Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, reduce repetition, correct grammar, and add one specific detail about why you like it. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas.

例: My favorite food is biryani because of its rich, aromatic spices. For example, the saffron and roasted spices give it a fragrant smell, and I especially enjoy the tender meat and flavored rice which make lunchtime special.

提案: Answer directly with a clear past-tense sentence and avoid repetition. Give one specific memory or detail (who made it, how it tasted) and use a linking word to add reason.

例: When I was young, I loved my mother’s biryani because she used fresh spices and cooked it slowly, so it smelled wonderful. As a result, I associated biryani with family meals and comfort.

提案: Respond about current habits and seasonal changes rather than repeating childhood info. Use linking words (for example, in summer/ during festivals) and give one or two specific examples of seasonal foods.

例: Yes, I do. In summer I prefer light dishes like salads and grilled fish, while in winter I enjoy warming meals such as biryani or stews. For example, during festivals we often cook biryani with extra spices and meat.

提案: Give a clear comparison using past and present tenses. State whether it changed, explain briefly why, and avoid fillers. Use a linking word like "however" or "but" to contrast past and present.

例: Yes, it has changed somewhat. As a child I preferred fast food like pizza and burgers, but now I prefer biryani because I appreciate traditional flavors and home-cooked meals more.

× It's makes my it.

✓ It makes me happy.

The original uses 'It's makes' which incorrectly combines 'it is' and the third person singular verb 'makes'. Use either 'It makes' with object 'me' and an adjective to complete the idea. Also 'my it' is ungrammatical; replace with 'me happy' to convey the effect. Suggestion: use subject + third-person-singular verb (It makes) + object (me) + adjective (happy).

× It's makes my lunch time very special.

✓ It makes my lunchtime very special.

'It's makes' incorrectly combines 'it is' and the verb 'makes'. Use 'It makes' with third-person-singular verb form. Also 'lunch time' is better as the compound noun 'lunchtime'. Suggestion: use 'It makes my lunchtime very special.'

× And biryani and biryani made and biryani made a very aromatic spices.

✓ Biryani is made with very aromatic spices.

The original sentence repeats phrases and has incorrect verb form and article use ('a very aromatic spices' mixes singular and plural). Use passive 'is made with' to describe how biryani is prepared and plural 'spices'. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use correct passive structure and agreement between article and noun ('very aromatic spices' without 'a').

× So this is the reason I liked biryani.

✓ So this is the reason I like biryani.

The question asks about current favorite food so present tense 'I like' is appropriate. 'I liked' puts it in the past. Use present simple for general preferences. Suggestion: use present tense for current likes: 'I like biryani.'

× When I was younger, I liked I, I like biryani because it is my favorite food and biryani is prepared the aromatic spices and my mother and my, my, my mother makes up biryani, very tasty, very aromatic spices.

✓ When I was younger, I liked biryani because my mother made it with aromatic spices; it was very tasty and aromatic.

Original has repetition, incorrect verb forms ('is prepared the aromatic spices', 'makes up biryani'), and mixed tenses. For past time 'When I was younger' use past tense: 'liked' and 'made'. Use 'made it with aromatic spices' for correct verb and preposition. Remove repeated words and redundant phrases. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and clear clause order: subject + past verb + object + additional details.

× my mother makes up biryani

✓ my mother made biryani

'Makes up' is incorrect in this context; use 'made' (past tense) because sentence refers to past habit. 'Make up' has different meaning. Also ensure subject-verb tense matches time reference. Suggestion: use 'made biryani' for past habitual actions.

× When I was young I like biryani.

✓ When I was young I liked biryani.

Time clause 'When I was young' requires past tense 'liked', not present 'like'. Maintain tense consistency. Suggestion: use past tense in time clauses referring to the past.

× I like biryani because it was because biryani is prepared very aromatic spices and when I was child I liked fast food as a pizzas, burgers ETC.

✓ I liked biryani because it was prepared with very aromatic spices, and when I was a child I liked fast food such as pizzas and burgers.

Original repeats 'because', mixes tenses ('was' and 'is'), has incorrect preposition 'prepared very aromatic spices' (needs 'prepared with'), missing article 'a child', and incorrect use of 'as a pizzas'. Use 'such as' for examples and plural nouns without 'a'. Suggestion: use 'prepared with', include correct articles, and 'such as' to list examples.

× when I was child I liked fast food as a pizzas, burgers ETC.

✓ When I was a child, I liked fast food such as pizzas and burgers.

Missing article 'a child' and incorrect phrase 'as a pizzas'. Use 'such as' to introduce examples and plural nouns without 'a'. Keep past tense 'liked' consistent with 'When I was a child'. Suggestion: 'When I was a child, I liked fast food such as pizzas and burgers.'

× Yes, obviously my favorite food chain since, uh, when I was chilled, uh, when I was chilled I liked uh, pizzas, burgers and when I was young I like biryani.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child; when I was a child I liked pizzas and burgers, and when I was young I liked biryani.

Original has wrong word 'chilled' instead of 'child', tense errors ('food chain' instead of 'changed', 'I like biryani' should be past), and disfluencies. Use present perfect 'has changed' to talk about change since a point in the past, and past simple 'liked' for childhood preferences. Suggestion: use 'has changed since I was a child' and keep past tense for past preferences.