✓ For example, in summer we can eat fruits that are not available in other seasons and that have a pleasant aroma.

This sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. Reconstruct sentence: use relative clauses 'fruits that are not available in other seasons' and 'that have a pleasant aroma'. Replace 'tasty smell' with 'pleasant aroma' and fix structure.

× Oh yes, absolutely. When I was a child, I just liked some fast food like spaghetti, fried chicken or things, right.

✓ Oh yes, absolutely. When I was a child, I liked fast food such as spaghetti and fried chicken.

Use past tense 'liked' for past time frame. Remove filler 'just' and 'or things, right' which are informal and vague. Use 'such as' to give examples.

× Uh, while nowadays, uh, I like to stay healthy, so I often, so at the top of the list is uh, is fruit and vegetable, for example, is leashed as salad.

✓ Nowadays, I try to stay healthy, so I often choose fruits and vegetables; at the top of the list are salads, for example.

Change 'I like to stay healthy' to 'I try to stay healthy' for natural expression. Use present tense consistent with 'nowadays'. Correct subject-verb agreement 'are' for plural 'fruits and vegetables'. Replace 'is leashed as salad' (nonsense) with 'salads, for example'. Remove fillers 'uh' and redundant phrases.